My favorite part was when Springtrap busted in driving the 2019 Shabby Silverado and said "This sure has been an experience with The Twisted Ones." 11/10 Rewrite.
@flowerfieldofdaisies Жыл бұрын
this is impressive, rewriting the whole book? props to you!
@Unsightly7846 Жыл бұрын
A very nice, balanced, expanded and provoking rewrite. Loved the little touches here and there and the fact that it wasn’t just the first one with a fresh coat of paint. Everything was improved on all sides! Plus, the attention to detail was amazing, as well as the originality. No one has attempted something quite like this in the fandom, and it was very pleasant to listen to!
@ShinyRowletGuy Жыл бұрын
I think the idea of Sammy being the Puppet is really cool. At first when you said John pushed over the prop I was like "oh no Charlie was just hallucinating there was no brother". But then the reveal that it was the Puppet the whole time is really cool. I wonder how it would develop in The fourth Closet, if you feel like doing that of course. Also why dose Charlie think the puppet looks like what Sammy whould have looked like I aslo wander why William wanted in that room
@notrealnamenotatall2476 Жыл бұрын
I will be doing a Fourth Closet rewrite too! ^_^ Charlie's hallucination in the basement was sort of that, a mix of hallucination and being into contact with the Puppet. I would guess from the pictures we see of him and the fact that he's Charlie's twin that he would look somewhat like her- not identical, but would maybe share similar hair color and traits from their parents. William wanted in that box, but I'll elaborate more in either a follow-up video or perhaps in TFC rewrite. 83
@minilopgamer1950 Жыл бұрын
@@notrealnamenotatall2476 I can’t wait for your fourth closest rewrite
@savannahroberts28276 ай бұрын
@@notrealnamenotatall2476 I would love to see a fourth closet rewrite. you did such a wonderful job with this rewrite!
@sukasuru17 күн бұрын
@@notrealnamenotatall2476 is it out already omg im waiting
@Dana_Brain Жыл бұрын
I actually think tying the Box, the puppet and Sammy all together was a form of brilliance that kinda harks back to the ideas presented in FNAF4 of the idea of the crying child being the puppet, which serves as a really good parallel. And is really clever....... like it's better then Scot constantly changing what's in the box to fuck with people
@notrealnamenotatall2476 Жыл бұрын
Thank you! 8D I thought since the Twisted Ones kind of parallels Fnaf 4, it would be neat to bring the box back. Plus, I thought seeing being the door and the reveal at the end would be a nice payoff. ^_^
@404NOTFOUNDAGAIN.8 ай бұрын
Respectful opion but watch Your language.
@MeemahSN8 ай бұрын
@@404NOTFOUNDAGAIN. I can't tell if you're joking, there.
@404NOTFOUNDAGAIN.7 ай бұрын
@@MeemahSN I Am Not!
@LFDLittlefluffydino4 ай бұрын
@@404NOTFOUNDAGAIN. I don't like cuss words either
@amber4320 Жыл бұрын
I loved this! The line, "it's Sammy." after describing how he looks from John's pov and with the picture of the puppet gave me chills. I would love to see a follow up video!
@luckgod5269 Жыл бұрын
As someone who hasn't read the books BUT I study the lore of them, this completely had me fooled for like half the video. Excellent writing and nothing felt out of lline with the lore but still made me wonder about how this would change canon. 10/10 story in my opinion, better than all the other books I've heard about lol. I hope you do more of these rewrites
@Wandasolosurfavs Жыл бұрын
How do you study something you havent read yourself?
@lawnmower-pq8vk Жыл бұрын
@@Wandasolosurfavs Watching yt analyses on them probably, it’s what lots of people do since they don’t want to read the books themselves
@DeadBunny78785 ай бұрын
This honestly feels a lot better than the original book. I like that we’re not doing the whole Charlie robot thing again (I assume) plus it always felt odd to me that we never got to see what was behind the door in the original. I like that you brought the other 3 back just so it feels less weird how they were just dropped. This William feels a bit more like the one in the first book. I do think having him refer to himself as “one of them now” would be a nice reference to the first books line. I have only one problem with this story. Charlie never awkwardly says that she’s been doing sit-ups.
@notrealnamenotatall24765 ай бұрын
I shall fit in the sit-up line if I ever write it out! XD But thank you so much! I agree on the 'one of them' line too. In a way, Silver Eyes Will reads as someone who would be proud to become one of his own monsters, so that would fit perfectly!
@awesomeocelot1824 Жыл бұрын
I love how you expanded on the idea of the twisted animatronics being able to show up outside of a pizzeria, in entirely regular settings, relentlessly stalking their target. Makes every moment even more tense and brings doubt to the safety of the protagonists. Reminds me of an actual horror movie ^^ That concept was my favorite part of the original book but I always felt like they could have done more with it, so thank you for emphasizing and applying that concept so well! Especially in the college dorm and the home invasions, just the thought of those scenes gave me chills! Props to you for the great video and spectacular rewrite 👏
@do3807 Жыл бұрын
On some real shxt, this was exceptional. I know some people would argue hindsight is 20/20, and so rewritten plots are easier, but still. I love how this version is a story, and not like... A scramble to fit stuff in, tie up loose ends, introduce new concepts, like someone trying to hold all their limes in their arms. This is a story, something that would be enjoyable to someone even if they weren't legally bound to read it for lore hunting purposes. There's actually characters, who feel like people, and I like that.
