Issue here is the red wedding was able to happen because Jamie was sent back to Tywin to set the plan in motion. If intercepted by Jon there is no red wedding. Frey would not have made a move without Tywins backing. Same with Roose.

Brilliant opening man, my only small criticism is that making John legitimate whilst making his house name "Snow" wouldn't stick well due to bustards still being called snow. Seen some folk use "Grey stark" but they rebelled before. Maybe House White Stark, House Ghost or something similar that could work better. 👍

So I know you took some liberties to make the story work but I have to concur that based on how you had set everything up, the Red Wedding still occuring doesn't make sense. Walder Frey is spiteful but he's still pragmatic. He only carried out the betrayal because he had the backing of both the Crown and the Boltons. In a setting where Robb maintained control of all of his houses, never lost Winterfell, and Roose didn't plot against him, I don't see Walder premptively trying to assassinate Robb just because of spite.

Great work as always Waiting for episode 2

This is really good. Keep up the great work. 👍 Can’t wait for the next part. Peace ✌🏻

Please rename John’s house

Quite a good work mate. Keep it up ... Waiting for next part

Love it the red wedding was so unexpected again keep it up 👍🏽 waiting for episode 2

This is some pretty interesting fanfic you e got going here. Anxiously waiting for the next parts!

Very interesting channel. A lot of fan fiction channels but this one feels like your listening to a audio book. Maybe it’s because I don’t like reading so I did asoiaf on audiobooks. So this is kind of like reading a book you’ve read before but experiencing it for the first time, if that makes any sense. Hope the channel does well and you keep up the interesting ideas

Caveat. Karstark wouldn't have taken that many men to repel the ironborn, The Freys wouldn't have done the red wedding under current conditions, also grey wind wouldn't have been locked up and the surprise attack would've resulted in Walder Freys death. Walder Freys sons would end up inheriting the north, so the betrayal doesn't make sense. Restart assuming the Freys stayed loyal.

How can Jon be Robb’s heir if he now has is own house?

I,love how most people agree with Alys and Jon be ship together and looking forward to their relationship. I hope Jon house is name Whitewolf then snow.

I actually really enjoyed this!

Can't wait for part 2

waiting for the second one

3 minutes in and already hooked

This is really good keep it up

Interesting idea but too rushed and as other comments already said with Jamie still being a prisoner the red wedding wouldn't accour. Also House Snow is a stupid idea, either make him a Stark or come up with a better alternative.

House Snow can’t happen as it’s the bastard name Jon would choose his house name or could go with Stark but have different banners like white wolf on grey field

Just subscribed this was really good

probably some of the best GoT fan fictions iv'e seen. i'd love to help out if possible

The only bad thing is he would have never gotten longclaw

Only Sam would be able to leave the wall with Jon those other guys were arrested and cannot leave at will

I can give you one line answer. "He will be killed at the red wedding".

More!!!

This is fun and I loved it, A few notes: -Jeor Mormont probably wouldn’t declare the arrest of Joffrey as that is against the vows lol -House Snow might cause some confusion as all bastards are named snow -and Jon wouldn’t be the heir as at that point Rickon and Bran aren’t alive. Primogeniture would take precedent

6:30 Jon being made the Robb's heir make no sense since it was not established that Winterfal was taken by Grayjoys by that point and for all intents and purposes still has 2 brother (Bran and Rickon). I Robb decides not to kill Lord Karstark and send him home, he wouldn't send home also the Karstark army, since it represented about a 1/10 of the Northern Army and they needed "all the man they could muster". Now with Lord Karstark and a small retinue returning home with Caitlin in tow, there wouldn't be a need to sent Ramsey to take back to Winterfal (by Robb and Roose) since this could be done by a more senior member of Robb's staff and this would have be seen as a mission of great honor by Lord Karstark keeping him inline while also not allowing Roose Bolton any chance to take Winterfal... In the books, Ramsey managed to take Winterfal by Killing Ser Rodrick Cassel (who was trying to retake winterfal from Ironborn) but if Lord Karstark was in command and he had his retinue, it would have been considerably harder for the small Bolton contingent to betray the Starks, kill all commanders and sack Winterfall. And even if they did that, it would have been very likely that news of the action reached Robb and the the Red wending might not have happen since, most likely he would have killed Lord Bolton for treason...

This must just be show fanfic. Cause in the books if Jon had left the watch Caitlyn would have been PISSED

Katlyn would never say its good to see you jon 😂😂😂😂😂

Hey, I love your videos and would love to discuss with you about an idea I had that may make them more unique and have more feeling through the use of a game engine to create cinematics rather than just static pictures from the show. (P.S. I know this kinda reads like a scam but I'm genuinely very enthusiastic about this)

Didn't john already say the words before Rob marched south??

Jeor gave Longclaw to Jon after his vows were taken.

I thought the opening text said the wife comes home lol

Just a question Where is Ghost?

House WhiteWolf💯

Sam isn't the oldest son

Brienne will make short work of Jon tbh😂

Yooo 2nd part BUT change the jon getting his own house thing

Ser Jamie and Brienne would carve up Jon and the rest of those idiot's like walnut pie

nice job some alternative story ideas are fun to imagine...but there are major problems with the fan fic...first, since this is a jon snow focused story WHERE IS GHOST?! u pulleda david and dan and without an explanation pulled away half of jons power and what makes him unique...also ur all over the time line...jon doesnt have long claw before he takes his vows...ned isnt imprisoned for that matter...cat doesnt release jaime til after she finds out bran n rickon are dead...robb hooks up with jane westerling cuz hes upset about bran and rikon being killed and loosing winterfell...after which the freys leave robb also roose bolton accepts tywins scheme after he sees the karstarks abandon robb...before all that robb was winning and his forces were strong and single minded...if in your fan fic the only alternative story line is jon leaving the nights watch all other story lines should remain the same unless directly impacted by his being present in either winterfell with bran or up in the riverlands with robb...mishmashing stories from clash of kings and storm of swords changing up the sequence of events that are all interlinked makes no sense...but hey its fan fic so do what u want but back things up with reason...and please give jon all his power back i.e GHOST

I mean this is way worse for the stakes than the original story.

house snow is a shitty name

You give a lot of leeway to things that just logically wouldn't happen this is pretty low tier fanfic.