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Terrible Writing Advice

Terrible Writing Advice

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In the battle for pop culture only mean internet comments can turn the tide! Learn only the best tactics to employ against content creators as the eternal battle between critic and artist rages on with no end in sight. Read my honest thoughts on giving criticism here: jpbeaubien.com/terrible-writin...
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@Wyattporter
@Wyattporter 6 жыл бұрын
“My arm is getting tired from all these stones I keep throwing from my glass house.” God your channel is magnificent.
@aaroncsoka7294
@aaroncsoka7294 6 жыл бұрын
Now that's good criticism! (..if I understood you correctly 😅)
@briciolaa
@briciolaa 6 жыл бұрын
i didnt understand that line actually. can someone explain it to me please?
@slateoffate9812
@slateoffate9812 6 жыл бұрын
Luna Arli You know the phase, "glass cannon,"? It's like that.
@geliscon
@geliscon 6 жыл бұрын
Luna Arli That line is a play on the phrase "People who live in glass houses shouldn't throw stones." It means that you shouldn't be a hypocrite. For example, you shouldn't make fun of or attack someone for not wearing sunblock in the summertime if you yourself do not wear sunblock in the summertime. JP made that reference because in this video he talks about how you shouldn't be overly mean or nitpick when giving criticism, yet his sarcastic videos can be seen as mean or nitpicky (even though that is the point of his videos). It is unrelated to the phrase "glass cannon" which means that something is very powerful but can break easily. It's most often used in gaming, where something or someone has very high offensive strength, but is very weak defensively.
@vdesatch6273
@vdesatch6273 6 жыл бұрын
Lawrence Gist It really isn't.
@ConfidingTripod
@ConfidingTripod 6 жыл бұрын
That rant about coffee shops went on way too long because coffee shops are stupid and I hate them.
@darekbaird
@darekbaird 6 жыл бұрын
I've always been a tea shop person myself
@condorboss3339
@condorboss3339 6 жыл бұрын
Death to Starbucks!!!
@unknowndane4754
@unknowndane4754 6 жыл бұрын
You forgot that because you personally dislike coffee shops it means that the story is universally crap
@sleepysera
@sleepysera 6 жыл бұрын
All I could think of was SAO which got SO much shit for all its coffee shop/café scenes even though the constant repeat of those is really one of the smaller issues..xD
@REALmikegordan
@REALmikegordan 6 жыл бұрын
Actually, I am quite fond of coffee shop scenes. Like in The Room. Anyway, how's your sex life?
@fireflocs
@fireflocs 6 жыл бұрын
Don't forget: If somebody gives a reasonable critique of something you like, praising its good points while also pointing out the areas in which it needs improvement, they're obviously a hater since they didn't just celebrate every single thing about it, and you should engage in a flame war with them until the sun burns out.
@ChaosRayZero
@ChaosRayZero 6 жыл бұрын
Yeah! Sweaty slapfight's right- they wrote, "you're character's a sue." They used the wrong "your", therefore the character can't _possibly_ be a Mary Sue!
@Xehanort10
@Xehanort10 3 жыл бұрын
And according to obsessed fanboys and fangirls fans who are willing to criticise certain aspects of series they like aren't "true fans" even though there's no such thing. Fanboy and fangirl logic is "just blindly praise the series you like, pretend there's nothing wrong with it and that nothing has to be done better, delude yourself that to be a fan of a series you have to like every part of it even the bad ones." Legitimate critiques are evil plots to ruin the series in their minds.
@ChaosRayZero
@ChaosRayZero 2 жыл бұрын
Just tacking on a note, now that an old comment in this chain got deleted and my reply has no context anymore- I don't remember the exact post, but I think somebody with the screename "Sweaty slapfight" said something about responding to the "haters" by complaining about their grammar, rather than trying to understand which "areas needing improvement" they're talking about. Because as we all know, one little typo or confusion over homophones completely invalidates anything you're trying to say! I know I could've edited the 3-year-old comment, _I just didn't want to._
@saniel2748
@saniel2748 2 жыл бұрын
Freaking Half Life fanbase is like that
@nenmaster5218
@nenmaster5218 2 жыл бұрын
@@saniel2748 Hilarious video, only increasing my Love for Good-Faith-Criticism, especially the Big and Long Variant. Hbomberguy covering RWBY and also Sherlock so well that people literally comment all the time ‚Wow, i do NOT know this Show and yet i watched hours of Crticism about it!?!’, just like Jay Exci and Mdavocate did and got the very same comments, over and over again.
