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Terrible Writing Advice

Terrible Writing Advice

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When writing a war story, an author needs to keep low because you never know when you are going to get hit with a cliché! Let’s get down in the trenches to write a war story. We just need a few good men and we can march to victory, or at least good box office sales.
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@tyrantking9000
@tyrantking9000 7 жыл бұрын
Nothing is safe from the love triangle, not even the love triangle.
@ComradeDragon1957
@ComradeDragon1957 7 жыл бұрын
What about love Icosikaihenagons(Shape with 21 sides)
@Tracker947
@Tracker947 7 жыл бұрын
TheCommunistDragon Even they are not safe, as the triangles lurk within.
@tama3162
@tama3162 7 жыл бұрын
A shape with 21 sides? I think you mean a shape made up of 7 love triangles.
@Bruno-ec8ft
@Bruno-ec8ft 7 жыл бұрын
You tough love triangles were horrible, until you watch '' the host'' and realise that Love SQUARES are coming to get you. No one is safe and everybody is undecided, about who to go out with.
@zharifabdullah9319
@zharifabdullah9319 7 жыл бұрын
The result is the Israeli flag
@garlicflavoredfloss5622
@garlicflavoredfloss5622 7 жыл бұрын
NO GENRE IS SAFE. HIDE YOUR PLOTS. PROTECT YOUR STORIES. WE CANNOT LET THE LOVE TRIANGLES TAKE OVER.
@guestimator121
@guestimator121 6 жыл бұрын
+CarmelBear Too late. This comment thread was also taken over by a love triangle
@rururiemn1941
@rururiemn1941 6 жыл бұрын
Dule Savic Bend down to our inconsistent overlords
@ZaxorVonSkyler
@ZaxorVonSkyler 6 жыл бұрын
The top three comments are now a love triangle.
@treeheet
@treeheet 6 жыл бұрын
"Making my first novel, hopefully love won't reach my passion that might force me to put a love triangle
@Randomguy-wd5lw
@Randomguy-wd5lw 6 жыл бұрын
''the war against love triangle''
@Sir_Rune
@Sir_Rune 7 жыл бұрын
Why not have a war story in wich a war starts because of a love triangle.
@timekeeper2538
@timekeeper2538 7 жыл бұрын
We already have Troy, we don't need anymore.
@Sir_Rune
@Sir_Rune 7 жыл бұрын
Just fucking kill me.
@helena_8478
@helena_8478 4 жыл бұрын
HAVE YOU SEEN ANY FANDOM?
@surprisedchar2458
@surprisedchar2458 4 жыл бұрын
Greece beat him to it a couple thousand years ago.
@wisemankugelmemicus1701
@wisemankugelmemicus1701 4 жыл бұрын
@@surprisedchar2458 Now technically, it was a love square between Hera, Aphrodite, Athena and Paris. Then the love triangle happened because he chose Aphrodite and she's...Aphrodite.
@intergalactichumanempire9759
@intergalactichumanempire9759 7 жыл бұрын
Remember: NEVER depict the enemy as anything other than 110% evil
@christophershafer5401
@christophershafer5401 6 жыл бұрын
Intergalactic Human Empire Nuance is for maggots.
@vocalcalibration8033
@vocalcalibration8033 6 жыл бұрын
We exist in a world of black and white, we may only perceive human morality through the screen of an original gameboy.
@theguy6082
@theguy6082 6 жыл бұрын
sorry but when you are in war, that's exactly how you're going to see your enemy. in the moment, they're nothing more than just targets and either you fight for your life and your brothers, or you get killed.
@brodiecrain13
@brodiecrain13 6 жыл бұрын
VocalCalibration wouldn't that be dark green and yellow green then?
@DarkSpyro707
@DarkSpyro707 6 жыл бұрын
TheGuy sure, if your writing from a first person perspective and not on a grander scale
@iomnibus
@iomnibus 7 жыл бұрын
You forgot a couple of characters/archetypes in your squadron: - The guy from Brooklyn with the thick Italian or Puerto Rican accent (the latter if you want a token Latino); - The guy from Texas who wears his 10 gallon hat under his helmet; - The overweight "slow" one who ultimately takes one for the team by falling on a grenade, or jumps in front of the hero to take a bullet; - The Midwestern kid who had never left his farm before the war, and never swears (e.g. "golly gee willickers.") - The guy who always quotes from, and carries The Bible.
@jal7852
@jal7852 7 жыл бұрын
Several of those character tropes sounded like a couple of the characters from "Fury".
@louisduarte8763
@louisduarte8763 7 жыл бұрын
Doesn't the religious guy usually end up going the craziest?
@jehovasabettor9080
@jehovasabettor9080 7 жыл бұрын
don't forget the mandatory "bullet stuck in the Bible scene"
@asalways1504
@asalways1504 7 жыл бұрын
Jehova's Abettor Not to mention the fan favorite: "Soldier holding a locket containing a picture of a loved one back home scene."
@Mailed-Knight
@Mailed-Knight 6 жыл бұрын
+Louis Duarte Name one war story where the religious guy ends up crazy. They almost always die sniping or carrying a wounded comrade.
@noapld9
@noapld9 7 жыл бұрын
you forgot about the girl soldier. she doesn't have a character, she's just there so critics won't call the movie sexist. But fear not! the girl one never actually does anything
@NormanMStewart
@NormanMStewart 6 жыл бұрын
That or she's totally unsuited for combat. If you're gonna add a female soldier, at least make her physically strong. I miss Chyna.
@zettovii1367
@zettovii1367 5 жыл бұрын
Norman M. Stewart The ones that do look battle ready tends to get killed off quite early (especially if they are a secondary character). The princess and girly types got a higher survival chance for some reason.
@talltroll7092
@talltroll7092 5 жыл бұрын
Zetto Vii The survival chances of female characters in visual media are measured by their "Boner Quotient", named after its' creator, Phileas M Boner. Loosely, it states that as their physical attractiveness and display of feminine traits (screaming at any surprising event, the obviousness of their attraction to the male protagonist, square acreage of skin revealed by their outfit etc) increase, so do their survival chances. Certain genres can subvert this somewhat, by having the final act of a story apply an inversion, thus guaranteeing their death as a motivator for the protagonist to engage in the final confrontation with the Big Bad
@jonathanshaltz7750
@jonathanshaltz7750 5 жыл бұрын
Zetto Vii how right you are; and there's a trope for that! tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/VasquezAlwaysDies
@naruchancutie1
@naruchancutie1 5 жыл бұрын
or she's insanely badass with no personality and no emotions. She's just 'tough'. gotta love em "strong female characters"
@JRichard112
@JRichard112 7 жыл бұрын
But... but how do I use shaky cam in a book?
@RobotB-hd5hs
@RobotB-hd5hs 7 жыл бұрын
John Wreed Just shake the book.
@Hhhhhh-sz9ud
@Hhhhhh-sz9ud 6 жыл бұрын
You can put *shake the book*
@anonymouscz415
@anonymouscz415 4 жыл бұрын
Or you can write shaky
@internetscum7867
@internetscum7867 4 жыл бұрын
POV: you are the cameraman from the office
@caspianharms5410
@caspianharms5410 4 жыл бұрын
Just do it!
@AnniechungChung
@AnniechungChung 7 жыл бұрын
"If there's one thing that fandoms take almost as seriously as war, it's shipping." May I dare disagree? Shipping is a war.
@aptspire
@aptspire 4 жыл бұрын
Most wars end however
@defox5019
@defox5019 4 жыл бұрын
USS Iowa vs IJN Yamato
@a.s.d.p214
@a.s.d.p214 4 жыл бұрын
@@aptspire Nah, war the besto wifi contest.
@calebwheeler8143
@calebwheeler8143 4 жыл бұрын
The war was horrendous. We stood on the deck, the canon cannon the battleship`s centrepiece as we blazed ahead, argument rockets screaming across the smoke-filled horizon. I did not know savagery until that moment. An obscenity missile tore into the deck, shredding the metal. It tore past my flesh, my skin burnt and torn, the born exposed. I tumbled into the calm waters of the Web, drifting until a surfer picked me up. I am lucky to be alive.
@warmike
@warmike 4 жыл бұрын
@@defox5019 Montana vs Yamato, Taiho vs Essex
@aquaperi4848
@aquaperi4848 7 жыл бұрын
Here's something that one should TOTALLY do (not): Have the surviving fighters have NO MENTAL TRAUMA after the war.... Yeah... BECAUSE TRAUMA TOTALLY NEVER HAPPENS TO SOLDIERS IN A WAR!
@yitz7805
@yitz7805 7 жыл бұрын
Or have absolutely everyone get ptsd and end up in exactly the same situations over and over again!
