11 Terrible College Essay Topics To Avoid
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Over the past 10 years of brainstorming and editing college essays for Ivy Leagues/Top-tier applications, I’ve read thousands of essays that made me want to cringe.
It doesn’t matter if you’re a straight A student or a student with a list of accomplishments from MUN and Robotics Club. If you can’t demonstrate who you are in a compelling way, college admission officers will move onto the next applicant. Remember, on average, college admission officers spend about 5-8 minutes reviewing YOUR application and essays.
In other words, you need to catch their attention quickly.
In other words, your essay topic is going to play a SIGNIFICANT role in getting accepted or rejected.
To help you out, I’ve listed out 11 terrible college essay topics that you should avoid at all costs.
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@jillian5416 3 жыл бұрын
*What not to write about:* 1. Accomplishments that are already listed in your resume 2. How awesome your mom/dad//other relative is. Focus on yourself! 3. A narrative story that doesn't really relate to yourself (ex: a story of how you went to the dentist) 4. Complaints about school or any other excuse as to why you didn't succeed in something 5. An essay that's too creative/funny/something you're not 6. Only one extracurricular. Try to connect it to yourself 7. Self-pitying or any major depressive moments 8. Clichés you'd find in movies (ex: rags to riches) 9. Controversial/political topics 10. Anything that doesn't relate to your interests/goals/values 11. Hypothetical situations that you *want* to do in the future, or things you did in middle school
@thiagogregory1 3 жыл бұрын
So I can write about nothing?
@azulmora9777 3 жыл бұрын
thiago winters I KNOW, RIGHT?
@itsjoooe9517 3 жыл бұрын
@@thiagogregory1 lmaooo right 😭
@kikikira8416 2 жыл бұрын
I wrote about getting embarrassed in front of class after no one voted for my drawing for the yearbook and how that motivated me to get better at art
@davinamalcolm1677 2 жыл бұрын
Thank you
@itscarolina837 4 жыл бұрын
I’m sure u hear this a lot But I really have nothing to write about
@thiagogregory1 3 жыл бұрын
yup same, i'm a sophomore tho so i have time
@aquadust 3 жыл бұрын
i've read an essay that was simply about a person's morning routine and another one about someone going through their closet. they both ended up at really great colleges so there's no way you don't have nothing to write about! it can be something really simple :) i believe in you!
@nightsky733 3 жыл бұрын
It's the smallest things that count :,)
@bigpooper4156 2 жыл бұрын
What's something you're interested in? Why are you interested in it? What part of it is the most important part to you? Why's that? Has the interest changed the way you interact with the world? Has it changed your thinking process? If you don't have an interest like that, why not? Are you looking to change that? Do you have any motivations? What are they and why? How did you find them? When? What was the best or worst part of your life? What have you grown from or learned from it? How do you wish to replicate or prevent it? What made that moment so great or awful? Who do you look up to? Why do you look up to them? What part of them is so important to you? Etc
@aminaa77 3 жыл бұрын
yes I'm the main character in a really bad movie
@ilhamesm7482 3 жыл бұрын
fr like who would wanna watch this
@CC-dc6hv 3 жыл бұрын
🤣🤣🤣
@marianaalvarez8785 3 жыл бұрын
When ur essay Lowkey falls into 4 of the topics 👁💧👄💧👁
@bigfatcarrot 4 жыл бұрын
With all due respect human rights are not i politics and if a college won’t accept you for speaking about what you believe in than that’s not the college for you.
@gabby7966 3 жыл бұрын
period.
@dontknow8548 3 жыл бұрын
@@gabby7966 what
@toshitroyer5595 3 жыл бұрын
@@gabby7966 periodt
@toshitroyer5595 3 жыл бұрын
periodt
@bibble348 3 жыл бұрын
I saw this essay where this guy got into Harvard for literally talking only about systemic racism. His essay barely talked about himself. I think it’s all in how you articulate.
@carsoncomplains 4 жыл бұрын
Basic note you should keep in my mind while watching this video: these topics aren’t completely null and void. The main thing is that you tie the topic to how it represents your identity.
@nikkinicole4990 3 жыл бұрын
Thank you this helps a lot, I haven’t written mine yet but I have an idea I feel very strongly about as i believe it explains who I am as a person. It definitely fits into the categories but I hope I can still write it about this.
