Too much too fast, slow down, widen story segments, and form chapters you put multi chapter in one small chapter . Yes and where the weak fleet your story talks about it seems like one ship no chat about multiple ships, fleet implys there more than one ,and once you see what going on the earth ship would phone home for more troops so yes i feel like it was not enough ,maybe just pick one battle not lots ,sometimes less is more if doing a short story ,with all this said thank you for the time took and the post .

I think this is AI generated. Repeated sentences and use of "palpable".

Too much repetition in this story. Three battles, two and three copies of the first.