I wrote a story in close third (When the Wood Is Dry), and mostly used the seamless method. But, at times, especially when thoughts drifted into prayer or self-talk, it seemed more natural and impactful to change to first person, present tense, which I put in italics. These moments are something between conversation and thought. When people observe things at a certain level, it works to just write it in third person, but when the character is talking to himself, it just doesn't seem natural, especially when praying. Because it seemed so unnatural to write inner thoughts in third person, I drafted them in first person then converted them to third. This trick helped me to really place myself in the place of each character, and get the narrative very close. When converting the inner thoughts, some just seemed not to work as well in third person. Consider this inner thought from me story: They think I'm a whore. If I put this in third person, past tense, it would be: They thought she was a whore. I felt first-person present in italics made this kind of line more impactful. It just seems so much more distant in third person, past tense. I took the risk that this flipping of tense and person would not be disorienting or jarring, though this particular line is meant to be a bit jarring. If you are interested in how this method works in context, the EBook for "When the Wood Is Dry" is free, so look it up and check it out. See what you think...
@brenkelly81633 жыл бұрын
I just like the italics still. It makes the thought set aside and more personal. But I like different methods and grown to see distinctions in style as better than only one method, such as quotes or dashes or or italics or nothing to indicate speech.
@justcallmemarcus3 жыл бұрын
I try to use the first method as much as possible.
@tomlewis47483 жыл бұрын
Me, too.
@TomorrowWeLive3 жыл бұрын
The first method is known as 'free indirect style' and was pioneered in the 19th century. I only use the second tow methods when the character is 'saying' something in first person inside their head (and the narrative itself is not first person). The first method is more appropriate for literary fiction, whereas the second, and especially the third are more common in genre fiction, where the focus is on serving things up more blatantly to the reader/making their experience as straightforward and 'easy' as possible. Punctuation and formatting tricks help in this regard, whereas LitFic authors tend to disdain them, often to an extreme degree (*cough* Cormac McCarthy). The last method in particular would not fly with a LitFic editor/publisher. That said, my favourite book of all time (which would probably be considered upmarket women's fiction in modern terms) uses it, so I do too.
@jamesstallworth43762 жыл бұрын
Would you please share the title of your favorite "upmarket women's fiction" book. I write third-person omniscient with thoughts in italics. I'd like to review/study it. Thanks.
@JessieWinterspring Жыл бұрын
Thank you! I love to italized and worse method 3 sometimes, but my latest editor told me that my writing is strong, which is why I don't need to italized the internal monologue, now I understand why he recommended it. Thanks again
@durona Жыл бұрын
I used direct in my debut novel, but I'm using seamless for my new book. It's amazing how much smoother it reads! Thank you, as always, for another amazing video!
@skywriter95323 жыл бұрын
I like the use of italicized thoughts when the protagonist doesn't speak much. As a person with anxiety, internal thoughts are as important to me as speaking. And usually are more accurate to what I would like to say.
@adroitws13673 жыл бұрын
hmmm maybe this is the reason i subconsciously use the third method and i like it that way
@gudgud3 жыл бұрын
There's no problem with this, it's just a further psychic distance
@cutwir33173 жыл бұрын
If your character sees something frightening and run towards the exit in 3rd limited , isn’t that a thought? Or is it just what the character sees and behaves
@axelblaine16753 жыл бұрын
I guess I'm kinda off topic but do anyone know of a good website to stream newly released series online?
@marktomlinson64483 жыл бұрын
Interesting thoughts. I've got a story about an alcoholic, and I attempt to highlight his isolation by keeping a far psychic distance. The italics I use there, then, are probably appropriate. However, in other third-person POV stories, I attempt to get up close and personal with the protagonist. So, I probably should review my use of italics and occasional tags in those cases. Often, my characters have thoughts that don't align with what they are saying while conversing with another character. I'm concerned that it may become unclear and confusing if the POV character's thoughts are not specifically called out as such. I'll give it a try and see what happens.
@loristeed96533 жыл бұрын
I think this is a great example of how different methods can really enhance a special story, whereas it might just get in the way if used often for a romance or other books that fit well in their genre.
@loristeed96533 жыл бұрын
Vindication! I had been out of the writing loop for awhile. I joined a new writing group & suddenly half my story needed to be in italics because the main character was thinking. Which is something I rarely see in the traditionally published books by nytimes list authors. I'm thrilled to hear that I wasn't doing it wrong. :)
@heatherhaigh3 жыл бұрын
That's really helpful thank you. I've been experimenting recently and finding myself drawn to using seamless more and more.