@moirawu6686 4 жыл бұрын
I'm writing about how I am learning and discovering more about my father through his books and speeches. (He passed away, and he was a professor.) And how i am learning from him despite not having a typical Father-daughter relationship. Thoughts? xxxx
@ashlynackerman6242 4 жыл бұрын
Momo Wu that’s really good it’s personal and unique 👍🏽
@hannahm.3606 4 жыл бұрын
make sure you focus on yourself; don't make the main focus him.. if that makes sense
@kiinara8670 4 жыл бұрын
learning and discovering yourself through his vintages, focus on how you've become someone better from it. Also' goodluck!
@tejasappana4097 3 жыл бұрын
yes i agree, i think the topic is very original and has great potential, but make sure you avoid talking too much about him and make sure the focus of your essay is you
@tunca9709 3 жыл бұрын
Did it work?
@wenufoop822 2 жыл бұрын
4:05 Honestly it was sort od the opposite for me. I struggled with writing my essay because I was given an amazing education, I just haven't experienced any trauma or blatent disadvantages in my life (which typically make for a very compelling essay). The most traumatic experienced I faced was moving from Connecticut to Massachussetts between 8th and 9th grade, but that type struggle happens to millions each year, which makes it a topic to avoid. I just feel like I didn't get the chance to have the specific moment of massive personal growth, it just kind of happened gradually in an uninspiring way.
@princezzpuffypants6287 Жыл бұрын
Trauma and big life altering events are an "easy" choice for a topic, but one does not need to experience something outside of the norm in order to experience dramatic personal growth. Something as prosaic as daytime TV can trigger an epiphany that changes the way you look at the world. If you can demonstrate an ability to shift your perspective regardless of worldy experience, you're going to look good to admissions officers. Maybe you've read something profound or witnessed a friend, neighbor, classmate or someone you've volunteered with go through something that changed your perspective.... if not, consider volunteering at a shelter, hospice or nursing home...
@jimmysteinbeck3391 4 жыл бұрын
what if my entire passion and what sets me apart is rooted in a controversial subject.
@xxvielkaswagxx 4 жыл бұрын
Ferraw Dunbar theres a video on here of a guy talking about his essay, he was accepted into many ivys and he ultimately chose Princeton. In the video his essay on “why Princeton” was talking about the advertisement of a Marxist club in Princeton (he doesn’t like Marxist) he came off as comical and charismatic. If you can translate and articulate yourself well, you’ll make it :3.
@angelam8719 3 жыл бұрын
Andromeda Lestrange what’s his channel name?
@xxvielkaswagxx 3 жыл бұрын
Angela M this is the video kzfaq.info/get/bejne/rNqcptxor7fOZX0.html
@angelam8719 3 жыл бұрын
Andromeda Lestrange thank you!
@lolunderstated533 3 жыл бұрын
You shouldn’t form your identity around your political opinions or around controversial things. Colleges want to see who you are, not your opinions on politics or pseudo political topics. I see this a lot from kids coming out of high school; they always form their entire identity around wether they are for or against social justice - this isn’t an identity. Are you an artist? What are your hobbies (genuine hobbies, not protesting or counter protesting)? where did you grow up and what did you learn growing up and from whom? What makes you different? What are your academic interests and goals? These are actual pieces of your identity that are much more meaningful than what you think about our current president or your position on trans issues. Don’t fall into the trap that too many kids fall into these days.
@raghavdembla7164 3 жыл бұрын
Me scrolling thru comments to find a generous person who has made a list so I can skip the video. Hard luck ;)
@raghavdembla7164 3 жыл бұрын
@brian y I am no better XD
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@popcorncat123454321 3 жыл бұрын
What not to write about: 1. Accomplishments that are already listed in your resume 2. How awesome your mom/dad//other relative is. Focus on yourself! 3. A narrative story that doesn't really relate to yourself (ex: a story of how you went to the dentist) 4. Complaints about school or any other excuse as to why you didn't succeed in something 5. An essay that's too creative/funny/something you're not 6. Only one extracurricular. Try to connect it to yourself 7. Self-pitying or any major depressive moments 8. Clichés you'd find in movies (ex: rags to riches) 9. Controversial/political topics 10. Anything that doesn't relate to your interests/goals/values 11. Hypothetical situations that you want to do in the future, or things you did in middle school (from another comment)
@CC-dc6hv 3 жыл бұрын
Right n no one has😕😒
@Majestic469 4 жыл бұрын
For number 6, there’s nothing wrong about writing about only one activity. The right suggestion should be about connecting it to your values and who you are.