@PrincessFelicie
@PrincessFelicie 7 жыл бұрын
PTSD? Does that even exist? Nah, obviously not, there is no way hundreds of war veterans have their sleep, family and employability ruined by such things. It is all just a term that signifies something that midly miffs you! You should go and use it on social media to rack up sympathy points.
@dard1515
@dard1515 7 жыл бұрын
It would be interesting to read something on a psychopath returning from war who saw it as 'no big deal' in their life
@kogorun
@kogorun 7 жыл бұрын
There was no PTSD in Soviet Union. Not even after the WWII. All who make claims to the contrary are western serpents seeking to besmirch the glorious history of the Motherland.
@keegster7167
@keegster7167 7 жыл бұрын
not all soldiers have mental trauma, tho. But yeah, it would make sense for some of them to.
@zeframmann1641
@zeframmann1641 6 жыл бұрын
When Hiromu Arakawa wrote the Ishbalan war arc of Fullmetal Alchemist, a fantasy war in a fantasy setting, she not only read many books on various real-life wars, but she sat down and interviewed surviving veterans of WW2. The story that she claims stuck with her the hardest was the one old man who only sadly said, "I still can't watch war movies."
@natesmodelsdoodles5403
@natesmodelsdoodles5403 5 жыл бұрын
and the result was amazing.
@Abominatrix650
@Abominatrix650 4 жыл бұрын
She really is a genius.
@blackknightjack3850
@blackknightjack3850 4 жыл бұрын
Wait, the Isvalan war was based on WW2? I know Amestris is suppose to be based on Nazi Germany, but I thought Isval was based on the Middle East.
@emix981
@emix981 4 жыл бұрын
@Wyatt Earp More probably imperial prussia if I'm right (which I'm probably not since I haven't read FMA since a lot of time)
@jimmyjenkins1907
@jimmyjenkins1907 4 жыл бұрын
plot twist: that guy was actually jp
@eqlipse333
@eqlipse333 6 жыл бұрын
There's only one thing which bugs me about this video. As a veteran myself, I have met EVERY SINGLE ONE of those "tropes" in real life. Incompetent officers in particular were a painfully common experience =_=
@josiahmartin329
@josiahmartin329 3 жыл бұрын
these tropes obviously exist in real life, and they can exist in fiction; but when the characters all have absolutely no personality beyond the trope, it is considered poor storytelling.
@pcu9284
@pcu9284 3 жыл бұрын
my question is did any of the saidists become a war criminal?
@CharinVZain
@CharinVZain 3 жыл бұрын
@@josiahmartin329 When you have an idiot for a Lt. that is the only trait you see in him.
@SrPaisano
@SrPaisano 3 жыл бұрын
Thank you for your services
@nibistewgamer1742
@nibistewgamer1742 3 жыл бұрын
oil
@anarana3640
@anarana3640 7 жыл бұрын
Also make sure that the enemy is absolutely evil, having their soldiers show no humanity at all and killing little kids everyone knows there's only one good side in a war!
@FantasyAngel-zj7bw
@FantasyAngel-zj7bw 6 жыл бұрын
Yes!! Because not even some nazis were kind and didn't agree with what they were doing! No nazis ever went against orders or disliked Hitler!
@panlis6243
@panlis6243 4 жыл бұрын
But we need one scene with protagonist struggling to kill an "innocent" enemy. Most likely a fresh solidier or a father or a child
@devonrager8992
@devonrager8992 4 жыл бұрын
One good side? That's stale. How about having no one but the medics, gruff vet, and protagonist show any humanity as the war slowly kills and/or consumes anyone with any sense of morality and innocence. *voice becomes dark and omnious* And in the end, only the horror and maliciousness of the war is left in the minds of the survivors as they endure the hard reality of PTSD, re-adjusting to civilian life, and the sheer ignorance of society.
@EzioAltairist
@EzioAltairist 4 жыл бұрын
@@panlis6243 Don't forget to make the protagonist spend a minute looking at the innoccent's corpse in slow motion.
@YataTheFifteenth
@YataTheFifteenth 4 жыл бұрын
@@devonrager8992 but that would be bo~ring! Why would someone read/ watch someone readjust their own lives after the war? The good side will always survive with little casualty while the bad side will be wiped out entirely! there is no room for PTSD there!
@Zymemaru
@Zymemaru 7 жыл бұрын
Shipping...shipping never changes
@vonneely1977
@vonneely1977 7 жыл бұрын
Zymemaru: Can't... stop... laughing!
@winterlarsime9938
@winterlarsime9938 7 жыл бұрын
Zymemaru BulletStorm: "Or does it.... Shipping just changed"
@TheCatVtuber
@TheCatVtuber 7 жыл бұрын
I can make my ship an aircraft carrier though.
@ardius9777
@ardius9777 7 жыл бұрын
Zymemaru Shipping... shipping has changed...
@forestelfranger
@forestelfranger 7 жыл бұрын
Have you heard of someone black mailing a group of creators to make their one true pairing canon? For that happen recently with voltron.
@kimarous
@kimarous 7 жыл бұрын
"The incompetent and usually authoritarian officer who'll probably get his men killed": a WW1 classic!
@MrGreghome
@MrGreghome 5 жыл бұрын
General Melchett and Captain Darling
@det.bullock4461
@det.bullock4461 5 жыл бұрын
This trope is actually based in reality in regards to WWI, in many armies you still needed to have finished high school at the very least to become officers and in most places they were relatively few because only relatively well off people could go beyond elementary school (and in extreme cases most of the soldiers were illiterate, Italy was in this situation at the time) with the result that many officers were there because they filled the requirements not because they were actually competent, and some armies tended to favour people from the aristocracy and the upper classes regardless who often were a bunch of twits that considered the common soldiers inherently inferior and treated them like shit. It didn't help that WW1 was a very different war from what most experienced officers had experience with.
@marccolten9801
@marccolten9801 5 жыл бұрын
Paths of Glory has it all
@GeneGear
@GeneGear 5 жыл бұрын
Yeah...there was a reason why WWI was a lesson in modern warfare massacre tactics. Most military theorists were still operating on single-shot rifle tactics, cavalry charges, and short-ranged artillery positioning in an era that had WITHIN A COUPLE DECADES developed light machine gun nests (machine guns had been invented prior, but they were massive and acted more like an alternative artillery piece rather than an infantry support platform;), automatic and semi-automatic rifles, and tens of thousands of soldiers rather than the few hundred to few thousand-man armies of the century prior. It was a HARD wake-up call, and it still took two years before cavalry charges were definitively declared a bad military strategy by top brass.
@fds7476
@fds7476 4 жыл бұрын
Baaaah!
@snowwonder9814
@snowwonder9814 7 жыл бұрын
My history teacher refused to watch that movie because he knew it had a love triangle.
@jaylawrence8673
@jaylawrence8673 5 жыл бұрын
It's also not historically accurate at all, and in A movie called "Pearl Harbor" the love tried shouldn't be the main plot.
@mikitz
@mikitz 4 жыл бұрын
'I miss you almost as much as Pearl Harbor missed the point' - Team America: the World Police
@eatatjoes6751
@eatatjoes6751 4 жыл бұрын
We watched it in high school once and I immediately forgot about it until watching the Nostalgia Critic rant about it.
@ZKP314
@ZKP314 8 ай бұрын
Pearl Harbor is a 2 1/2 hour long movie about the Japanese launching a surprise attack on an American Love Triangle.
@denisonfagundes8200
@denisonfagundes8200 7 жыл бұрын
Yes, I will write about war, with an evil empire, in space, and with a love dodecahedron, and a female chosen one, and it's gonna be great, with lots of battles and evil superiors who hate the lesser grunts.
@shadowslayer205
@shadowslayer205 7 жыл бұрын
How's writing Star Wars episodes 8 and 9 going?
@Hanmacx
@Hanmacx 7 жыл бұрын
Denison Fagundes hey I would read and watch that!
@denisonfagundes8200
@denisonfagundes8200 7 жыл бұрын
Oh I know, they will wear full-bosy armor and when they kill someone they will scream, "For the Emperor!" And when they talk to each other about him they will always remeber to say, "The Emperor, praised be his name."
@arturovillarreal2129
@arturovillarreal2129 7 жыл бұрын
Denison Fagundes hey thats warhammer 40k in a nutshell
@denisonfagundes8200
@denisonfagundes8200 7 жыл бұрын
Arturo Villarreal Oh, someone got the reference. Praise the Emperor!
@Nisselak
@Nisselak 7 жыл бұрын
I ship The Sadist Soldier with The Idealistic Medic But of course, The Protagonist can be added to have the love triangle
@majorblitz3846
@majorblitz3846 6 жыл бұрын
Is that Some Sort of Yaoi + BDSM Doujin shit?!
@chiyoko4244
@chiyoko4244 6 жыл бұрын
Nothing wrong with that.