@slipknotboy555
@slipknotboy555 6 жыл бұрын
"After all, only you can save pop culture from [insert -ism here]!" Hahaha, yes, this
@henrynelson9301
@henrynelson9301 3 жыл бұрын
Andrew Dobson
@victoriar4650
@victoriar4650 3 жыл бұрын
After all, only you can save pop culture from criticism
@lukamilosevic661
@lukamilosevic661 3 жыл бұрын
C U M M U N I S M
@firstEmperorAugustus
@firstEmperorAugustus 3 жыл бұрын
This is literally Twitter in a nutshell
@iexist1300
@iexist1300 3 жыл бұрын
We must defeat these evil metabolists
@pandorion8741
@pandorion8741 6 жыл бұрын
And remember, the more obscenities the better, it helps add a layer of urgency, meaning the author will feel and connect with the critique the better!
@mehmeh2255
@mehmeh2255 6 жыл бұрын
Ares 90 All the obscenities!!! WE NEED THE HYPERBOLE OF WORST BOOK EVER, THEREFORE WE MUST USE ALLLLLLLLLL THE OBSCENITIES! Why even stop at one language? This is the Internet, Google Translate will perfectly serve to offend the author!
@chief7033
@chief7033 6 жыл бұрын
the best critisim is "ur mum gae no givebacks and ur a bich ! 121REEEEE"
@pandorion8741
@pandorion8741 6 жыл бұрын
Link's AMV. Ya I love it, 500+ hours logged
@asalways1504
@asalways1504 6 жыл бұрын
Be sure to send threats of torture and murder to the author and or their loved ones, that's rational and totally not disturbing at all!
@caihah.1404
@caihah.1404 6 жыл бұрын
Obscenities do show sincerity. So you can tell that this entire comment is insincere by the lack of obscenities.
@sylendraws1249
@sylendraws1249 6 жыл бұрын
Authors think Praise=Criticism Random people on the internet think Hate=Criticism
@colmryan9289
@colmryan9289 6 жыл бұрын
SylenDraws This is the third video in a row I’ve seen you in the comments section.
@bremcurt9514
@bremcurt9514 6 жыл бұрын
Colm _ Ikr, he watches all good videos
@danielhall271
@danielhall271 6 жыл бұрын
+
@heidiwebster3867
@heidiwebster3867 6 жыл бұрын
So...pretty much everything is criticism...
@kathyjoy5618
@kathyjoy5618 6 жыл бұрын
I had it more as when you ask somebody for criticism but they only want to say nice things because they're too afraid to hurt your feelings, or somebody likes your work so much they refuse to see flaws (of which every body of work has) rather than that praise is not criticism (because it can be). Criticism can be positive and negative - the key is for it to be constructive. So you can praise an author for something that works really well, as long as you can explain why it works so well. What this comes down to is empty hate/praise is not criticism. You can really dislike an element in a story, and explaining why is constructive crticism.
@miles6283
@miles6283 6 жыл бұрын
I kinda wanted to see how that Mary Sue story ends.... the last thing is Jeff suggesting they get oiled up and.... donate to charity?
@TheoneandonlyDrops
@TheoneandonlyDrops 6 жыл бұрын
...think about their lives, get proper jobs and start dating normal people.
@vocalcalibration8033
@vocalcalibration8033 6 жыл бұрын
Okay now I'm curious.
@TheoneandonlyDrops
@TheoneandonlyDrops 6 жыл бұрын
pecu alex oooh I like that ending best XD
@minhkhangtran6948
@minhkhangtran6948 6 жыл бұрын
@pecu alex After that, they became brother in arm and lover in bed, and decided to going on adventure in order to add more to their harem, showing the world feat of true masculinity, facing against any adversity the world throw at them
@poeterritory
@poeterritory 6 жыл бұрын
Personally, I think that Mary Sue is a bit of a Mary Sue.