@charliephillips51 4 жыл бұрын
This comment helped me. Thanks man
@davidmorales2859 4 жыл бұрын
I wrote my essay on the American Dream mainly about how everyone has their own version and how I’m still developing mine for the future
@Brandon-me2qr 3 жыл бұрын
shit topic ur gonna fail L L L L L L L
@christosjoseph9984 3 жыл бұрын
Meme Ord I’m guessing y’all are friends
@denisseannecargado1603 3 жыл бұрын
I really appreciated this video, very helpful thank you. Is there a way you can help me with my college essay ? I’ve already constructed an idea of how I can express myself to the college admissions but I need some help in figuring out if I should continue what I started or change my direction with it.
@nathanrock5765 3 жыл бұрын
My topic is hugely depressive. It’s about my experiences with cutting, suicidal friends (alive and passed), and an emotionally and physically abusive relationship that lasted over a year and a half. More than that though I want it to be about how I persevered through those challenges and how they’ve shaped me for the better. Would this be too depressing or should I continue on with it? Any feedback would be hugely appreciated.
@nathanrock5765 3 жыл бұрын
Additionally I want to cover how working through those experiences taught me to be empathetic but also how to be able to care about myself. A really life changing moment happened for me when my friend took his own life and I found myself that night trying to cut into myself with a broken pencil. That was the last time I ever did anything like that. I left my abusive relationship soon after. I learned that life is too precious to hurt yourself.
@sofiaserna3784 3 жыл бұрын
I’ll just be honest, this is sort of overdone. I have absolutely no credentials but I recognize this is something you’ve grown from, and that’s great. But when you write it you’re going to have to be very careful about not sounding like you feel bad for yourself. Also try to find a unique twist on it so it’s not the typical “I went through this hard thing and grew from it” Essay. If you choose your words wisely and present it in a unique way, this could be a great essay. Just be careful.
@carolinelloyd3717 3 жыл бұрын
I am writing about how every year in high school something traumatic happened to me and how I grew into a stronger and more independent person. Freshman year my house was foreclosed upon. Sophmore year my mom was hit by a drunk driver and is still recovering. Junior year I was admitted into the hospital for Acute Pancreatitis and lost 20 pounds. Is this cliche?? Somebody please help?
@LeilaLiT 3 жыл бұрын
I’m not a professional but that sounds like a great essay
@nohoranavarrochang8120 3 жыл бұрын
It sounds like it’s going to be great, but I think what matters the most is how you put it into words, and how it comes across
@alexkim3084 3 жыл бұрын
This could be a good essay but try to not make the tone too sad because that won’t really excite the AO
@hararazzaq5405 2 жыл бұрын
This is one of the best videos I've watched in a long tine about college essays. When you said that the college essay shouldn't have just narrative components and that it's actually made of persuasive, argumentative, opinionated, and narrative components all in one, that was very much a wake up call. That cleared it up so much and you were the only person who could find a simple way to say what this essay is supposed to have.
@joaquinaperalta4982 4 жыл бұрын
Hi, I want to write about how the memories (expectative, character, attitud) of the people that interacts with us, can affect our way of acting... I don't know if its sounds too dramatic.
@Comrade_Zaz 2 жыл бұрын
6 is not correct You can definitely write about your experience in an extracurricular and how it shaped yourself Meaning don't write about *what* the activity was instead write about *why* you choose that activity and *how* it impacted you
@javiernino-sears7145 3 жыл бұрын
you're an exact lookalike to the mom of the rich family in Parasite omg
@blusho610 3 жыл бұрын
you talking about the daughter?
@craftideas4062 3 жыл бұрын
U read my mind!!! 😯
@patrochilles6275 3 жыл бұрын
A younger version of Miss. Do it clockwise
@fabiolaarauz4439 3 жыл бұрын
I have seen a lot of vids like this, some even from adults that tell you what NOT to write about and your vid is by far the best one I have seen. You talk about the subtle topics that could be viewed as great topics or great ways to go about writing your essay but really aren't. Great vid! Should be the top one that comes up on KZfaq.