@364-unbirthdays8
@364-unbirthdays8 5 жыл бұрын
Nisselak That's.... kinda cute in a strange way. Of course, though, a love triangle MUST be added to make it more angsty and dramatic! :D
@rescuerex7031
@rescuerex7031 5 жыл бұрын
@@majorblitz3846 Hell yes Blitz
@majorblitz3846
@majorblitz3846 5 жыл бұрын
Like...ya boi sadist soldier captured enemy idealistic medic just to fuck his ass and ask for free medic bag everyday? *Assuming there is any Idealistic Medic for the "Enemy"*
@fakename3882
@fakename3882 7 жыл бұрын
>when the youtube channel you made to subtly promote your self-published book outshines that book's success in about three months
@Mechadude32
@Mechadude32 7 жыл бұрын
fake name It's Max Barry and Nationstates all over again...
@bryan81584
@bryan81584 6 жыл бұрын
"Never address how this guy got to such a high rank in the first place despite never showing any leadership abilities at all", You haven't been in the military then have you? ;)
@ElvenRaptor
@ElvenRaptor 5 жыл бұрын
It should still be addressed how he got there. I think it'd help the viewers/readers understand better if they knew he got there through nepotism or something.
@lweaver2988
@lweaver2988 4 жыл бұрын
@@ElvenRaptor I mean it honestly doesn't have to be, it's a really common event in real life that doesn't even require special circumstances. If a kid goes through R.O.T.C. in college he'll be commissioned as an officer without any practical experience whatsoever. these guys then have to rely heavily on their NCO's because they're the ones with actual experience in the field.
@ElvenRaptor
@ElvenRaptor 4 жыл бұрын
@@lweaver2988 Interesting. I'd always assumed they made younger, lower officers learn under older, higher up officers.
@surprisedchar2458
@surprisedchar2458 4 жыл бұрын
ElvenRaptor ROTC stands for Reserve Officer Training Corps, and does straight up train college kids to be officers. Like in any field, it’s one thing to be certified, but another to be experienced. I wasn’t in the military but even I know that.
@suleymanbabak1973
@suleymanbabak1973 4 жыл бұрын
@@ElvenRaptor the point is, it's perfectly understandable how an incompetent person ends up high in the ranks. It happens normally and for diverse reasons, not necessarily favoritism
@bloodyfranco2468
@bloodyfranco2468 4 жыл бұрын
Reminder: ALWAYS have America as the good guys and any other battles with no Americans is nothing more than non-Strategic!
@YataTheFifteenth
@YataTheFifteenth 4 жыл бұрын
Because of course, America is superior to other factions anyway! P.s. Pfft, the Waffles-SS.
@lesleyblackvelvet5802
@lesleyblackvelvet5802 3 жыл бұрын
Filipinos: HENERAL LUNA
@thesnatcher3616
@thesnatcher3616 3 жыл бұрын
To be fair, a lot of famous war movies come from America.
@R3GARnator
@R3GARnator 2 жыл бұрын
Well, it's more like 'whatever country the story was written in' in the America slot, then you've got it right.
@breagle4525
@breagle4525 Жыл бұрын
Unless it’s Vietnam or sometimes the Iraq war
@JohnSmith-rb6zj
@JohnSmith-rb6zj 7 жыл бұрын
"Why not add in a love triangle." *Proceeds to lose shit*
@flynn659
@flynn659 7 жыл бұрын
Mr "John Smith" you arent a gud writer aren't uuu?
@JohnSmith-rb6zj
@JohnSmith-rb6zj 7 жыл бұрын
Why do you think I'm majoring in mechanical engineering?
@flynn659
@flynn659 7 жыл бұрын
Uhhhhh...timey wimey stuff?
@JohnSmith-rb6zj
@JohnSmith-rb6zj 7 жыл бұрын
Because my writing is shit.
@flynn659
@flynn659 7 жыл бұрын
And what is mechanical engineering going to do? im dont know what they do.
@TheGoldfishAssasin
@TheGoldfishAssasin 7 жыл бұрын
This entire episode was made just to make that shipping joke, wasn't it?
@jrt7357
@jrt7357 3 жыл бұрын
Pretty much
@magiv4205
@magiv4205 7 жыл бұрын
"If there's one thing fandoms take almost as seriously as war, it's SHIPPING. " What do you mean by "almost"?
@JohnsonTheSecond
@JohnsonTheSecond 4 жыл бұрын
He means they take it way more seriously, but it's close. Still above but close.
@milicadiy
@milicadiy 3 жыл бұрын
@@JohnsonTheSecond He was obviously trying to be funny.
@zaphodbeeblebrox7893
@zaphodbeeblebrox7893 6 жыл бұрын
Can we all agree that anyone writing a story about WW1 has to read/watch "All Quiet on the Western Front" first? I'm tired of WW1 Germans being depicted as Nazis.
@mikitz
@mikitz 4 жыл бұрын
Technically, lots of Nazis fought during the WWI. They just didn't know it yet.
@Etzelsschizo
@Etzelsschizo 4 жыл бұрын
@@mikitz lolololol. Are you racist? Stupid? OR both? Most German soldiers in WW1 fought for the Kaiser and the German people. On the ranks fought Jews, Social Democrats, Katholics,... (You just habe to look at the term ,,Burgfrieden"). And I' just saying, most German soldiers were monarchist and wanted to keep monarchy or replace it with a parlamentic Monarchie. And btw., the Nazis were Anti-monarchistic, so the ww1 German can't be compared to the WW2 German.
@la-zrider2749
@la-zrider2749 3 жыл бұрын
@@Etzelsschizo I think he was joking.
@Etzelsschizo
@Etzelsschizo 3 жыл бұрын
@@la-zrider2749 there are no signs of sarcasm.
@bloodyhell8201
@bloodyhell8201 3 жыл бұрын
​@@Etzelsschizo who wouldn't be anti-monarchist after a war as shitty as ww1 start because of monarchism and nationalism lmao
@thehairline180
@thehairline180 4 жыл бұрын
Well, the "incompetent officer" character is surprisingly accurate, because a lot of them don't have any actual experience, a lot of them are officers straight out of college
@garygrandy9443
@garygrandy9443 4 жыл бұрын
-The African American machine gunner with bodybuilders physique -The silent and mysterious sniper -The most average everyman protagonist who seems to be the only one who lost all his personality at the boot camp
@Rebellions
@Rebellions 7 жыл бұрын
Actually the incompetant officer can be handwaved with two easy words: '2nd lieutenant' Most soldiers reading will buy it.
@ShadowOfAntioch
@ShadowOfAntioch 7 жыл бұрын
1:18 That is SO true! Nowadays protagonists in war movies are the only ones in the entire military inexplicably not wearing any kind of helmet, even though that literally decreases their chances of survival and sucks me out of the immersion, just to let the audience see the protagonist's face.
@nizzlenotes3892
@nizzlenotes3892 6 жыл бұрын
I actually made a reference to this in an early draft of my novel (sadly has since been removed) where this one dude refused to wear a helmet in case his life was actually a movie, and proceeded to get shot in the face on his first patrol. Hence all the characters never left the airfield without kevlars.
@talltroll7092
@talltroll7092 5 жыл бұрын
NizzleNotes There were some pretty serious studies of the effectiveness of, well, everything by the US after WWII. Turns out that infantry mostly needn't have bothered wearing helmets at all, but tank crews did benefit from them quite a lot
@user-do9bx2en3e
@user-do9bx2en3e 5 жыл бұрын
This can be used as a sign of toughness or self opinion and also make them contrast with all this dead meat around.
@CynicalOldDwarf
@CynicalOldDwarf 5 жыл бұрын
You might think it's a trope but the British Parachute Regiment is known for dropping in then removing their helmet to don their bright red beret, helmets are largely only useful for protecting against falling debris.
@ccvcharger
@ccvcharger 5 жыл бұрын
@@CynicalOldDwarf But that's the British. They're well known for abandoning all logic in favor of wearing bright red that makes them easily visible targets for enemies with average vision and moderately accurate weapons. But you know, I can kinda see why they might go with bright red and not neon green, or Hi-Viz yellow. Bright red is the same color of blood, and therefore is easier to wash.
@pyrosauria7444
@pyrosauria7444 7 жыл бұрын
You forgot the spice of war stories. 1) Ridiculous enemy weapons and 2) pet companion that's used for audience manipul-I MEAN sympathy. :3
@celeste1823
@celeste1823 7 жыл бұрын
We would need a nuclear-equiped walking battle tank. Some kind of Metal Gear
@marschma
@marschma 6 жыл бұрын
Thats literally the only thing thats Missing in the first captain america movie. a pet dog fighting the evil hydra nazis
@mat8791
@mat8791 5 жыл бұрын
where is the priest who ended here and has rescued him and the hero by a bullet being STUCK IN THE BIBLE ?