@rachelthompson93243 жыл бұрын
I use the first method but add italic every so often judiciously to remind the reader of important internal thoughts, or what is primary info outside of ground narrative. Long internal dialogues can be broken up this way as well. Mostly, written well ,internal need not be tagged at all. Tolkien mixes things up. In the Hobbit, he does it as an omniscient narrator close to the MC of the scene, but he will head-hop thoughts occasionally (Very well done, I might add) when it matters to move forward or build interest. He delineates with paragraph changes. His method is seamless while breaking conventions and it reads like third person. Good job on this BTW
@cjpreach3 жыл бұрын
Shaelin - I appreciate the subtleties of nuance between these three types of thought expression. Very nice. Great instruction.
@ACD953 жыл бұрын
For a character that is slowly losing his/her mind I like to italicize the voice inside their head, but more like it’s the devil on their shoulder. Maybe it’s an artistic choice. 🤷♂️ However, for internal thoughts, I just write it like normal first person narration and never put “I think to myself.” That should already be a given since it’s first person narration yet I’ve seen it done numerous times.
@milestrombley14663 жыл бұрын
I will definitely use the seamless method.
@fatima-purposefullybeautif59502 жыл бұрын
thank you for the clarity. I've been writing a memoir and had little need for dialogue but i started writing a novel at the same time. My thinking is that if i get stuck on one, i can work on the other while i let my thoughts develop. Grammar has never been my forte and suddenly i'm faced with having to write tons of dialogue. When i read, dialogue often flows seamlessly and i've never taken note of how it is written because my focus has been on the story. This video has been of tremendous help. Thank you
@Finnleigh.Jackson41417 ай бұрын
Thanks, Shaelin, very well explained!
@akazlev3 жыл бұрын
Thanks for this talk. I've been using the seamless method, with third person and close psychic distance. But as I wasn't sure if this was the correct method I used italics once or twice. Now I can remove the italics and just use seamless throughout.
@ejwrites12 жыл бұрын
I do a mix of the seamless and the italics. The seamless is for the characters POV I’m working on and then the italics will be negative, intrusive thoughts that the character(s) have on top of their own.
@personanongrata987 Жыл бұрын
After over fifteen years of studying interior monologue (or whatever you call it) and doing my own novel writing, I was surprised to find that I agreed with everything you said. I read a wide variety of authors of multiple genres--past and present--and I've found seamless preferable. Common interior monologue markers in limited third-person perspective narration are questions, and short incomplete sentences which are often only one or two words long. A question, or a one or two word long sentence, ought not be interpreted as the hidden narrator at work, but seen as the thoughts of the single POV character. --
@Seraphelle133 жыл бұрын
Heck yeah, I've been hoping for this one! (Now to go do A LOT of editing)
@Sasha95II4 ай бұрын
Thank you for this! After watching this video, I realized that I am already writing in a seamless format. I questioned it because I have seen the filtered format used and recently the direct format used. I am not a fan of the direct format with the use of italics. I will say the italics of internalized monologue can be confusing. I am already having to clear the confusion for my students in a novel we are currently reading. Meanwhile the direct format is just redundant!
@wellsfiction5063 жыл бұрын
I needed this so much. Thanks!
@Elslein3 жыл бұрын
I write in 1st and in 3rd person, and I use mostly the first method. Sporadically the second, and then less for clarity and more for aesthetic reasons (the melody or the look of the sentence or paragraph). As for using italics for thoughts, I think it tends to make the narrative too self-conscious and heavy.
@darknightofthesoul76282 жыл бұрын
Excellent analysis.
@tsgarpsteve68443 жыл бұрын
Great advice!
@gate_concepts Жыл бұрын
Thanks This is really helpful, just gotta decide which is better for my novel
@tomlewis47483 жыл бұрын
Stories can be both character-driven and plot-driven, and some moments are more one than the other. Using method one seems to help sometimes when we want the passage to be more plot-driven because it focuses less on the character and more on the plot, and using method two seems to help sometimes when we want to passage to be more character-driven, because it draws attention to the character and away from the plot. Method three is also known as free indirect style. It seems to me the only time this really is useful is when a character is essentially interacting with another character, and they have a thought that they don't want to express out loud that the reader still would benefit from knowing. Especially if the thought is emotional. A great example of this is Clarice Starling's reactions to the prison warden in The Silence of the Lambs. She's courteous to the warden, but underneath we can see that she's seething and thinks she's being treated badly. When used like this, this method seems to work. It also works for emotional thoughts in internal monologue. It also can make third person work a little bit more like first person, because we can clearly see the character having thoughts rather than being told they are having thoughts by the narrator. So the three methods can all be used in the same story. But it's best to pick your spots. In other words, I wouldn't recommend randomly switching from one method to another for no particular reason. But you can have reasons that make sense that allow you to switch between the three methods, such as those reasons stated above.