@kaylanhicks6595 3 жыл бұрын
thinking of writing my common app essay center around the quote “life is like a box of chocolates” and how it relates to my life as a military dependent and how unpredictable much of my life has been. thoughts?
@Lily-hu6ww 3 жыл бұрын
Yes!!! Sounds great
@alexawermuth1219 3 жыл бұрын
What if the prompt is "describe your greatest challenge and how you overcame it" then you can obviously complain abiut your challenge right? Before explaining how you overcame it?
@katesaltel 3 жыл бұрын
Hi! I want to write about a specific situation where I had to push through my anxiety to follow through. Is that a bad idea? Do you recommend not talking about anxiety? Is anxiety a red flag to admissions officers?
@derekhe6816 3 жыл бұрын
Anxiety itself isn't a bad topic, but make sure to focus on how the situation has changed you and shaped you to be who you are today. It has to be a unique experience and show how you offer a unique perspective to the world.
@carolynjeung1944 3 жыл бұрын
Some people say not to write about mental illness because often it comes across as being too negative. But as long as you can write it in a more postive manner, or like focus on the positive that came out of all that negativity, that's fine :)
@tanayapickering4605 3 жыл бұрын
Focus on how it affected work and then how you overcame or dealt with these issues. They are less likely to let you in if you won’t be able to cope
@jailahgillette333 2 жыл бұрын
I was going to write a collage application essay about toxic beauty standards the title was going to be named “am I’m choosing to perceive myself as ugly? Why?” Or “Is there a true definition to beauty?” Is this bad?
@noha.2528 3 жыл бұрын
As an international student at the beginning I talked about my limited resources then about my curiosity as a kid which led me to learn english by myself and then my fear of failure and how I overcame it as a teen and at the end what I learned from it 🤷🏿♀️
@The-Patrick 3 жыл бұрын
hi noha where are u from ? and what univ you have applied to ? talking about limited resources is not a good idea
@noha.2528 3 жыл бұрын
@@The-Patrick hello I'm originally from sudan but I studied in saudi Arabia I'm applying for Simmons university in Boston I've already submitted my essay the whole essay wasn't about my limited resources it was just the beginning since I came from a lower income family
@idonotwishtotell 3 жыл бұрын
Any update,dear?
@noha.2528 3 жыл бұрын
@@idonotwishtotell yes oh my god I actually got accepted into two universities in America one was simmons and the other one was new havan however I didn't get a full scholarship but I did get the highest scholarship in both of the universities and It's sad but i won't attend them since there is a better full scholarship that I might get accepted into but not in America .
@Luvr652 3 жыл бұрын
I broke both arms and ended my gymnastics career, it put me into a depression but through it I got to experience new things I never had time for. Is that ok?
@nikkinicole4990 3 жыл бұрын
That sounds like it could be amazing. I think it’s a lot of what you make it, written well that essay topic has great potential, especially if you tie it to like an epiphany about life or who you are as a person. Good luck !
@joseescalona4253 5 жыл бұрын
I want to talk about overcoming adversity, and how I was able to now in high school join the drama club, dance team, and gay-straight alliance. I moved here from venezuela when I was 11, and I would always be shamed for liking things boys there usually don’t like, things that are more “feminine” or things girls would usually do. I was able to begin pursuing my passion of musical theatre and activism, after moving to the U.S even though I faced many challenges as a kid that always tried to bring me down.
@WriteYourAcceptance 5 жыл бұрын
This is really great! Make sure you show (in story form) a moment of adversity and then a moment of triumph...of nurturing your palate for the arts! Also think about spending time with analysis. Maybe a buzz word to drop in would be gendered expectations! Good luck. Hope this helps.
@joseescalona4253 5 жыл бұрын
Write Your Acceptance Thank you so much! Is there anything else you would add?
@WriteYourAcceptance 5 жыл бұрын
@@joseescalona4253 less info more style is what I would focus on next. I have a free college essay guide on my channel homepage top right with tips.
@brodiaea 2 жыл бұрын
hi!! as venezuelan lesbian immigrant, seeing your comment really touched my heart :-) best of luck for you!!
@adikkya8205 Жыл бұрын
write about YOU. It doesn't matter if it's a topic in this video, just write about YOU. ( for example, if you're genuinely funny, or creative, then make your essay creative/funny.) Write in a compelling way, and make sure it's actually MEANINGFUL to your life though.