@saintroddy
@saintroddy 5 жыл бұрын
*ahem* every single German soldier armed with an MP40 *ahem*
@panlis6243
@panlis6243 4 жыл бұрын
You forgot the pet has to sacrifice itself for the protagonist in the climax for maximum shock value. I bet nobody will see that coming
@jaiyapapaya
@jaiyapapaya 7 жыл бұрын
1:47 I've never noticed how much of a trope saying 'kid' was. I need to go make some....adjustments now.
@scarletshadow4350
@scarletshadow4350 7 жыл бұрын
Jaiya Papaya I feel you, I once had a character who did that, BUT after I watched a crap ton of research I changed 71% of her character.
@johnfraire6931
@johnfraire6931 7 жыл бұрын
Don't worry about it, kid 😏
@inspectorjavert8443
@inspectorjavert8443 7 жыл бұрын
I think its a common thing to fall in love with a certain word or phrase, I fell in in love with the trope where two people are talking about the character and then that character shows up interrupting their talk with a one liner based on the last thing said about them.
@louisduarte8763
@louisduarte8763 7 жыл бұрын
Or have the grizzled old vet call the newcomer "rookie".
@osedebame3522
@osedebame3522 7 жыл бұрын
Well, if the person actually is a kid, like, 15 or 16, then I think it is okay. I mean, in beasts of no nation, the main character actually is a kid. It could be a good theme to show how war destroyed innocence. Like in World War 1, many soldiers were 15, 16, or even 12 year olds who lied into their position and saw the horrors of war before they even finished High School thinking it would be some valiant journey, but instead, a mindless slaughter.
@panzerfruend7006
@panzerfruend7006 4 жыл бұрын
0:06 The quote he is parodying is actually one of my favorites. “The point of war isn’t to die for your country. It’s to make the other poor bastard die for his.
@dolphingoreeaccount7395
@dolphingoreeaccount7395 Жыл бұрын
Who, Patton?
@justyouraveragefurryhunter226
@justyouraveragefurryhunter226 11 ай бұрын
@@dolphingoreeaccount7395 yep
@uncreativename9936
@uncreativename9936 7 жыл бұрын
Except that the incompetent officer is definitively a real thing. Lieutenants are just Privates with college degrees.
@casualcraftman1599
@casualcraftman1599 7 жыл бұрын
Suggestions for future videos: Kids books poetry Christmas story's
@MediaGhost_
@MediaGhost_ 7 жыл бұрын
Don't forget love triangles
@fishbuddy547
@fishbuddy547 7 жыл бұрын
+Media Ghost You can never forget the love triangles.
@fishbuddy547
@fishbuddy547 7 жыл бұрын
+Media Ghost You can never forget the love triangles.
@fishbuddy547
@fishbuddy547 7 жыл бұрын
+Media Ghost You can never forget the love triangles.
@breakerdawn8429
@breakerdawn8429 7 жыл бұрын
Casual CraftMan Pffffft kids story are simple as in the Wimpy Kids book say as long as there's a lesson it's good enough
@kalashnikovdevil
@kalashnikovdevil 7 жыл бұрын
Showing no leadership abilities at all is the primary requirement to become a junior officer.
@heathdoi1
@heathdoi1 6 жыл бұрын
TwoHeavens that is the damn truth, with the NCO and the junior troops cpnfused
@hankreardenfan1019
@hankreardenfan1019 6 жыл бұрын
It's called connections.
@ziggymoondust2281
@ziggymoondust2281 4 жыл бұрын
The Senior NCO is honestly going to be the officer for the Junior Officer.
@dash4800
@dash4800 6 жыл бұрын
You forgot to include the religious soldier, just in case you feel the need to shoehorn in a spiritual theme (either for or against). It doesn't matter if you never actually tackle these themes in the story, having a religious character allows you to turn your empty, emotionless ending into a poignant one by adding in some obvious religious imagery in the final scene, like a giant cross or Jesus.
@alexanderchristopher6237
@alexanderchristopher6237 4 жыл бұрын
It's a trope, but it's a realistic one that people could get by. War is a horrible place to be in and soldiers cope through different ways. Seriously, they could have died the next day. Some become sadists, some cried for days, some used humour, and some turn to God for assurance.
@EzioAltairist
@EzioAltairist 4 жыл бұрын
Note: the religious one is actually a good person, but dies at the final battle.
@lindajackson8936
@lindajackson8936 3 жыл бұрын
So basically Father Mulcahy but written poorly
@Zechariah_Mathieson1871
@Zechariah_Mathieson1871 3 жыл бұрын
@@EzioAltairist The religious one is always good unless the person writing for the character doesn't agree with the Religion in question
@RubyDaLynx
@RubyDaLynx 2 жыл бұрын
Amazing if used correctly, thank you for bringing that up
@synflwr
@synflwr 5 жыл бұрын
I made a story plot, here it goes: K so basically there is a young teenage girl named Marina Suerre with long brown hair who gets bullied at her magic school but suddenly finds out she is a hybrid between a fairy wolf dragon and witch. She uses the powers and the ancient prophecy to fight the evil dark lord along with the other edgy outcasts in her class and finally gets equal rights for the kitchen sink elves and physco midgets. After that she gets stuck in a love decdrehedron with fellow war fighters and students but dates the hot bad boy vampire, who is an antihero who killed the bullies, and becomes queen of the dragon kingdom.
@BlackFoxMLP
@BlackFoxMLP 4 жыл бұрын
Ok
@rupert5066
@rupert5066 4 жыл бұрын
FRITZ HAS SPOKEN
@BlackFoxMLP
@BlackFoxMLP 4 жыл бұрын
WHY iS EVERYONE ACTING LIKE THEY KNOW ME EVERYWHERE I FUCKING GO LEAVE ME ALONE PLEASE I AM SCARED FOR MY WIFE that i beat to death this eveing
@JohnsonTheSecond
@JohnsonTheSecond 4 жыл бұрын
dodecahedron*?
@bluehydrangea5506
@bluehydrangea5506 4 жыл бұрын
I kind of want kitchen sink elves to be a thing...
@Bankstercide
@Bankstercide 7 жыл бұрын
There actually is an irl reason to keep The Sadist in the army. He gets shit done without being told to. Not everyone has the stomach to kill other human beings, but he does and he does it well. Nobody actually _ordered_ him to torture captives or kill helpless civilians, but he sure as fuck got the hint. He rarely faces war crimes because he's on the winning side and his crimes get lost in the background of war. While the development of such a character is quite interesting (e.g. The Anti-Hero), it's too much work; caricature is much easier.
@tristenm1526
@tristenm1526 5 жыл бұрын
I know that this comment is old, but that's actually a really cool idea. It brings into question at what point all the other characters would get sick of his aggression and value their own comfort and a lack of enemy suffering over his efficiency at getting the job done regardless of the cost.
@user-qp4ru6el2s
@user-qp4ru6el2s 5 жыл бұрын
John Doe I think JP’s point here is that such soldiers got pulled into a regular armies, rather than in a specialized force like SS. Still I think it would be interesting to see how other characters will react to his actions.
@tomost3891
@tomost3891 4 жыл бұрын
In real war, this is not how it works. "Evil people do evil things" is just a nice thing we say, so we can distance our self from warcrimes. The milgrim prison experiment showed that most people can turn into monsters given the right (or wrong) context. Most Nazi Warcriminals were normal people. In Nanking the vast majority of soldiers raped and killed POWs as well a civilians. That is (in my opinion) the real horror of war. Not that you get confronted with evil people, but that you might find, the real evil is in you.
@korvincarry3268
@korvincarry3268 4 жыл бұрын
@@tomost3891 sure, you can stare into the abyss till it stares back, but what you never realized was that the abyss was lurking in your eyes the whole time.
@lweaver2988
@lweaver2988 4 жыл бұрын
@@tomost3891 just a point of information, that prison experiment is completely unreliable as a source.
@tuskinekinase
@tuskinekinase 7 жыл бұрын
When you said "love triangle" my gut reaction was immediately "Pearl Harbor!!"
@TeutonicEmperor1198
@TeutonicEmperor1198 7 жыл бұрын
or enemy at the gates!
@asalways1504
@asalways1504 7 жыл бұрын
Or Cold Mountain!
@mobydicki9060
@mobydicki9060 7 жыл бұрын
I immediately thought of Enemy At the Gates.
@peacekeeper1413
@peacekeeper1413 7 жыл бұрын
Moby Dick I but enemy at the gates is sort of good
@TheOtakuPrince
@TheOtakuPrince 7 жыл бұрын
When i heard 'love triangle', I remembered that movie about Stalingrad, I think it was Enemy at the Gates.
@newperve
@newperve 6 жыл бұрын
"Don't worry, I'm sure history nerds won't point out it's historical inaccuracies." Possibly the worst advice ever given on this channel.