@YoniSagi2 жыл бұрын
When I wrote in first-person present tense, and got to narrative pieces that went very quickly (i.e. action pieces), it seemed that internal thoughts could sometimes jumble with descriptions of what was being perceived to the point of it being confusing. When these jumblings happened, I preferred to use italics for internal thoughts, unless I wanted to leave the distinction between thought and perception vague on purpose. Also, because body language and action go hand-in-hand with dialogue and these are almost never italicized, I sometimes preferred to italicize the narrator's thoughts when they jump in during/between pieces of dialogue, as some of those times the thoughts felt jarring when left written normally. Just my two cents.
@TaniasWritingRealm2 жыл бұрын
This was helpful thank you. I've been struggling with first person internal dialogue. I often lean towards italics but i have seen stories without that as well.
@ludwigvanel91923 жыл бұрын
What good timing you have, Shaelin! I will also beapplying the seamless method in my WIP, even though I instinctively tended to use italics
@clarkkent32982 жыл бұрын
Well done.
@JCStorytellerllc Жыл бұрын
Thank You.
@happydayssunny78303 жыл бұрын
Great upload
@gamewriteeye7692 жыл бұрын
I use italics for direct when the narrator wants to "stress" something they're thinking or talking about.
@mattyman5dodge1013 жыл бұрын
Great video - very informative. There is another reason to use Italics though. A writer can break all the rules in Italics. Use the forbidden filter words, etc. Not supposed to do that if at all possible without them...
@terrypatterson14813 жыл бұрын
Hi Shaelin, could you run an idiots guide to using the Reedsy editing app step by step. I don't know that much about editing, I've watched your vlogs on editing and the different types of editing there is but I would like to know how to actually use these tools. Many thanks - yours in scribble Terry.
@johnparnham5945Ай бұрын
I prefer to use italics but with occasional filtering.
@TheSirmousavi8 ай бұрын
So what do you think about this situation: my narrator is quite close to the pov character and so most of the thoughts are seamlessly incorporated. However sometimes I have an internal voice that directly addresses the pov character: You this or that. Now I'm wondering 1) whether that is at odds with 3rd person narration and 2) if that's confusing to have most thoughts seamless but then these occasional direct internal voices
@davidbasinski2634 Жыл бұрын
Please comment on writing internal arguments with self ie. Two voices.
@nicoledriscoll198411 күн бұрын
In a critique website I’m on a couple people have said to put the internal thoughts on a separate paragraph. Is that true?
@ryanmulhall65883 жыл бұрын
So, do you think it would be alright to jump back and forth between seamless and filtered? I think I have a habit of doing that.
@dcle9442 жыл бұрын
I like the first method, but I ran into a case where the narrator wonders what the character must do. So the line is “what must she do now?” I can’t figure out a way to put it in past tense, and I hate adding the “she thought” tag. I hate the italic too because I lose the format when I copy from one app to the other, which I tend to do when asking for feedback from beta readers. So I’m stuck.
@Zama359 Жыл бұрын
I'm hoping someone can help me with an internal thought issue that has me stymied. I'm writing my first novel, and am unsure if an author is expected to say a character thought (or equivalent) when the character's thoughts go on for multiple sentences. If a whole paragraph is nothing but their thoughts, would thought need to be used only once? I do plan on using italics for the actual thoughts themselves. Making this up, but a for instance: Version 1 Ms. Dagorshire is going to be furious at me for losing her cat while she was away thought Constance. Maybe I can skip town or take on a new identity; nah, if I know Ms. Dagorshire, there is nowhere I can hide if something happened to her precious snowflake because of me. Or would it be necessary to use thought or another similar word for the second sentence, since thought was used in the first sentence? Version 2 Ms. Dagorshire is going to be furious at me for losing her cat while she was away thought Constance. Maybe I can skip town or take on a new identity; nah, if I know Ms. Dagorshire, there is nowhere I can hide if something happened to her precious snowflake because of me mused Constance.
@armaansaini271 Жыл бұрын
How much inner thought in first person, italics is too much in third person POV? How many lines per page? Is a paragraph too much?
@williamhartin1627 Жыл бұрын
Great educational video! Much thanks. I have a question however. I've written a novel in third-person limited, with each chapter being told from a different character's POV. Would you recommend the first method (seamless), or the second method (filtered)? It's currently written in the second, and some of my beta readers have noted that technically, books need have a distinction between narration (even if it's third-person limited), and inner thoughts. Is this true? Everyone says the novel reads smoothly and is understandable; they are just giving me English writing technical notes. Any feedback would be much appreciated. Happy to give examples if need be.