@sydney7powell 4 жыл бұрын
My topic is about writing a eulogy for my grandfather's funeral and how I grew from that experience. Is that cliche?
@jadyndavis2268 4 жыл бұрын
Not at all because it's your grandfather and no one elses so it's unique to you.
@naughti_penguin2340 4 жыл бұрын
that is the opposite of cliche
@chl03.88 4 жыл бұрын
so if you have written a research paper, but it's in the process of getting published, is that still ok to talk about?
@thatsoolivia7176 4 жыл бұрын
Definitely!!!
@rachel_elizabeth3152 3 жыл бұрын
I want to write about how I have written down my thoughts every single day for the past 4 years in a memory book. In it, I want to talk about how I’ve learned what it truly means to self reflect and how my biggest influence is myself. Does this sound like a good topic? Please be honest, I can take it 😉😆
@rachel_elizabeth3152 3 жыл бұрын
Waehle Vibes Thank you so much for the feedback! I appreciate it!! 🥰
@miar3721 3 жыл бұрын
I am the main character? 🥺
@AnaClaraSegal 2 жыл бұрын
I have a question. If I write an essay about financial hardship/poverty, would this shed some light on my background in a way that will help colleges evaluate my application into perspective, or this doesn't make any impact in the way they will look at my accomplishments? I am super confused if I should talk about poverty at the common app essay, because even though it could help them understand my background, I will loose this space to have an awesome essay about something else, like art. Help me pleasee
@felipeavila9054 2 жыл бұрын
That's a great topic to write about! A peer I knew wrote about living in poverty and being homeless; she was admitted to Johns Hopkins. However, you need to make sure you begin the essay with how it affected you. Make sure you talk about how you grew and adapted despite your circumstances. Such an essay will show the adversity you needed to overcome, but most importantly that you did not let your circumstances dictate your ability to succeed. If written well, the biggest theme will be your resilience.
@CC-dc6hv 3 жыл бұрын
So.... what are we supposed to write about then?
@parker5323 3 жыл бұрын
How about writing about how I had a major brain surgery when I was 12. And saying how I was told I shouldn’t be in school for at least 2 months after it but I went 2 weeks after it and say how school was my happy place.
@nikkinicole4990 3 жыл бұрын
I don’t know anything about what colleges think about this but I’ve been told as long as you tie it into your identity, drive, etc it can be amazing (obviously also depends on writing skills lol) but I think it’s safe to say that you can easily tie that into your identity. Good luck !
@regrets3672 3 жыл бұрын
I was planning on writing about how moving to my current state in middle school completely disrupted my whole life and academics (completely unprepared for being placed in honors coming from a below average school) but through rigorous studying, reaching out to teachers and finding my passion in social sciences helped me to become the academically driven student I am now. Is that still a good topic or is it too depressing/self pitying and boasting?
@zecbonoesz6477 Жыл бұрын
I'm a year late but that essay is too basic
@zecbonoesz6477 Жыл бұрын
Cliche*
@francescacucci6865 4 жыл бұрын
Hi! I want to talk about how I live kind of a split life because of Pre-Menstrual Dysphoric Disorder. Half my life I am happy, excited and overall passionate and around my period I am hopeless, angry and depressed. To gain control over this I began plotting my life in spreadsheets to examine the relationships between my activities and my mood and become more aware of myself. Biology class made me realize how out of my control this is and how interesting and complex the human body is. I want to know if there is any way to talk about this without sounding self-pitying! I also want to incorporate my love for science (especially physics and biology), but please let me know if I should just scrap the idea entirely.
@kita4614 4 жыл бұрын
This may or may not be late but, if you focus less on your disorder and more of how you took the problem at hand and turned your crutch into something that's made you more optimistic, critical thinking and organized. For example the center of your essay could be the first time you made a spreadsheet, the beginning talking about your disorder and the end push for how that decisive moment changed your life and NOT the disorder that used to control you, you should be fine
@wadesultan5074 5 жыл бұрын
So I have high functioning autism and that has made a lot of things difficult for me. Despite this, I am in Model UN, a volunteer at an organization that helps people with disabilities (I just started because it took time to become capable of doing so) and have fairly good academics (3.8 UW GPA, 3.9 W) (UC: 3.74 UW, 4.04 UC, 4.19 W) and a 1440 SAT. Additionally, my curriculum was moderately difficult (6 APs and 3 Honors classes throughout high school, along with 2 classes at my community college) My school doesn't rank but I would guess top 25% at my school (very competitive). My application theme is likely going to be how I went from being helped a lot to being helped. I want to talk about the transition and how MUN really helped me get in my right mind. My top school is UCLA, but Rice, UCSB, and NYU are my next top 3. Any tips? Thank you!