@JohnsonTheSecond
@JohnsonTheSecond 4 жыл бұрын
**holds historically accurate M1935 Mauser Karabiner von Gewehr-1898 (Karabiner-98 Kurz) 7.92x57mm like a baseball bat, slowly clapping it**
@jamaicanball6285
@jamaicanball6285 3 жыл бұрын
I Disagree with you sir, the Kar-98 will surely not beat my Historical Accurate Winchester Model 1897 with 12 Gauge 2 3/4" Incendiary Slug Rounds
@peacefulinvasion684
@peacefulinvasion684 4 жыл бұрын
"Showing pictures of loved ones is a sure fire way to die" Were looking at you Maes Hughes
@mikitz
@mikitz 4 жыл бұрын
Not to mention having any plans for the future.
@The.Orange.Wizard
@The.Orange.Wizard 2 жыл бұрын
Too soon.
@gallusgallusdomesticus281
@gallusgallusdomesticus281 7 жыл бұрын
Battlefield 1's campaign suddenly comes to mind.
@ohwhatawaytogo8802
@ohwhatawaytogo8802 7 жыл бұрын
That Guy Who Has No Life. Being good or bad? Bad right?
@gallusgallusdomesticus281
@gallusgallusdomesticus281 7 жыл бұрын
Aidan Mcdonald​ Mostly mediocre. None of the characters were sympathetic enough. It has original and actually cool ideas that would work for the setting, however it handles it poorly.
@ohwhatawaytogo8802
@ohwhatawaytogo8802 7 жыл бұрын
That Guy Who Has No Life. It completely fumbled dealing with a war such as World War One where there isn't anything close to a "good" and "bad" most wars you can kinda simplify down to good and bad. WW1 you can't.
@khinzaw77
@khinzaw77 7 жыл бұрын
Terrible. The Italian soldier telling the story to his daughter, who has an oddly American accent, effectively solos an entrenched mountain position and is rendered invincible by wearing a few steel plates. He even survives a plane crashing into him. Totally realistic.
@ohwhatawaytogo8802
@ohwhatawaytogo8802 7 жыл бұрын
Khinzaw Thein what taking the Ottoman fort single handily? With a character who couldn't be more Australian if he was Mel Gibson in Gallipoli, waving an Australian flag while riding a Kangaroo.
@ShudowWolf
@ShudowWolf 7 жыл бұрын
Oh, we ALL know you're not kidding when it comes to the dreaded love triangle... One day, there'll be a video on the love triangle and we will learn the love triangle ITSELF isn't safe from another love triangle finding itself inside the love triangle...
@unfortuante
@unfortuante 6 жыл бұрын
FOR EXAMPLE, 1 LOVE TRIANGLE CAN FIT FOUR OTHERS
@choombi6721
@choombi6721 6 жыл бұрын
Love-Triangle-ception
@evilpigeonsify
@evilpigeonsify 6 жыл бұрын
the horror the horror
@Wavemaninawe
@Wavemaninawe 6 жыл бұрын
Write a threesome of love triangles and watch it mutate into a love octagon, as it slowly and traumatically devours the fabric of time & space.
@ccaffie1231
@ccaffie1231 3 жыл бұрын
time to ship some shapes :3
@futurestoryteller
@futurestoryteller 7 жыл бұрын
I can't count how many war stories I've read that say "This scene is filtered through shaky cam." When will _writers_ learn. Smh
@winterlarsime9938
@winterlarsime9938 7 жыл бұрын
futurestoryteller I see thou Haveth scroll through the comment section just like I
@rustyshackle8000
@rustyshackle8000 5 жыл бұрын
One of my favorite parts in a war movie was a part in Saving Private Ryan. Two soldiers in German uniforms walked towards two American soldiers after D-Day had been one. They were frantically speaking a language that neither of the Americans spoke, and the two were shot down for shit's and giggles. Turns out the soldiers were conscripts from Czechoslovakia, begging the soldiers not to shoot. That was a little known fact on D-Day, that many of the soliders were simply conscripts, but they were treated like trash anyway.
@therightarmofthefreeworld4703
@therightarmofthefreeworld4703 2 жыл бұрын
SPR is a terrible film. The scene you mentioned could be interesting, if it wasn't bookended at the end of the film with the message that it's ok to shoot a POW if they are German and you have a personal problem with them. Also, whether a soldier is a volunteer or conscript should not dictate how they are treated.
@priya8855
@priya8855 Жыл бұрын
@@therightarmofthefreeworld4703 would love to see you make a film then
@ConnanTheCivilized
@ConnanTheCivilized Жыл бұрын
What pisses me off is when people use the “no prison facilities” excuse and totally avoid the point that war makes people do terrible things to the other side. Large POW camps were some of the first things set up at the Normandy Beaches. Real life supply shortages and abuses killed far more surrendered soldiers than refusal to show mercy, but of course that would make the allies look too much like their enemies. I don’t understand why people feel the need to alter history when there is so much horror and lessons about the human condition in real life.
@anonimo2932
@anonimo2932 7 жыл бұрын
and off course: This is not a game, kiddo
@Jebu911
@Jebu911 5 жыл бұрын
especially said if in a game.
@EzioAltairist
@EzioAltairist 4 жыл бұрын
This is war, kiddo.
@cartoonmaster2401
@cartoonmaster2401 3 жыл бұрын
"You're in _my_ town now."
@cartoonmaster2401
@cartoonmaster2401 3 жыл бұрын
"You're in _my_ town now."
@yourfbiagent6483
@yourfbiagent6483 4 жыл бұрын
Putting a love triangle in a war story is easy! Just have the main character’s wife cheat on him while he’s deployed! Oh, is that not what you meant?
@canaisyoung3601
@canaisyoung3601 3 жыл бұрын
Usually, it's the main character falling for a beautiful spy or refugee or civilian or prostitute. At least in the WWII stories I've read.
@nuclearshoes1706
@nuclearshoes1706 6 жыл бұрын
Better make the medic the sadist.
@aptspire
@aptspire 4 жыл бұрын
Don't be a baby, ribs grow back!
@YataTheFifteenth
@YataTheFifteenth 4 жыл бұрын
"And that's how i lost my medical license!" (At this moment the heavy knew, he went to the wrong doctor)
@garygrandy9443
@garygrandy9443 4 жыл бұрын
And the concentration camp leader a good guy... or is that illegal?
@mikitz
@mikitz 4 жыл бұрын
Hitler did it. His name was Mengele. By the way, what is it that modern military personnel no longer get cool nicknames such as 'Angel of Death'?
@something3395
@something3395 4 жыл бұрын
Team Fortress 2?
@angieb7357
@angieb7357 7 жыл бұрын
"If there is one thing fandoms take almost as serious as war, it's shipping." NO! THEY TAKE IT MORE SERIOUSLY!!!!!!!
@arte0021
@arte0021 6 жыл бұрын
I dont get it. Why would they take something as trivial and stupid as shipping so seriously? Are they retarded?
@firesparkling9370
@firesparkling9370 5 жыл бұрын
arte0021 Yes. If you want a good example of a fandom torn by shipping, look at the Voltron fandom (I’m being serious, read the posts they make and prepare to loose all faith in humanity). They’re the reason I stopped caring about the show.
@magicrainbowkitties1023
@magicrainbowkitties1023 5 жыл бұрын
Your profile pic is amazing
@Dohiwario
@Dohiwario 7 жыл бұрын
"If there's one thing fandoms take as almost as seriously as war is shipping." Fire Emblem, anyone?
@purplechip8020
@purplechip8020 7 жыл бұрын
Dohiwario Fire Emblem? what's that? but I have heard of Waifu Emblem are the games similar?
@Dohiwario
@Dohiwario 7 жыл бұрын
I can't tell if you're being sarcastic or not. If you are, then yes, they are very similar. If you aren't, then Fire Emblem is a strategy RPG in which if one of your recruited characters die, you lose them forever. Players like to ship characters. Some of the games have a second generation where the stats of the children depend on the parents, so people go crazy about that.
@smolpeepee245
@smolpeepee245 7 жыл бұрын
Dohiwario unless you're on Casual XD
@matthewcoyle4131
@matthewcoyle4131 7 жыл бұрын
A paladin and a dragoon meet. DID SOMEONE CALL FOR A LOVE TRIANGLE? **drops off white mage love interest**
@rikowolfin4984
@rikowolfin4984 7 жыл бұрын
"Can't tell if you are being sarcastic or not" They had Waifu Emblem in their comment replying to you about shipping in Fire EMBLEM, how is it hard to see they are being Sarcastic?
@admcleo
@admcleo 7 жыл бұрын
I'd love to see one of these on asylums and the mentally ill. Can't stand horror stories using that easy and inaccurate out.
@mayflower6403
@mayflower6403 7 жыл бұрын
Adam McLeod I want to see a video about mental illnesses and disabilities in general.