@Jesterman Жыл бұрын
I'm glad Afton has an actual presence rather than just being a cripple for Charlie to bully at the end.
@whitelonewolf146 Жыл бұрын
Hello, I've been watching your stuff for a couple of weeks but finally decided to subscribe. The way you rewrite this book is wonderful. Everyone sounds human and realistic. You made Afton an actual threat. He is something to be feared. The characters make choices that make sense for their characters. Charlie actually has a functioning brain in this. Can't wait to watch more of your stuff.
@notrealnamenotatall2476 Жыл бұрын
Thank you so, so very much! I appreciate the kind words! 8D
@whitelonewolf146 Жыл бұрын
@@notrealnamenotatall2476 no problem, you earned it.
@Austin_Soares Жыл бұрын
I've been having a really tiring, troubling day today. I have been waiting for this rewrite so seeing the notification that this video was up really made it brighter. Thank you so much!
@notrealnamenotatall2476 Жыл бұрын
You're very welcome! ^_^
@epic0koala Жыл бұрын
Great work on the rewrite! This video made my drive home from work a lot more entertaining. I really like how you establish the animatronics and Afton as genuine threats that the people outside the main characters recognize and try (and fail) to combat.
@j.a.m.m Жыл бұрын
Welp, just like the first (now outdated) vid, great rewrite! Glad you made the characters more human and realistic too, especially with the romance subplot. And the jokes with Carlton are fun (especially 18:05) And that is a pretty nice concept to justify the look of the Twisted Ones(3:27), and it gives an excuse to not consider the illusion discs ever again in the franchise as a whole, which is always a plus. Oh and about the previous community post, I'll be honest, the panels don't look that bad imo, the art is fine. So yeah, dope vid! -Ham Sandwich!
@kaiserreichempireofohio834 Жыл бұрын
You knocked it out of the ballpark with this! I admittedly haven’t read or listened to any of the actual books but I do feel that this is strong storytelling on its own right. The thriller scenes had me on the edge of my seat, and the imagery depicted classic horror, but nothing over the top, a nice balance. I’ve considered doing my own sort of rewrite of this trilogy some day, with a list of concepts and ideas out the window, although it would be a mostly different story with some aspects kept, but what you did felt like a natural sequel with good set up for a third installment! In any case if anyone cares my personal rewrite of the Fnaf trilogy would be somewhat Jurassic Park Novel inspired, in writing style as well as some themes. The Villains would be(in order of installment), the haunted animatronics(plus William Afton), Circus Baby, Springtrap. I’d include Micheal Afton in the first one as a secondary character who goes on somewhat of a redemption arc, being protective of Charlie, John, and any of their friends(seeing as he’d be significantly older than all of them), in part because of his guilt regarding his brother(because of the bite of ‘83). Charlie being a robot would be a reveal at the end of the first installment, and major plot points for the last 2, being a major part of Charlie’s character arc throughout. I’d get into details about it but I kinda want to keep it vague because this comment is long enough lol
@supercatmariobros4053 Жыл бұрын
Really great rewriting! I’m surprised it’s still great even if the illusion disks are left out! Great story and better than I expected!
@sugoianimester5789 Жыл бұрын
I'm so happy you kept the romance between John and Charlie. You did an awesome job making their relationship bloom more naturally relative to how the original book made it to be!
@notrealnamenotatall2476 Жыл бұрын
Thank you! I wanted to try and give them a little more time to set up a slower-paced but more realistic chemistry. No 'I love you's yet, but perhaps a more solid foundation.
@DrMako-jo6bf Жыл бұрын
Pretty intresting take. The best part being utilizing Sammy into the story instead of him just existing off to the side
@punkghostsamurai Жыл бұрын
The way this story is told in this video is intense.
@notrealnamenotatall2476 Жыл бұрын
Thank you!
@punkghostsamurai Жыл бұрын
@@notrealnamenotatall2476 Youre most welcome. Been a sub for a while now. Please keep up the good work.
@ScalyTomate Жыл бұрын
Thanks for doing this. I haven't expected much when I read the actual official trilogy and was still somehow letdown so this is a pleasant experience.
@ghidorah15 Жыл бұрын
Outstanding work. I've never read the FNaF books myself, but judging from what you and other fans have said, _The Twisted Ones_ definitely knocked everything off the rails. This rewrite synopsis was engaging, well thought out, suspenseful, emotional, and just a very satisfying listen/watch. You clearly know what you're doing and I look forward to how _The Fourth Closet_ will turn out once you've worked your magic. And it's worth singling out: the ending reveal of Sammy being the Puppet was chilling and awesome. This sort of weight and creep factor is what the games have been missing.
@azimuddin1890 Жыл бұрын
Aubergine Man: Let’s go, I’m here to see me, and also to hear my beautiful atrocious theme song.