@katzkradle1848 4 жыл бұрын
You should refer to Johns Hopkins essays that worked site, there’s someone who wrote an essay about the exact same thing...she had autism too and conquering it transformed her, she also did it through model un
@piecookies3488 3 жыл бұрын
I wrote my common app essay about my adventure in cricket breeding. So many dead crickets and unhatched eggs before my cricket farm became successful.
@emilyyalexis2309 3 жыл бұрын
i want to talk about an old trusted friend who stopped being my friend because of my sexuality. i was very reliant on her as well as others so i want to write about how i grew from this decline in my life and became independent and matured? i know its somewhat emotional but i would focus more on myself.
@Eric-ir3vc Жыл бұрын
Slay what you wanna slay and let the slay slout
@valeriachacon7625 3 жыл бұрын
My college essay is about why I want to major in criminal justice, and that being the fact i am a sexual assualt survivor... is that appropriate to talk about?
@OH-vh6vi 3 жыл бұрын
I’m wondering something similar.. am I allowed to talk about my foster care experience?
@valeriachacon7625 3 жыл бұрын
@@OH-vh6vi i feel like that is acceptable and doesnt make people as uncomfortable
@susankhong5692 3 жыл бұрын
lmao i love how im watching this after ive submitted to a bunch of schools already
@markus_park 3 жыл бұрын
wish you the best!
@idonotwishtotell 3 жыл бұрын
Hi! Any update,love?
@martaflorcremades282 3 жыл бұрын
I'm not sure about this, Do you think I should talk about how I realized my parents were abusing me after reflecting about my childhood after my dad got diagnosed with cancer? (At that time my grandma also had three strokes in a short period of time and I wanted to show it as a challenging period of my life)
@davidkaradine5093 3 жыл бұрын
Very sorry to hear that.
@martaflorcremades282 3 жыл бұрын
@@davidkaradine5093 Nah, it's ok, I just need to know what is the best way to tell my story without making it too uncomfortable to read in a college essay, or to not sound like I'm complaining.
@davidkaradine5093 3 жыл бұрын
@@martaflorcremades282 The best way to make it readable and likeable is neither keeping it long nor short , and you can realise that by setting the most important points and then elaborating them in short paragraphs after an intro and then closing by a conclusion. But I wonder why they need an essay to accept students in the university.
@cynthiak.527 3 жыл бұрын
To shortly explain an idea I have for my essay: I want to write about how I overcame welcoming from a pretty broken family with my only biological brother (this is the basic idea but there are other aspects involved)
@yasmineothman3891 3 жыл бұрын
So would I have to say "this makes me a good fit for this school because" after talking about the growth I went through?
@anamckiernan9838 3 жыл бұрын
No, that's not necessary because the fact that you're trying to persuade the reader that the school should accept you is implied :)
@kal-muzel875 4 жыл бұрын
I have this question to answer in 50 words What historical moment or event do you wish you could have witnessed? I am thinking about writing about a historical moment that relates to my religion and how that action by that women made me feel and how much she showed strength even as someone who was just broken I heard that I shouldn't write about religion and seeing that my sect is a minority in my religion so the topic itself is controversial if someone who is the same religion read it... I can't think of anything other than her stance that day that I would have wished to see What do you think of it?
@WriteYourAcceptance 4 жыл бұрын
If you don't want to go with something religious, you can always pick a historical event that connects with your major in some way, then talk about how that moment brings to life your intellectual pursuits. Overall, I wouldn't shy away with talking about religion as a lens to discuss identity and inclusive practices...what I would avoid doing is getting controversial about that actual teachings of any religion. good luck!
@kal-muzel875 4 жыл бұрын
@@WriteYourAcceptance thank you ^^ I will try my best
@kal-muzel875 4 жыл бұрын
@Benjamin Li they don't end do they?