@johnfraire6931
@johnfraire6931 7 жыл бұрын
As someone with ADHD, I've once sighed extremely loud when I read a story involving something along the lines of- Char 1: "...Wow! You're an excelent fencer!" Char 2: "Yeah well, I mean, my ADHD makes me more able to process thinks *really* quick, especially fast-paced stuff like fighting, but I can't really concentrate hard with stuff like homework because of it." Me: *rolls eyes in Spanish*
@dmas7749
@dmas7749 7 жыл бұрын
ADHD or Attention Deficit just means you have a shit attention span. It's not autism.
@johnfraire6931
@johnfraire6931 7 жыл бұрын
D MAS THANK YOU.
@inspectorjavert8443
@inspectorjavert8443 7 жыл бұрын
There's a line between bad writing and the use of poetic license, noone wants to read about CBT in a horror story.
@insanityplus2196
@insanityplus2196 7 жыл бұрын
How to make a good war novel: Actually go through scenes that show changes to the characters as they face things they CANT overcome.
@zatoonhd1683
@zatoonhd1683 6 жыл бұрын
You forgot that one of the Soldiers ALLWAYS has to have an Accent like Irish or Scotish.
@louisduarte8763
@louisduarte8763 6 жыл бұрын
Captain America's Howling Commandos did not have a Scottish or Irish-accented guy on the team. They had a French guy! But Wonder Woman's squad did have a Scotsman.
@noahboddie3482
@noahboddie3482 7 жыл бұрын
Pftt, war story with a love tri.... oh... Oh no.
@lnsflare1
@lnsflare1 7 жыл бұрын
Noah Boddie Does Han/Luke/Leia count? Or Arwen/Eowyn/Aragorn? Definitely the Legolas/ElfGirl/PrettyDwarf triangle from the Hobbit movies. And I guess you could make a love triangle in the Mass Effect games, if you want.
@noahboddie3482
@noahboddie3482 7 жыл бұрын
lnsflare1 Dear god it's worse than I thought...
@valentinmitterbauer4196
@valentinmitterbauer4196 7 жыл бұрын
Furthermore: Jack, Will and Elisabeth Tsu'tey, Neytiri and Sully Gale, Katniss and Peeta And my personal favourite: Harry Potter and the love dodecahedron
@debaiona
@debaiona 7 жыл бұрын
The Legolas/Tauriel/Kili one only happened in the movie, because Tauriel didn't exist in the book. The Arwen/Eowyn/Aragorn one was grossly over-exaggerated in the movies, and barely present in the books. So not bad book tropes, but *definitely* bad screenplay tropes.
@lnsflare1
@lnsflare1 7 жыл бұрын
debaiona Oh, definitely; I brought them up because Pearl Harbor was the example in the video. Everyone knows that the book Love Triangles were Frodo/Ring/Boromir, Frodo/Samwise/Smeagol, Frodo/Precious/Gollum, and Frodo/Smeagol/Gollum. Also Smaug/Arkenstone/Thorin and Bilbo/Precious/Gollum.
@christianlilly8283
@christianlilly8283 7 жыл бұрын
Remember, EVERY soldier is a philosopher. It doesn't matter if he's in the middle of battle and he's dodging death at every turn. Ignore the fact he's a twenty year old male who probably hasn't picked up a book since highschool, and only cares about sex and shooting. Ignore the fact that a paragraph discussing the ethics of combat will slow down your narrative
@Mathignihilcehk
@Mathignihilcehk 7 жыл бұрын
Actually, he probably doesn't care about shooting either. I mean, if you're talking WW2 or sooner, when we didn't know that drafting people against their will to fight in armies, meant they weren't actually shooting AT the enemy... just in their general direction. That is, until we brainwashed them to be good little soldiers and shoot everything that moves without ANY thought.
@MrEvanfriend
@MrEvanfriend 7 жыл бұрын
Just about every soldier IS a philosopher. The majority of war is sitting around being bored out of your mind with the same group of guys for months on end. The conversations can go to some very odd places, besides the standard soda/pop arguments (for the record, it's called soda) and debating whether fucking a stepsister counts as incest.
@pootisspencer9586
@pootisspencer9586 7 жыл бұрын
I vote we compromise and call it soda pop
@wakkaseta8351
@wakkaseta8351 7 жыл бұрын
It's soft drink you heathens!
@lnsflare1
@lnsflare1 7 жыл бұрын
You mean chilled fizz water?
@mr.heisenberg6638
@mr.heisenberg6638 4 жыл бұрын
Someone: *kills medic* Me: Wait, that's actually illegal.
@elongated_musket6353
@elongated_musket6353 2 жыл бұрын
Fun fact: Medics in Vietnam didn't have a red cross on their helmet because they are usually what the Vietcong would shoot first.
@ConnanTheCivilized
@ConnanTheCivilized Жыл бұрын
No, killing a member of a pacifist organization like the Red Cross is illegal (and even 1st world soldiers shoot them all the time.) Anybody who takes up arms, including many medics, are soldiers and legitimate targets.
@approachingetterath9959
@approachingetterath9959 7 жыл бұрын
when i was younger i tried to write war stories. at least i didn't have a love triangle
@updog9567
@updog9567 2 жыл бұрын
Me too lol. When I was like in 4th grade I tried making a WW2 story. Glad it only had beginning. Itd be pretty cringe. The protag was a 16yo whose parents died from a black death. I remember these 2 facts and its enough. I know this story would turn cringe.
@surprisedchar2458
@surprisedchar2458 2 жыл бұрын
@@updog9567 that could work if you set it in China and he takes up arms against the Japanese. The IJA was no stranger to just releasing bioweapons on Chinese civilians.
@updog9567
@updog9567 2 жыл бұрын
@@surprisedchar2458 yeah but back then i knew sheet about WW2. I still dont know as much as I would like to so I have to educate myself, but lots of history books are boring and even if they arent it still doesnt feel as nice as reading idk warrior cats. I wish there was a manga or action/spy oriented book that would tell a historically accurate story with the construction of well, as I mentioned earlier, action novel. About WW2 i mean. I have read a book like that once, historical about the false accusation of Dreyfus, written by Robert Harris, officer and spy or something like that, I recommend it lol.
@elongated_musket6353
@elongated_musket6353 2 жыл бұрын
I once wrote a Vietnam war story when I was like 11 for something in class. The teacher liked it alot apparently. I just recently dug it up and I still think I did pretty well for an 11 year old. (with some cringey exceptions of course). I remember when I portrayed the medic as the sadistic kind.
@winterlarsime9938
@winterlarsime9938 7 жыл бұрын
I love war stories and stories in war video games, they tell me educational things. Such as how Nazi's used tons upon tons of absolutely incompetent soldiers who get easily mowed down by a single soldier with an Engraved, Nickel Plated, M1911 Pistol and a squad of emotionally complex solidie- Wait, wrong plot. My point is that I love reading them because it tells me how everyone in the Great War used Tommy Guns, even though they were made after that time period, because all soldiers are actually plot related time machines. And in addition to loving them for that reason, I love them because it shows how accurate war is. And they're always so serious! I mean come on, they're realistic and so serious that they'd never show someone getting shot in the rear end (especially in Vietnam)! I mean what sensible movie would feature comedy in war scene? Not a good one that's what. Also, they show me how humanity has the quietest guns of all time! For example: did you know that a large 50. Mounted Machine Gun has the sound of a gentleman coughing in an Elitist English Private bar? I didn't until I played the new call of duty games!
@shadowslayer205
@shadowslayer205 7 жыл бұрын
I also learned from military FPS games that suppressed weapons make absolutely no noise from the enemy's perspective, so you fire away like you don't have to worry about heat regulation and the guards won't hear a thing! But be careful, because if you make so much as one non-crouched footstep or nudge an object, every guard in the room will instantly know where you are and empty their magazines towards you no better than stormtroopers would, possibly hitting each other more than you. [To hilarious effect depending on if the game allows enemies to damage each other or not.]
@winterlarsime9938
@winterlarsime9938 7 жыл бұрын
shadowslayer205 I've also found that games also teach me the crime system very well, as for example Skyrim taught me that if you commit a single crime, everyone will instantly know and attempt to murder you
@winterlarsime9938
@winterlarsime9938 7 жыл бұрын
shadowslayer205 I've also found that games also teach me the crime system very well, as for example Skyrim taught me that if you commit a single crime, everyone will instantly know and attempt to murder you
@shadowslayer205
@shadowslayer205 7 жыл бұрын
And according to Grand Theft Auto, police will give up their search for criminals after only a minute of not directly seeing them.
@godswillotonye6519
@godswillotonye6519 3 жыл бұрын
@@winterlarsime9938 and I love war genres because always make it about WW2 and not WW1 because why humanize the German soldiers when you can just make them pure evil nazis who have no emotion.