@MarkustheCharcus Жыл бұрын
I really love this whole rewriting and actually prefer the story presented here than the story that we actually got. Afton is actually threatening rather than looking like a joke, the characters actually act like believable humans instead of seeming like what a fourty year old man thinks teenagers act like, and it keeps the horror elements instead of replacing it for more of a sci-fi theme, which is more of a personal nit-pick of mine. This is absolutely phenomenal! Do you plan on rewriting The Fourth Closet or any other FNAF books in the future?
@mustardbiscuits9750 Жыл бұрын
Damnnnnnnnnn that was really good! I really enjoyed that! Seeing an explanation for your choices would be fun, and I personally would love to hear how you’d take this rewrite into the next book
@notrealnamenotatall2476 Жыл бұрын
Then I shall do the explanation video! 8D And working on The Fourth Closet rewrite too. Might take a little while to get done.
@justarandomfnaffan Жыл бұрын
I LOVE THIS! If I were to rate the rewrite, I'd give it a 12/10!! After listening to this, it makes me want to rewrite my rewrite! (As I don't think I had enough springtrap encounters). I think you handled springtrap perfectly!! He's super creepy, which is how he should be, unlike in the og book, where he's monologing like a super villain, I think in the og book, they were going for a sort of joker like personality, but they did it in a poor way. When doing my version of springtrap, I have been debating having him talk, as I wanted to make him a bit more feral. But now I'm debating if I should actually have him talk! (Idk :,( ) I also love how Charlie's not an Idiot!! Yayyyy!! And no one really feels like they don't matter, or, could be removed and change nothing. I love the ending!! It isn't super sudden and has a ton of great build-up!! But I loved this rewrite! It pretty similar to your original, but I can notice a few changes. But I love both, overall, a great rewrite!! 8D
@notrealnamenotatall2476 Жыл бұрын
Thank you so, so very much! ^_^ I think you can definitely do a silent or talkative Springtrap and still have him work. The biggest deciding factor being if he can put his money where his mouth is and not just be talk. XD
@justarandomfnaffan Жыл бұрын
@notrealnamenotatall2476 That's completely accurate- like he he just rambles on like "Ohhhh, I'm going to kill youu" and then just scampers away, only to appear again when the plot needs him too!! XD (And then he dissappears again)
@aidanpurkiss9457 Жыл бұрын
@@notrealnamenotatall2476cool rewite 😎 😊😁 I bit you're going to rewrite the fourth closet! 😊
@connorbruhmoment Жыл бұрын
@@justarandomfnaffanThe games and the books have something in common then! 😂
@beanieboi_8708 Жыл бұрын
Wow this is really good! That reveal of Sammy being the puppet having been locked in the box was just a good moment and finally tying back in with the SAVE HIM from the death mini games. Your voice really lends itself to these types of videos, I can’t wait to see more!
@justice8718 Жыл бұрын
There’s the fucked up part about Save Him. Midnight Motorist is leading up to the Killer murdering his own son in the mini game. Charlie’s death in fnaf6 is a misdirection on the mini game events, but her presence as the puppet will leave her able to “save him” as an animatronic you never once considered possessed before the 1990s (fnaf1 and fnaf3 mini games). Springtrap. Remember, they dealt with this animatronic long before Phone Guy’s death. They trapped him in the walls for his malfunctions and continuously hazardous behaviors. Rather than making trilogy Sammy Emily the “force of good”, he could instead be an older human that despised his fake Twin Sister. That potentially could’ve been the original idea for him in the books, but Scott likely thought it revealed too much of the OG lore. A copycat killer that pretends to be William Afton.
@cinematic205 Жыл бұрын
A Twisted Ones rewrite,this should be interesting.
@Jediand Жыл бұрын
I really enjoyed this - I do hope to hear your thoughts, explanations, rewrites, etc and where you think you might go; it's always good to hear the author's intent behind an idea. I would have probably put in more hints to Charlie's nature if that is being kept the same, but I quite like the idea she was masquerading as human this whole time, or at least have her be half human. Still this was great! Would love to see more!
@authorlacey Жыл бұрын
Sammy being the puppet would make the Save Him mini game make sense again
@anikayap6777 Жыл бұрын
WHAT AN ENDING. This is such a good rewrite and the ending was soooo satisfying. Can’t wait to see more!
@animatronikki Жыл бұрын
HOLY MOLY. This was way more than worth the wait!! I enjoy the books for what they are, but I would have been so much happier if this was what we got for book 2. Really great job.
@dr_m_93 Жыл бұрын
Now we need a rewritten version of the fourth closet. But this rewrite was amazing and, IMO, better than the original book
@ianoliver222411 сағат бұрын
Sammy being the Puppet in the book series and Charlie taking the place of Mike in the main series seems so obvious that I’m surprised they never actually did that. Hell, I’m surprised that they didn’t do anything with the Puppet to begin with.
@DecepticonFan21 Жыл бұрын
I don't want, wanna be, wanna be twisted I don't want, wanna be, wanna be cold This world's forcing my hand Can you just understand? I don't want, wanna be, wanna be twisted But I am
@RoxasOnSummerVacation9 ай бұрын
"John notices but doesnt bring it up." John in canon book: "Oh God it's Afton, right? Yep. We're all dead unless I the shuning knight come to save the day! Charlie? Answer me! You're scaring me. I cant help being constantly unnecessarily worried about you. Charliiieeeee!!!!"