@kez752110 ай бұрын
I am writing my book ( a fantasy) where the author of a book is magically summoned into her book by her protagonist. She shares the body with her but no one on the outside can hear her main character but her. Ive been struggling to know how to format this tbh. I think i may try and use italics for the books protagonist and the filtered for the my protagonist whilst they are talking and just have my protagonists thought in the text as seamless when they arent talking as the books protagonist is not aloway present. Is this good? Is it OTT?
@josefinasotes7963 жыл бұрын
I try to use the first one as much as possible, but I came to this video because, in the story that I'm working on right now, I want to make the reader feel as if they were right next to the character, like they are following them but they are not "them". Is it okay if I keep going with the seamless method?
@Amal-me4iv3 жыл бұрын
Does the first type, the seemless method, has a specific term in the creative writing field?
@esidarasun81513 ай бұрын
Where do the thoughts come from? How does a writer figure out what the character is thinking about? Everyone talks about formatting. No one talks about figuring them out in the first place.
@aledtaylor43423 жыл бұрын
Wouldn't thoughts always be in the present tense, (even in a past tense narrative) as the character can only think in the now? Past tense comments would be looking back on events that have happened previously and therefore be narration.
@Reedsy3 жыл бұрын
If you're writing in the filtered or direct methods, then you would write the thoughts in present tense (essentially those methods treat thoughts like dialogue), but if you were writing in the filtered method, you'd stick to past tense because the thoughts are being integrated into the narrative voice. Just like how the description in a past tense novel is a recollection of what the character saw at the time, the narrative would be a recollection of what the character thought at the time, so it can all go in past tense.
@PoulBendsen3 жыл бұрын
How to differentiate external dialog from internal dialog with a spiritual entity that no one else can hear. And then, what if you have several of those spiritual entities?
@umbrascitor20793 жыл бұрын
From my experience writing dialogue in telepathy: "Seamless" method for POV character's own private thoughts. Italics for intentional telepathic communication, with dialogue tags where necessary to distinguish the speaker (the same as normal dialogue, but using italics instead of quotation marks). Something like: * * * _This is your conscience,_ said a disembodied voice. Heheh... no. That can't be right. _Listen buddy. If you were really my conscience, you would know damn well that I don't have a conscience._
@ProjectAtlasmodling Жыл бұрын
it's not that bad of an idea to add a tag to the first italicized thought just so the reader knows that it indicates a thought, then not use the tag again
@danieltalis77113 жыл бұрын
I use speech marks around thoughts. It is speech, only internal. Martha turned onto her street but the street light was out. "Was there a power outage" she thought, "Maybe the light has been broken somehow?" Please correct me if this is wrong. :)
@Tiyev3 жыл бұрын
Well, I don't know if it's 'wrong' or not, but since the quotation marks are what is used to indicating a character is speaking, out loud, the reader might think for a second that the character started speaking out loud, until they get to the 'she thought'. Plus, you will then need to tag every bit of internal dialog with 'he/she thought' or run the risk of confusing the reader about whether they are speaking or thinking. Just think about it, every thought your character has will have to be followed closely by a 'she/he thought'. Over, and over, and over again, and again, and again. Long stretches of internal dialog won't need more than one near the beginning, but every time the internal dialog is broken up, it will require another dialog tag, everytime. There's no back and forth that allows you to skip a couple lines of dialog before tagging again, and unique character voices only helps the reader tell who said what, not whether a character is thinking something to themselves or thinking out loud. I normally don't want to tell people what to do, and I'm not trying to even now, but I kind of recommend using either italics, or seamless.
@danieltalis77113 жыл бұрын
@@Tiyev I see your point, but do you talk to yourself? I do and I also think to myself. I guess intuitively I just started using speech marks because it seemed appropriate. Internal or external, it is still speech and I can't find any rules that say that speech with speech marks needs to be 'out loud'. I write a lot of inner conversation using this method and find saying 'she thought' is only necessary periodically, once the reader gets the idea. I just wonder if it's officially sanctioned, so to speak.
@danieltalis77113 жыл бұрын
Did some research on this and all of my writer friends agree that a conversation regardless of external or internal requires speech marks . It's good to see people being innovative of course but I'm surprised that this option wasn't included in the video.
@thomasbibb667710 ай бұрын
Loved your information. Hated your imitation booger.
@jwstanley26454 ай бұрын
Too much chatter. To few clear examples. Remember, in teaching, as in fiction, show don't tell. Alos, very jarring editing.