@WholesomeLiberal1998
@WholesomeLiberal1998 7 жыл бұрын
Do one on pregnancy stories, I think like, a 1/4 of them has the mother and/or child die for drama reasons.
@shadowslayer205
@shadowslayer205 7 жыл бұрын
A rule of soap operas: Every pregnancy has birth complications. NO EXCEPTIONS.
@cyndrift
@cyndrift 7 жыл бұрын
If the mother or child does not die, the father will. Or someone doesn't approve of the child's father or the having of the child (if they're in high school or something). You need to shoehorn bitterness into a traditionally happy thing somehow.
@straystars2492
@straystars2492 7 жыл бұрын
Kill the parents, but stretch it out over a really long amount of time in order to make your readers feel sorry for the baby, who, in the end, is brought to the orphanage to tell their new friends their sob story. Proceed to write a sequel where the surviving child finds out they had a long lost sibling who's a black-belt in karate and valedictorian in the advanced class of their fancy ivy league college
@everestcanyon5647
@everestcanyon5647 6 жыл бұрын
If I was to create a war film, it would somehow become an action/adventure film instead. Obviously the characters will find themselves hanging off of cliffs or something.
@ttty2242
@ttty2242 4 жыл бұрын
it would end on a CLIFFHANGER (I want to die)
@firaxolegirein9816
@firaxolegirein9816 3 жыл бұрын
@@ttty2242 , just join the military
@professionalcommentstealer5271
@professionalcommentstealer5271 2 жыл бұрын
I would write a 'strong woman' character, then have her be the first to be killed off just to piss off the critics and journalists
@lordofsandvich3630
@lordofsandvich3630 3 жыл бұрын
"What's wrong with your eyes?" "War does terrible things to people"
@TheDevilintheBelfry
@TheDevilintheBelfry 7 жыл бұрын
Love triangles... love triangles never change...
@winterlarsime9938
@winterlarsime9938 7 жыл бұрын
4:3 Pictures you stole my meme..... Hours ago... YOU TIME TRAVELING MEME STEALER
@finna7824
@finna7824 7 жыл бұрын
Can you do a teen dystopia faction writing advice next? I would love that!
@autokrator_
@autokrator_ 6 жыл бұрын
Finna He already did dystopoas
@jettiz3703
@jettiz3703 6 жыл бұрын
Just add a love triangle
@ninjabluefyre3815
@ninjabluefyre3815 6 жыл бұрын
The very first episode.
@marschma
@marschma 6 жыл бұрын
Look at The 100. Just have a hot blonde in a love triangle and if people Stop watching your shoy, have her make out with other hot girls.
@volcryndarkstar
@volcryndarkstar 5 жыл бұрын
Fucking Divergent, Hunger Games, and Maze Runner much?
@nerysghemor5781
@nerysghemor5781 7 жыл бұрын
Thank you for pointing out the atrocity known as the Pearl Harbor movie! (At least when I came out of the theater pissed off, my Dad introduced me to Tora Tora Tora.)
@DahVoozel
@DahVoozel 7 жыл бұрын
Wait... shipping in a war story? But you said to ignore logistics!
@Byakkoya11037
@Byakkoya11037 7 жыл бұрын
This series NEEDS more views.
@jv9ufxcy
@jv9ufxcy 7 жыл бұрын
Don't forget to play "It ain't me" at the beginning of your Vietnam War story.
@CarrotConsumer
@CarrotConsumer 7 жыл бұрын
The Selena Gomez song.
@TrashGoblin824
@TrashGoblin824 6 жыл бұрын
It's called "Fortunate Son", you dingus
@JohnsonTheSecond
@JohnsonTheSecond 4 жыл бұрын
*I AIN'T NO FORTUNATE SOOON, NO,*
@JohnsonTheSecond
@JohnsonTheSecond 4 жыл бұрын
@@TrashGoblin824 dingus, you dungis
@thefederalrepublicoferusea3900
@thefederalrepublicoferusea3900 3 жыл бұрын
@meatiest *IT AINT ME*
@justinthompson6364
@justinthompson6364 7 жыл бұрын
I love how this story can't even stand as a book. it _needs_ the eye candy explosions and camera shakes to work even this badly.
@isakaner-roth4525
@isakaner-roth4525 7 жыл бұрын
Next up: How to write a Cancer story (The ones with unrealistic sicknesses)
@seanassociateproductions1691
@seanassociateproductions1691 4 жыл бұрын
Remember not to put a single second of research into how soldiers actually talk and act
@TotallyNotAFox
@TotallyNotAFox 4 жыл бұрын
Also, any actual tactic is unnecessary as long as it looks cool
@bilbo_gamers6417
@bilbo_gamers6417 3 жыл бұрын
It's insane how people genuinely write stories like this. So incredibly distasteful. From the bits and pieces I've read about war, I myself wouldn't dare touch the subject. It's something you would have to experience firsthand in one way or another, I think. Maybe that's just me. But either way it's sickening to think about dramatizing a real life war like this. Great vid
@dorkmax7073
@dorkmax7073 5 жыл бұрын
Actually, the veteran having stubble is accurate bc people who have been through combat stop caring about being inspection ready.
@businessproyects2615
@businessproyects2615 3 жыл бұрын
makes sense, is kind of bullshit
@HawaiiKnut
@HawaiiKnut 7 жыл бұрын
Not to mention that winners write history, so research will be more biased than it should.
@JohnsonTheSecond
@JohnsonTheSecond 4 жыл бұрын
From at least the 1900s, they were well documented by both sides, so that isn't too much of a problem nowadays as long as you don't you know read literal propaganda
@xxfrosty609xx3
@xxfrosty609xx3 4 жыл бұрын
History is not written by the victors, it’s written by historians.
@JohnsonTheSecond
@JohnsonTheSecond 4 жыл бұрын
@@xxfrosty609xx3 I don't think Nazi historians wrote about WW2 in hindsight...
@andro7862
@andro7862 4 жыл бұрын
@@JohnsonTheSecond Almost all western literature about the eastern front was written by former Wehrmacht and SS "historians". Only recently did Soviet sources began to be translated.
@JohnsonTheSecond
@JohnsonTheSecond 4 жыл бұрын
@@andro7862 Sure, of course, only now we began reading them, I'm 100% sure that they had no impact on perception before now. And you're really showing how unbiased you are calling them ""historians"", anyway, I said in hindsight.
@soniagamingxo1710
@soniagamingxo1710 7 жыл бұрын
This was really funny yet helpful. Now I know what to avoid!
@alexanderdragonheart2036
@alexanderdragonheart2036 6 жыл бұрын
Well then you can please tell me what you learned because I am having trouble translating the bad advice into good advice.
@duck1351
@duck1351 4 жыл бұрын
I'm here for when ww3 ends and i get out of the military, so i can write a book about it.
@joshuabessire9169
@joshuabessire9169 3 жыл бұрын
And I will buy it, no matter how good or bad it is, because TP will be scarce. 10caps sound like a fair trade? (Barter skill 3).
@duck1351
@duck1351 3 жыл бұрын
@@joshuabessire9169 (Barter 30) 10 caps sounds a little low for someone with a family to feed. How does 20 sound?
@joshuabessire9169
@joshuabessire9169 3 жыл бұрын
@@duck1351 [terrifying presence] How about you give me that book, or else...
@miles6283
@miles6283 6 жыл бұрын
This sounds like the CoD WW2 campaign
@basicallyafilipino
@basicallyafilipino 3 жыл бұрын
that is exactly what i was thinking
@thething2723
@thething2723 4 жыл бұрын
My favorite thing is when authors try to make the story tense and end up making tender homoerotic cinema
@hoodrat21
@hoodrat21 2 жыл бұрын
That's like, every military irl
@darlalathan6143
@darlalathan6143 3 жыл бұрын
My WWII veteran uncle and mom's Vietnam veteran boyfriend both witnessed gay love triangles in the barracks at night, lol!
@Youtuber-yl6sj
@Youtuber-yl6sj 7 жыл бұрын
you should write a war story on a shipping war!
@slappybio1686
@slappybio1686 5 жыл бұрын
and make Greg Farshtey the hero who saves the world, by making all the ships not canon XD
@serbianslav5494
@serbianslav5494 5 жыл бұрын
I will base my characters on parts of my personality: 1. Nico, leader and good at tactics 2. Lucky, the bad joke guy 3. Jock, protective towards friends 4. Larry, the aggressive man 5. Sasha, the suspicious and paranoid one
@ThePuppyTurtle
@ThePuppyTurtle 7 жыл бұрын
*But they make even better drink coasters!* Died
@highdefinitionapollo2189
@highdefinitionapollo2189 7 жыл бұрын
Do superhero tropes next!