@terancetan55037 ай бұрын
I accept this rewrite as canon, you can't change my mind. Having read The Silver Eyes, enjoying it and then being thoroughly dissatisfied with the following two books, I have to say that this version is WAY better. Better payoffs, characterizations and overall, a more emotional, impactful story that makes for an intriguing, exciting read. If you're planning on doing The Fourth Closet (or have already done it), I'll be waiting.
@notrealnamenotatall24767 ай бұрын
Oh, thank you so much! 8D That's fantastic to hear! I'm working on the Fourth Closet one, and I'm hoping to have it finished sometime soon. It's just taking a little while- but I'm hoping to make something special. ^_^
@snakegirl6289 Жыл бұрын
I love this why can’t this be canon instead! It’s less confusing and I like the extra touches and better consistency with the first book. I also liked, that Springtrap showed up more, Charlie was a better protagonist, Twisted Chica existed, and Sammy ended up being the Puppet. I give this rewrite 5 stars Also I kind of really want a Forth Closet rewrite now, it would probably be completely different which is good Also Afton lost his legs! Well at least he still has his suit cause I can’t stand Forth Closet Afton.
@TheAstralBlue Жыл бұрын
THIS WAS SUCH AN AMAZING REWRITE OMG, I LOVED THE PUPPET INCLUDED AND HOW SAMMY IS THERE, IT GIVES THE PLOT OF SAMMY A GOOD CONCLUSON!!!! I LOVE THIS AND EVERY MOMENT FELT INTENSE AND IT ACTUALLY RESEMBLES A STORY
@notrealnamenotatall2476 Жыл бұрын
Thank you so much! 😊I'm really, really glad to hear it!
@creeper_was_here5 ай бұрын
yeah we need the fourth closet rewrite,this feels 10x better than the original
@vincentmorris8431 Жыл бұрын
I imagine Henry carrying Charlie and leaving Sammy I recall from your Henry Wasn't a Great Person Shipahoy Wilson's theme works great for a Foxy attack!. :D Really can't get enough of Capt Foxy, can you? The 2nd movie question made me chuckle too, almost thought the book would end here; for 20 minutes, I guess not a bad guess Thanks for nod adding a squelch sound effect when he reached for the key. I recall Matpat once hoped FNAF 6 would be an animatronic brawl. Thanks for fufilling that. I wonder about either the battle or aftermath giving them damage reflecting the Withereds. Afton getting eaten, nice. I just realized you never brought up the FNAF 4 box these past months. Nice use of it. :) Loved the reunion.
@notrealnamenotatall2476 Жыл бұрын
Thank you so much! ^_^ I've got something big planned for TFC rewrite, but it's moving slowly.
@camifasi1694 Жыл бұрын
this is AMAZING!!! it flows so much smoother than the original book, and the end reveal is FANFLIPPINTASTIC!! what an ingenious way to work in a character that, in all honesty, deserved to be in the twisted ones.
@corycoral7072 Жыл бұрын
Biggest part that bothered me was how much attention was placed on the robots she was building that is just left abandoned by the ending
@imachair4681 Жыл бұрын
This is really good. I never read the originals so I don’t have any sort of frame of reference, but I really wish I could read yours as a whole book. So are you planning on rewriting the fourth closet? No pressure obviously. Well either way great video, i didn’t even realize it was 45 minutes lol. You are one of the best FNAF content creators, and I always look forward to your videos
@notrealnamenotatall2476 Жыл бұрын
I definitely am! ^_^ I've gotten a bit of work done on it too.
@midnight_cardinal Жыл бұрын
In an alternate universe where the FNAF mediums took necessary amount of time and thought in the writer's room, this sequel actually exists. Also the ending is just... (chef's kiss) awesome job!
@Adog00 Жыл бұрын
Yes been waiting for this one!! Never read the books in the fnaf series but I can’t wait to watch this one and maybe read the actual book later
@amandahallows54449 ай бұрын
This is the canon story now and you can't convince me otherwise. Edit: Please do a rewrite of the fourth closet! I need a proper and satisfying ending to this trilogy.
@PaperBag2024 Жыл бұрын
I would love to see how (if you are willing to) you would rewrite fourth closet. It would be cool to see Micheal Afton being brought in (somehow) and helping the others finish off Afton and helping Elizabeth to redeem herself.
@Wolfric_Rogers Жыл бұрын
I love it! Introducing the main conflict much earlier does the story a lot of favours. When I read the original Twisted Ones, I was constantly thinking: "When is something going to happen?" And I always felt like the puppet should have been in the trilogy. I thought it was going to be in the big closet, but no, that turned out to be for the fourth Charlie bot. I also like how Charlie just knew she had to SAVE HIM.
@DraconicWealth5 ай бұрын
Fantastic work, immediately hooked my attention and kept me gripped the entire time! You're a talented writer! I kinda want to see you write this out in detail as an actual novel, though I suppose that's impractical for a variety of reasons...