@aliciabenshki5586 4 жыл бұрын
Something for you to remember is that picking religion as the basis of your essay is a little marginalized and in Common App essays it's less palatable to what is mostly written. Not to say that you shouldn't write about religion, but whentalking about religion, it is very easy for you to be biased which could make a reader uncomfortable . But I'll say that if you do want to talk about this historical event and how it related to your religion and how it affected you, then this religious event has to be unique. for example it has to be a part of a religion that no one has heard of, or that is hardly taken into consideration, this will then draw a reader closer to a new world that is unknown, and that will make your essay interesting. Or it could be in an academic perspective. But definitely do not forget to make the essay about you. Readers want to know why you would want to put yourself in that time period, in that historic perspective. Therefore try not to make the whole entire essay about this event in the past. . If you really want to write about religion, try to put your self in the shoes of the reader, and ask, is my writing going to make them feel uncomfortable. In all, just write it in different perspectives. Dont be too biased. Dont try to impose your religion or make is it the most superior thing in the world even though you may believe it is.. just write in a way that people who are not of your religion will able to freely read your essay and understand who you are through it.
@kal-muzel875 4 жыл бұрын
@@aliciabenshki5586 the reason I wanted to talk about it is because of how that event contradicts many stereotypes that people tend to have when it comes to women in my religion My main focus is that woman's strength and me being of a smaller sect not many talk about that event
@Check1313 3 жыл бұрын
This is how life begins
@nadaesawy7810 2 жыл бұрын
Is writing about divorce overused and I shouldn't write about it? But it really represents me and my story and I am sincere about it. My counselor told me it is common and nearly a story of 1 in 4 and not to write about it, but I love what I wrote and it ia my story. Answer me please!
@sethhahnhahn6316 3 жыл бұрын
As you stated in number 9 not to voice political views and number 4 not to complain, would speaking about how you have started a campaign / after school group voicing a topic you truly believed in be a good topic to state on a college essay?
@carolynjeung1944 3 жыл бұрын
Do you think i could talk about how in elementary school i saw my sister as the quintessential bad girl and decided to be like her, and then i realized that it wasnt worth it because i hated how people saw me and how i treated people and i wanted to be more like myself. And now i realize we cant just seek to emulste someone and have it work because what we see on the outside is only a sliver of who they really are?
@sparkle0859 3 жыл бұрын
that's very interesting and creative
@mr.purple7233 3 жыл бұрын
Maybe avoid the “don’t judge a book by its cover” cliche then it seems good otherwise.
@emilybeckett8207 3 жыл бұрын
I’d say to make sure to focus on yourself in high school/more recent self. Colleges don’t really like to hear abt struggles u had in 2nd grade if they didn’t affect the rest of your life. Just make sure it affects yourself and life in your HS academic career even though the problem started when u were in elementary. I hope this helps!
@sebastianwitt567 3 жыл бұрын
I've heard that you should avoid writing about service/mission trips. I understand that this is not necessarily unique, but is this rule valid?
@emmaeze8623 4 жыл бұрын
So I just moved to the United States from Africa and how hard it was, I am a bit antisocial and my essay is about me adjusting to the school pattern getting involved in school extracurricular activities is that a good start?
@WriteYourAcceptance 4 жыл бұрын
That's definitely a good start! Think about how you will show the difficulty of acclimating to your new environment, bring in rituals that feel really "American" in a high school, maybe bring a quick flashback to how different that exchange would have been back home...if you do this in the beginning consider then doing something similar in the end but an example that would feel pretty similar (universal) in experience whether in Africa or the US then consider reflecting on a lesson about how diversity is enriching our experiences but ultimately teaching us that we are always more similar than different. Good luck!
@aliciabenshki5586 4 жыл бұрын
That's what my essay was about tooooo
@ceci9570 4 жыл бұрын
Ok. This has nothing to do with this but why did you say 'Africa' . Its a huge continent and Im from Kenya so its pretty annoying when people say Africa. But that's ausome. Your idea is great😊
@aliciabenshki5586 4 жыл бұрын
@@ceci9570 I know me too, but in America and other continents, 'Africa' is used(at least by people who dont know that much about Africa) to refer to an African country. Sometimes you get people who ask, which part of africa, and them we answer, like for me it's Ghana. But you are right, we africans have to specific, cuz each african country has its own unique background. Personally, I'm guilty of saying Africa sometimes, to save myself from the five hundred and thirty questions that follow, sometimes I'm happy to answer those curious questions but sometimes I get tired of the same question every single day.