@madamdm9931
@madamdm9931 7 жыл бұрын
Heck yes!
@vladivanovici510
@vladivanovici510 7 жыл бұрын
George Zhang If he were to do that the video should be at least ten minutes
@arvoh.7834
@arvoh.7834 4 жыл бұрын
I’m currently writing a fictional vet’s post war and pre-war story and boy I am glad I didn’t go down the action route. Love these advices! :D
@Tenchigo100
@Tenchigo100 3 жыл бұрын
NGL There are sadist in the military. Rare I imagine but it's horrible when you find them. I once saw a dude romanticize murdering terrorists and laugh about shooting their limbs off n shit when I was in Bootcamp. Not that it's not warranted, but holy shit these kinds of people have lost their humanity but stay within a civilian public.
@kozmonauta0515
@kozmonauta0515 3 жыл бұрын
Ah yes the “walks into the machine gunfire without any fear in a damn open field-type” enemy soldiers
@ashleydeshazo4122
@ashleydeshazo4122 5 жыл бұрын
"Yeah, we will." ~ History Nerds
@erubin100
@erubin100 5 жыл бұрын
"No genre is safe from the love triangle!" This is an unfortunate and harsh truth.
@delta_yd
@delta_yd 5 жыл бұрын
I love how the image at 4:02 is accurate. I couldn't read whatever he was saying until I actually paused the video.
@Jim87_36
@Jim87_36 3 жыл бұрын
Ya know. One could write a story about a squad inside a trench or foxhole while war is heard off in the distance but don’t make it to them till the third act. Just keep the tension building with the characters getting more nervous or excited while new reports come in of enemy movement then “surprise attack.” And shit hits the fan
@thedeliisle7716
@thedeliisle7716 5 жыл бұрын
"If there's one thing fandoms take almost as seriously as war, its shipping" That's actually true
@Coriolis-gd1zn
@Coriolis-gd1zn 7 жыл бұрын
"Be sure to have a loud drill instructor who will steal the show." Lel. (At 1:25. Turn on subtitles to see.)
@dannys8014
@dannys8014 3 жыл бұрын
"If there's something fandoms take as seriously as war, it's shipping." I know that was a pun, but you pulled it off so well.
@zenowyvern167
@zenowyvern167 7 жыл бұрын
Holy shit that "Martial the tropes" line was way too good.
@Serilia
@Serilia 7 жыл бұрын
Fandoms take shipping much more seriously than war.
@tomeufrontera1750
@tomeufrontera1750 6 жыл бұрын
When he mentioned love triangles in war stories, the first thing that came to mind was Pearl Harbour. On the money!
@chaz5256
@chaz5256 7 жыл бұрын
I'm working on a novel of my own, and your videos actually help me flesh out the world and characters. Of course, I understand your heavy sarcasm, actually listening to your advice would make an awful book.
@RJKilroy
@RJKilroy Жыл бұрын
I like how well Generation Kill elaborates on these archetypes. For example, McGraw is the typical incompetent officer, but everyone treats him realistically and constantly complains about his lack of leadership ability-even confident enough to refuse his more outlandish orders. Near the end, the show actually explains how he got to his position, that being nepotism on the part of a Colonel back home.
@hoodrat21
@hoodrat21 Жыл бұрын
You think that Encino Man, that retard in charge of Bravo Company, could also be rolled under the incompetent officer archetypes? Or is he perhaps, more complex?
@Aurelian369_
@Aurelian369_ Жыл бұрын
thats because Generation Kill is nonfiction
@hoodrat21
@hoodrat21 Жыл бұрын
@@Aurelian369_ fair
@julialopez6097
@julialopez6097 7 жыл бұрын
Research is an extremely important factor in serious stories, especially Fantasy. This can help explain some things that otherwise wouldn't occur in reality Let's say you're writing a story, and you want to place a forest of pink trees. This rips the reader from reality, because they're confused as to why those trees are pink instead of green. The research I have done (just for this damn example) explains why trees are green and why most fruits aren't: chlorophyll. If you want a pink tree, you have either two options: explain that it lacks chlorophyll, or say that the presence of certain pigments is much stronger. There IS a problem with this idea: in most fantasy stories, there's not much advancement in science. Unless you're in an urban/modern fantasy world where science weighs just as much as magic (or more).
@DarkSpyro707
@DarkSpyro707 7 жыл бұрын
then by that logic, in a fantasy setting where plenty of things dont exist are in that world, you'd have to explain every piece of weird shit in the setting. This isnt a video game where you bring up a codex that explains why the trees are pink, we dont have time or care why the trees are pink, its a fictional world with its own rules. Unless its something that is actually relevant, it doesnt NEED an explanation. If i made a world where the sky is green, do i really need to get into the science of why the sky is green? Because if i did, the best solution would be to just give a offhand one sentence explanation, not gonna get into the science of why the sky is green, cause why do you care that much if it doesnt really affect anything including the characters?
@seacliff217
@seacliff217 7 жыл бұрын
Or you could say the forest is exclusively cherry blossom trees? (sarcasm) I think what your describing would be better applied to Sci-fi or Science Fantasy. In those genres, anything out of the ordinary is more interesting if a little bit of science is thrown in. For example, time traveling could be explained by using actual theories about time travel and black holes. Just a thought. Fantasy can get away with being weird for the sake weird much more easily.
@incognitoburrito6020
@incognitoburrito6020 7 жыл бұрын
+Julia Lopez You have to balance what you explain and what you don't. Some things can be inferred by the viewer without too much trouble, some things fanon will fill in pretty well, some things just don't need explaining, and some things completely pull the audience out of the story if the writer doesn't address them. Using the pink trees example, I don't think an author would need to explain them if the trees are only there to add aesthetics. Depending on the hardness of the setting (if scifi or fantasy), it could just be handwaved with a throwaway "magic/genetic engineering did it". But if the trees were important to the plot in some way, the author would have to put in some extra effort, whether that being specifying _how_ the trees were engineered, or detailing the blessing given to the trees by the magical angels or whatever. In the end, it all comes down to Law of Conservation of Detail, with some Sanderson's Laws thrown in there. Either way, doing a little research is always great for the smaller details of the world, so long as you don't jam it in there. Plus, it always makes us nerds make little squeely noises when we spot them. EDIT: Just realized how similar this comment is to DarkSpyro707's. Oops.
@Hanmacx
@Hanmacx 7 жыл бұрын
Julia Lopez the pink trees are fake! they are monsters that lure you into a Trap!
@GamesForEverybody01
@GamesForEverybody01 7 жыл бұрын
Having the good guys win is another trope in war stories that people should avoid. Right now I'm writing a war story set in a fictional country that's inspired by a war fought by my ancestors (the Second Boer War). Like the real war, the "good guys" in the story will lose (spoiler alert) and will be exiled to another country.
@julialopez6097
@julialopez6097 7 жыл бұрын
Games For Everybody Nice! Can't wait to read that.
@alwaysonyourtail2563
@alwaysonyourtail2563 7 жыл бұрын
its not easy at all to humanize both sides of a war. the characters only live on one side of the line. and most of the time you cant dump info to make your side look good much less the other. i mean how many SOLDIERS even know what there fighting for or the politic that led to a war? few books on war have the character travel so enemy cant be good people. P.S i DO like the note book idea in this video world war z style that could work
@johnfraire6931
@johnfraire6931 7 жыл бұрын
The biggest problem (imo) is that you don't get the rewarding feeling reading the last page from a happy ending when you find out "and then they died, and their country was conquered, and their people oppressed, and..." and so on. Then again, there's no one way to write, so I guess it all depends on the writer. Endings don't *have* to be all bright sun and rainbows to get a message across. ...So I hope it works out for you!
@arturovillarreal2129
@arturovillarreal2129 7 жыл бұрын
Games For Everybody although i dont much about the boer wars apart from "netherlands" vs UK. Bear in mind that no side is rainbows and sunshine
@GamesForEverybody01
@GamesForEverybody01 7 жыл бұрын
Yeah, I'm continuing the story after the war, where they find a new place to live, so things work out for them, just not in the way they intended.
@garyconstanza3120
@garyconstanza3120 6 жыл бұрын
So according to this channel, love triangles must be a thing in every story, or else it will suck...
@louisduarte8763
@louisduarte8763 6 жыл бұрын
Or that shoe-horning in a love triangle where it doesn't fit is what makes a story suck.
@erinyes3943
@erinyes3943 3 жыл бұрын
This seems like a love triangle between a story, the bad boy triangle, and the sweet and gentle not-triangle! Whose Story gonna end up with! Read to find out~
@actualcheese1313
@actualcheese1313 5 жыл бұрын
It is also required to include at least one scene where the tank of a flamethrower is shot and erupts into flames engulfing the user and several men surrounding him despite the fact that it is incredibly unlikely that a real flamethrower would do this, even when shot.
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