@notrealnamenotatall24765 ай бұрын
I've considered writing it out as a fanfiction, so if I do and post it I will definitely link it! And thank you so much! 😊
@flynnlea Жыл бұрын
I haven't read the original, but this narrative is so much fun. If this was the actual story I'd definitely get the books. Also love your narration style. Super relaxing but you also manage to make the horror parts super creepy haha
@Lightman0359 Жыл бұрын
All it needed was Afton mumbling "I...always...come back!" when he grabs Jessica, appears in the dorm hallway or is dug up by baby. If you use Bonnie Kreuger [feel free to call Afton that when he does something cheesy] he needs his pickup line.
@deltalock Жыл бұрын
This was amazing! If Scott decided to rewrite the silver eyes trilogy, he should definitely 100% hire you my friend! I loved the video you are a great writer and youtuber keep it up my friend you will go places I promise that's why I subbed to you a great fnaf theorist too 🙂👍
@BasicallyBaconSandvichIV3 ай бұрын
If you want the twisted animatronics to be even more scary, you could have Afton do a little tinkering on them. Just a little bit, to make them even more scary and even more deadly. It would also fit their name more, since they now are Henry's animatronics TWISTED to Afton's will. Intended EDIT: OK, so I wasn't at the part where it's revealed that they we're made by Afton. I still think it would make them more twisted, since they are TWISTED recreations of Henry's animatronics made in Afton's image. PS.: Accidentally clicked "delete" instead of "edit". Whoops. I tried to recreate my original comment best I could. Thank for seeing it on a 10 month old video BTW! [Yes, thank is a DSAF reference. Great for noticing!] ACTUAL EDIT, since I accidentally clicked post before I was finish (Feel free to facepalm, I deserve it): Great video by the way! It's much better written then the actual Twisted Ones. I'm honestly really interested what a follow up to this story would look like. I rate this rewrite 42 dead Sammy's out of 37 puppetboxes!
@Chillipeffer Жыл бұрын
Real comment this time, spoilers to those people that immediately read the comments The world building is amazing, bringing in previously important characters, even if they aren't relevant right now, and also giving them a reason to be there really keeps the story consistent. As for Charlie's discovery of the door in her dreams, the use of the FNaF 4 box was amazing and it caught me so off guard and it was nice to see her get closure with Sammy. Not to mention Sammy is the Puppet?! Now this is how to follow up on The Silver Eyes. but still fuck illusion discs
@Lulu-uc4zp Жыл бұрын
Incredible work! Writing is a passion of mine and I was so stricken by the novels’ raw potential that went unused. This is so compelling and satisfying. I would love to see the continuation. You have a lot of skill!!
@CoolBeanSoup Жыл бұрын
This is already better than what the book had. Even though, I haven't read it, but I did listen to the story from a KZfaq video where someone read the book aloud.
@jinjar7453 Жыл бұрын
You know, I always thought robot Charlie was a huge missed opportunity. She's an engineer and a robot. I would've loved to see her clawing back her identity from her father, maybe making some modifications he wouldn't have liked. Changing her eye colour or something. Now I'm curious about robot Sammy. She's probably excited to have her brother back, but also curious. Does she want to know what's under the hood? Would he be angry at that, or just treat it like a sister who always wants to style your hair? Theres so much possibility in here, I love it. While funko will mourn the loss of twisted wolf, it was probably for the best. Can't wait to see what's coming next!
@zincpodzzz Жыл бұрын
This was absolutely fantastic! I was hooked the entire time, and genuinely scared for the characters at parts. Wonderful stuff, I wish this was canon.
@notrealnamenotatall2476 Жыл бұрын
Thank you kindly! 😊
@Lo0serx3 Жыл бұрын
I haven't finished Twisted Ones yet, at the part where Charlie went to the dead girl's house and found the holes in rhe backyard, and i can already tell your rewrite is much better.
@user-xk4fw2yc8r Жыл бұрын
I love this!! I would love to read a whole saga of re-writes by you!
@UrsaMinor-6910 ай бұрын
Honest to god blown away by the quality of this video, not just the writing but the fact that you edited the entire thing with spot-on pictures as well. The writing itself was engaging throughout, and you made great use of all the pieces available to you. Really fantastic job, i loved it!
@UnluckySuperstition Жыл бұрын
Honestly, I've never read the books so I cant really comment on the original source content- but this was a really well put together story on its own account- like a superb fan fiction in a way. You have a nice reading voice as well.
@dreadsfor3stАй бұрын
i almost yelled at the puppet sammy reveal i know this video is from a year ago but your writing ideas still hold up
@notrealnamenotatall2476Ай бұрын
Thank you! 8D
@itsjustmedrago Жыл бұрын
*Afton being shocked by Charlie*: THE AUDACITY OF THIS B-
@alfinator271 Жыл бұрын
Jesus christ, that twist with the puppet gave me chills. The way it just stood up and towered over John and Carlton directly reflects the terror I felt playing FNAF 2 Help Wanted edition and seeing the puppet get out of it's box.