@farhananasrin7782 3 жыл бұрын
Did she just say Dhaka?
@Eric-ir3vc Жыл бұрын
Thanks bestie
@DarpanBarua 4 жыл бұрын
I have written 2 essays, is there any way I can send my essays to you so that you can provide some feedback?
@kabeerwaishampayan9512 4 жыл бұрын
Kaha apply kar Raha hai bro?
@nadeemzeki8410 4 жыл бұрын
I'm writing about heart break but I'm using my hair as an analogy. Relating unwanted trips to the barbershop and my hair being taken away from me to my heart being broken. Is that a good idea?? Pls reply (I'm a guy btw)
@aizaflores9824 3 жыл бұрын
This sounds amazing!!
@alexkim3084 3 жыл бұрын
Well did this heart break change u And I would stay away from sad topics because college admissions officer don’t want to hear a sob story, with all the respect man it’s just that the admissions officers have read thousands of essays
@alexkim3084 3 жыл бұрын
Unless u learned something from that experience
@amishnathawat2612 4 жыл бұрын
I'm in 12 grade is it too for me to prepare for Harvard as international undergraduate !!!??? PLEASE enlighten me 🥰😅
@rodainaabdelwhab1357 3 жыл бұрын
idk im just like you
@wiamerrahj1908 3 жыл бұрын
What did u do
@emmahan9160 3 жыл бұрын
"you don't want it to be about one extracurricular activity" Me: ohhhh nooo that's what I- "I had a student who only wrote about deca" Me: OHHH NOOOOO Lemme go die now bye :D
@yallaintit 2 жыл бұрын
Bruh 1-2 sentences on a serious topic? If you went through something traumatic and it affects your life, it's going to be more than 1-2 sentences.
@priscillatarble 3 жыл бұрын
Can I do mines on humanitarianism? I’ve noticed that a lot lately
@bumbumrishabh1224 3 жыл бұрын
Sounds good but do you have your views on it,because they don't want u to reiterate words from a professional in humanitarianism
@mallikasingh3427 3 жыл бұрын
Hiii i am from india can you please help me with my essay writing ?
@ConquerCollegeAdmissions 5 жыл бұрын
Share your essay topics down below!
@slimepandaxoxo3535 4 жыл бұрын
Conquer College Admissions hey! Im a 7th grader, and we have to make an essay, and its the first time we’re getting grades in School. And im lost for topics. Do you Think ‘me in 10 years’ is a good topic? Do you have advice for me? 😃
@meghanbroadwater1856 4 жыл бұрын
My essay is about my passion for building legos and why it’s caused me to want to be an aerospace engineer :)
@OfficialSilverMoon 4 жыл бұрын
@@meghanbroadwater1856 that's super creative
@meghanbroadwater1856 4 жыл бұрын
Silver Moon Thank you!!
@marinomave4613 4 жыл бұрын
How i watched Hindi movies without subtitles every weekend for 3 years, but i still didn't learn that language. That taught me something for sure.
@Winter_Coco02 3 жыл бұрын
I know this is off topic but you're so beautiful. Also I'm having a hard time talking about myself.
@Milltickt 3 жыл бұрын
what about writing about police brutality against blacks and how it effects me?
@anakarencampos5376 Жыл бұрын
someone to judge my essay plssss
@baridakara 3 жыл бұрын
video starts at 1:16
@bakugobackpack1602 3 жыл бұрын
Tbh I am against sob story essays. Like the administrator isn't your therapist like if I was the administrator it would just be like bad for you, I will pray for u but that doesn't get u into a college
@tinat5484 Жыл бұрын
I wrote about obesity
@bartfart3847 4 жыл бұрын
NERDS !
@bartfart3847 4 жыл бұрын
@@TheWSYNkatevy153 Im just kidding. Good Luck getting into college.
@rebeccalafortune3317 2 жыл бұрын
John 11:25-26 - Jesus said to her, “I am the resurrection and the life. Whoever believes in me, though he die, yet shall he live, and everyone who lives and believes in me shall never die. Do you believe this?
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