@sebay4654 Жыл бұрын
I actually love this. I wouldn't have even considered making the puppet Sammy. In my rewrite, Sammy is still relevant, but specifically in my rewrite, I actually put a few Charlie bots behind the door - the previous versions of her at younger ages. Since they each developed emotions of their own and are actually capable of producing remnant in my rewrite/a soul from the little spark provided by Henry's sacrifice (specifically because though they walked and talked like her, they weren't her), so in his grief, he killed himself in a secret underground room containing all the Charlie bots she'd ever need to grow old into her 90s if she wanted - most in a state that would be considered missing the last pieces. (He sold every last inch he had in the fazbear brand including the IP for Money) The remnant of his feelings, but also the happy memories that he was focusing on (the idea that Charlie's waiting for him on the other side), produced remnant/soul possession, albeit a very tiny quantity of it, as his death was quick and painless, and he had given himself up to it (fixing the bloody magic tears problem). My use of the puppet ironically reverses the positions in your ending with a dead, basically Charlie bot, and a free and roaming puppet who's trying to get to the Charlie who wasn't taken by Afton (note that Afton had access to the 4th closet but never found the code to the elevator I've transformed it into and so took the 4th Charlie bot, experimenting on it, giving it specific features like making ice cream and inflating balloons right at her fingertips, a fatter/larger and taller build, and basically transformed her into Baby. On the first day of her performing, she killed Elizabeth Afton's own child and was effectively discarded, locked away in a bunker until needed). Specifically, the ending of the 2nd book confronts the topic of Charlie being a robot, and her reaction was just to surrender and die. After all, she's not real anyway. But the puppet sees she's truly developed her own emotions and can even generate remnant, so offers her the gift and has to convince her to take it.
@sebay46549 ай бұрын
Note that after the disaster killing Elizabeth and after that event unlike in the games completely abandoning the bot underground, He ripped most of the upgrades he'd made to baby and replace the more plastic clown makeup plates with the artificial skin that Henry made trying to revert it to henrys base design and ultimately when it was turned back on something new was born something that wasn't Charlie, wasn't baby, wasn't Elizabeth and most of all wasn't under Aftons modified programmings control Afton had visited her lots to help to try and help her remember Elizabeth's memories which she did she also remembered Elizabeth's love for her farther along with Henrys hatred of Afton for killing not just his own daughter also killing more kids(A note Left inside the programming of the bot Afton in his pride never thought to erase originally intended for Charlie should she ever realise her nature as a robot to find (this also includes an apology for the anger he felt that led to him severely damaging the robot originally (which she also remembers) and when the auto retrieval program grabs Charlie before Afton could directly and gets her to safety she is ordered to get into the friend group to try to locate the third Charlie bot because wherever she was taken the code to what Afton calls the Fazbear Legacy also likely exists nearby (the automated program was supposed to trap her in the 5th closet in the hidden door where the puppet Was trapped with the 2 previous Charlie bots whom had both broken at the revelation of their lack of being real and refused the gift completely fading (their remnant and memories merging with the original Charlie)
@doomer17o Жыл бұрын
Bro, I just saw your community post. I was not expecting to see another upload so quickly! Cant wait to watch the rest of it!
@Crow-uh6mj Жыл бұрын
From all of the stuff I have seen I have enjoyed all of the ideas you have proposed and I see this as a testament of your skill as a storyteller. Honestly they need people like you working on the Fnaf lore.
@SollidnitrogeN Жыл бұрын
HOOOOLY SHIT THAT REVEAL BEFORE THE EPILOGUE IS FUCKING *GOLDEN* OH MY GOD! This story is fucking amazing! I for real feel inspired listening to this, and that moment is good enough to make an animatic out of! Im curious, do you plan to do a fourth closet remake at any point? because this story can absolutely stand on is own, but the hooks you put in are SO good, I'm intrigued to see what you'll do.
@notrealnamenotatall2476 Жыл бұрын
Thank you kindly! 8D
@BeebletheBee Жыл бұрын
Absolutely loved this! So much better than the og
@isabelburnos980 Жыл бұрын
This was such a great rewrite!! I like that we actually got a reveal of the puppet and that the Charlie bot plot line is gone. The thing that made the dislike the Charlie bot plot line is because of the ending, I feel like Charlie deserved a much better ending than being killed off because of how her father treated her as a coping mechanism than actually loving her. And ngl, I kinda felt bad for how Henry treated the evil Charlie bot too. Like maybe evil Charlie bot could've had a redemption by saving Charlie, Charlie realizes that she's more than just a replacement for her dad, and then her and evil Charlie bot could've been twin sisters or whatever. One thing that I would change about the rewrite is instead of Afton creating the twisted ones, it was Henry. Henry created the twisted ones as a prototype to Lefty, to capture the puppet. However after failing, Henry sealed them away before passing on. Charlie realizing that her dad created the twisted ones and not Afton could've created some great angst for Charlie about her dad and foreshadow the puppet as well. The only thing that Afton programmed into the twisted ones was to kill, the rest Henry already did. The twisted ones are after Charlie because they think that she's the puppet, and they think that she's the puppet because the twisted ones look at the puppet the same way that Charlie saw the puppet, like how he would've looked if he survived, identical to Charlie. And maybe Lefty, the 'good' twisted one, the one that didn't fail Henry, could've been inside the closet as well. Other than that, this was a fantastic rewrite and I'm excited to see more from you!!
@serendipitysplit1334 Жыл бұрын
Thank you for gifting us the version we all deserve
@kyliebunce592 Жыл бұрын
Quite a glimpse into what the book series could have been like if it had been handled by someone competent.
@TheKingOfMadness-ez1oi Жыл бұрын
How do you make such long videos so quickly? You made the hour long Freddy video in what I recall as a matter of days. I’m very impressed, though granted that isn’t much from a 14 year old. But my point is, keep making great videos
@KalinTheZola Жыл бұрын
I'm pretty sure they've been working on this video for a while now.
@notrealnamenotatall2476 Жыл бұрын
Wait, I read your comment wrong! XDD But yeah, I was working on it in the background for a while. ^_^ The recording and audio editing took a while.
@coffee-ouji Жыл бұрын
I loved the rewrite, of course even if I didn't read the originals at all I still like the use of a lot of concepts that are familiar to FNaF but still easy to understand I'm also amazed by yur narration. See, i don't like listening to audiobooks because i can't picture things as good as when I'm reading by myself but I was very capable of picturing most things, maybe because of the visual aid from the video itself but I was looking away for mos of it, still, I'm pretty amazed!
@legionbeast Жыл бұрын
It was a very enjoyable rewrite and made the events carry a lot more weight and suspense.
@Grinningfartking6969 Жыл бұрын
you have a great voice, cant wait for more readings like this! keep up the great work
@notrealnamenotatall2476 Жыл бұрын
Thank you! 😊
@kaycee7738 Жыл бұрын
It's here. Can't wait to watch this twice back to back
@TheSameGoobyGuy10 ай бұрын
“Charlie doesn’t know how springtrap couldn’t guess that the code was her birthday” *William is inside of an animatronic, that animatronic doesn’t have human sized fingers, have you ever tried to open a padlock with huge fingers?*
@sukasuru16 күн бұрын
"It's not my fault! I have these fat, plastic fingers and I can't press the buttons!" - Afton
@BlusterTheBenevolent Жыл бұрын
I gotta say, when Baby came around in the epilogue and said “It’s Babin’ time”, I stood up and I clapped.
@Dragons_Rule-cringe Жыл бұрын
This is WAY better than the original!
@Sparkle8205 Жыл бұрын
I actually LOVE this rewrite of the twisted ones, can’t wait to see what you do with the fourth closet. It’s a lot better and more logical than the actual book, lotta props to ya
@notrealnamenotatall2476 Жыл бұрын
Thank you so much! 😊
@thesmilingman7576 Жыл бұрын
12:47 that's better than drawing art and dedicating two pages worth of info without even hinting at the characters existence
@midnightgamer2088 Жыл бұрын
Great story, I like the idea of Charlie surviving and her brother possessing the Puppet instead
@terrantitanium6441 Жыл бұрын
Had a dream about a video idea for you What if you briefly went over the themes and messages in each of the FNaF stories? It'd be an interesting look into the books that no one else seems to really pay much attention to.
@notrealnamenotatall2476 Жыл бұрын
That's a really interesting idea! 8D I'll add it to the list!
@terrantitanium6441 Жыл бұрын
Awesome! Looking forward to more of your content.
@LaggingLeland5 ай бұрын
I think Twisted Ones and Fourth Closet are a lot like many stories with wasted potential, they serve more as a glorified proof of concept rather than an actual final product. I genuinely think that the both had amazing ideas but had very poor execution, sad that the graphic novels didn't really fix anything.
@rasta_bot4570 Жыл бұрын
First of all, kudos for the "Sammy is the Puppet" twist. I admittedly already knew it would be the case, as I had listened to some parts of the old video ! ^^' But hey, gotta congratulate you for it anyways. It always seemed like the most logical answer to me and to this day, it still baffles me that Scott didn't go with it ??? Like, I remember reading TSE and thinking it made sense : Sammy was William's first victim and was abducted at Fredbear's. Seemed like a mix of SAVE HIM and the missing child of STAGE 01. Furthermore, Charlie spends the entirety of TTO being like "I can feel him ! He's trapped in a BOX !" Like... A box. Surely it was supposed to ring some bells, right ? And oh boy, I'm in love with how you included Springtrap in the story. Like. Springtrap genuinely scares me. Not the rabbit suit itself, but the man inside. I have this interpretation of William Afton who's really scary to me and you nailed it with your Springtrap here. Charlie seeing him in the empty corridors of the dorm reminds me A LOT of actual nightmares I've had with Springtrap hunting me down. And the scene in the basement where he approaches Charlie is terrifying. Kudos again for using "Creepy Freddy" as the background music, because it made it even scarier. I wonder which route you will take for your Afton. I assume he's after the Puppet because it's the first haunted animatronic he managed to "create" by killing Sammy. I'm curious about the Twisted being made to kidnap and kill kids like the Funtimes though. I'm also happy you included the rest of band. Carlton, obviously, for being like, the best character. But even Marla, Lamar and Jason. Even though they're not that important, I really like Marla for some reason and Jason had this connection with the dead children which I feel like shouldn't have been brushed off. Surely the boy would have been marked by the overall experience. As for the Charlie/John relationship you did a really good job with it. I like what they had in TSE. Childhood sweethearts who haven't seen each other in 10 years and who obviously don't know each other that well, but who manage to reconnect and get to know each other properly. There's still this bond made of genuine appreciation and trust, turning into something more. It's a cute teenage romance. Your version has a good development and isn't as awkward and rushed as it is in TTO with the "I love you" which came out of nowhere for heh... I don't know. Dramatic effect ? Mentioning Aunt Jen and her making up with Charlie was also appreciated. I really wanted Aunt Jen to be more important in the story, as surely she would know a lot. I hope you don't kill her for nothing in your TFC rewrite ! ^^ Overall, the original TTO always felt like a waste of time to me. I remember finishing the book in the middle of the night and going to bed feeling strangely empty. I had no idea what I had just read, but it wasn't FNaF. It wasn't a sequel to the first novel I had really liked. You fixed that, offered us a great sequel I wish could have been canon, and for this I am grateful. There aren't many rewrites for the books in the fandom, which is a shame. And sometimes, I'd like to see something which isn't my own AU. So thank you for doing the job. 👍 Edit : I just realized this but where is Golden Freddy ? 😳
@regenerations672 ай бұрын
Really loved your take on twisted ones, really hope you do fourth closet to end this trilogy, I can see that used some story elements here from your 'The Buried Voice' fic, a story that I love to death and has been inspiring me on my own fnaf fic. Really hope you do more original story based videos, your take on the fnaf lore is phenomenal.
@notrealnamenotatall24762 ай бұрын
Thank you so much! 8D I'm working on the Fourth Closet script in the background, I just got a little behind. What's your fic called?
@regenerations672 ай бұрын
@@notrealnamenotatall2476 Actually it's a work in progress and not out now, the pending name is "The Fractured Child" It takes place after the fourth closet, It has Charlie go through an identity crisis as she tries to connect with her astranaged family. This fic is inspire by a post I saw a while back talking about the concept, I loved it so much that I though about making a story about it. don't want to give much away, but it'll use elements from fnaf 4 but with a more horror twist.
@notrealnamenotatall24762 ай бұрын
@@regenerations67 Oh, that sounds really cool! 8D When you do post it then PLEASE drop me a comment! I'm always looking for something to read. ^_^ Also, sorry this took so long. I lost your comment. >.
@Iwuznothere Жыл бұрын
As Sammy is such a non-entity in the story after Twisted One's big shock, its absolutely reasonable to make him the robot kid. To then turn it around to imply that the Puppet was William's invention stolen by Henry is, interesting. One takes the other's kid and makes a monster, one takes the other's monster but for what purpose. Guess I'm now curious what this means for your version of the Fourth Closet.
@sukasuru17 күн бұрын
i listened to this for a second time now and im crying again, god this is so well written
@RealKingCRK Жыл бұрын
Nuthin like buckshot to do massive damage to the undead, by far my favorite part because Afton feels pain. You did a amazing job. 15/10
@karldi7648 Жыл бұрын
Wow, I loved this so much! I was so happy when you excluded the illusion disks, and included Lamar and Jason. I appreciated that a lot, because I always disliked the way they got kicked out of the story. And the puppet?!? Brilliant! I can't wait for what you'll do next, congratulations! 🤗🤗
@arcanedarkling Жыл бұрын
HOLY MOLY THAT IS AN INCREDIBLE RE-WRITE! I wish this was the real book-
@notrealnamenotatall2476 Жыл бұрын
Thank you! 8D
@mdg245 Жыл бұрын
I really love hearing how you tell stories. This is just a delight.
@CreatorKrist Жыл бұрын
amazing as always matey! Keep up the great work as always 👍
@jessemaynard1136 Жыл бұрын
You did a great job rewriting The Twisted Ones.
@user-lt8lm1vv9v Жыл бұрын
Oh, this is a very fun rewrite! I liked how you described relationships of Charlie and her friendgroup - and Clay! The way twins reunited in fire was perfect! I do love the idea of android Charlie, her being alive and Puppet being Sammy is also very fun to think about. IF she's human, that is. Lizzie/Baby is a wonderful cliffhanger and a tease! ALSO. Did Henry left Puppet Sammy there? How... convenient for him to not be there to give anyone an explanation. Poor aunt Jenn!
@senpai-satan4975 Жыл бұрын
holy shit, that was so good! i love how you tied in so many different things into the story, id love to have another video about this and maybe more rewritten stuff from ya!
@JJPRODUCTDELUXE Жыл бұрын
This is like..very good, listen..I always HATED the twisted ones and the fourth closet [besides the designs of the twisted ones..they were..sorta cool] and the whole trying to tie itself back to the lore of the games..now that’s alright..if it was just the illusion disk or William..even if the illusion disk doesn’t make sense and remnant got..ruined..it could’ve worked..but of course scholastic and crew had to confuse things even more..but your rewrite just took out the bad parts or improved them..like god you made William a threat and I absolutely love that, all of this rewrite is fire, 10/10 for sure, can’t wait for FNAF The Fourth Closet: Rewritten .. .. Meanwhile golden Freddy: “is it me or did I just miss something-“