@Mudkip971
@Mudkip971 6 жыл бұрын
This video should be mandatory seen by anyone who should be allowed to do something on the internet.
@anqied
@anqied 6 жыл бұрын
Knowing the internet, half of them will somehow miss the sarcasm.
@louisduarte8763
@louisduarte8763 6 жыл бұрын
Only half? How optimistic.
@slateoffate9812
@slateoffate9812 6 жыл бұрын
ThePursuit OfSymmetry What time period? If it's the 1600s, no thank you.
@slateoffate9812
@slateoffate9812 6 жыл бұрын
Except those who'll take it literally.
@theopollind8024
@theopollind8024 6 жыл бұрын
i.e. booktubers. Every booktuber who only makes coin shitting about other people's books.
@misterid1075
@misterid1075 6 жыл бұрын
“I think this critic is really bad. They seem to be writing for the sake of how wittily they can destroy a work, rather than trying to provide helpful critique to the author. Not really worth listening to.” “Coward. You just can’t handle criticism.”
@alexsmith2910
@alexsmith2910 6 жыл бұрын
I have seen this very thing said before and it groan inducing. You are so right.
@carbon1255
@carbon1255 6 жыл бұрын
Destroy... ehh.. Critism should test to destruction. no point in buttered up criticism. If it is built solidly, it will stand against the harshest criticism.
@waharadome
@waharadome 3 жыл бұрын
@@carbon1255 doesn't work that way in reality, especially for long formats like books. there'll eventually be a controversial topic where the critic can obliterate you without any purely logical comeback
@autumnveir1168
@autumnveir1168 3 жыл бұрын
Philippine politics in a nutshell
@genarocastrojr.2608
@genarocastrojr.2608 3 жыл бұрын
January Galura lmao true
@d_wang9836
@d_wang9836 6 жыл бұрын
Imagine how meta it would get if CinemaSins comments on this video
@sblower9410
@sblower9410 6 жыл бұрын
The meta would go Super Saiyan 3!
@Ultimus31
@Ultimus31 6 жыл бұрын
Or the guy who does "Everything Worng With" videos *on* CinemaSins videos. Makes me wonder how deep the rabbit hole goes.
@benthomason3307
@benthomason3307 6 жыл бұрын
the rabbit hole is now a concentric Mobius loop; congratulations, you broke the universe you f*cking knobhead.
@TheoneandonlyDrops
@TheoneandonlyDrops 6 жыл бұрын
What if it's CinemaSins commenting here about the people that do "Everything wrong with CinemaSins" videos?
@vocalcalibration8033
@vocalcalibration8033 6 жыл бұрын
And then we can work IHE into this mess somehow.
@chartypeplays2396
@chartypeplays2396 2 жыл бұрын
"Don't bother to explain *why* it's bad!" This is my favorite part of the whole video. I think this is perfect terrible writing advice, sums up the majority of bad feedback.
@paula194
@paula194 6 жыл бұрын
3:20 _Puts up the most horrible thing ever written by a man and expects people to not google it_ You know what you did, and you should feel bad.
@mennograafmans1595
@mennograafmans1595 6 жыл бұрын
I looked it up, but the moment I saw Marquis de Sade, I knew what it would be like. Lets just say that sadism is named after him for a reason.
@mennograafmans1595
@mennograafmans1595 6 жыл бұрын
There's even a movie about it. Can you imagine.
@armadillito
@armadillito 6 жыл бұрын
menno graafmans that says a lot, doesn't it?
@ABPHistory
@ABPHistory 6 жыл бұрын
He should indeed I got so morbidly curious I read the wiki on it and almost searched up the PDF, send help please.....
@julietfischer5056
@julietfischer5056 6 жыл бұрын
I have yet to read anything by de Sade, but from what I've read ABOUT his work, it's pretty much exactly what happens when you throw an overprivileged twat in prison: unrealistic characters, implausible plotlines, and a lot of 'Life sucks!' Despite what people want to believe, he was never cleverly poking society and showing up its hypocrisy.
@kepler6873
@kepler6873 6 жыл бұрын
Do a love tesseract! It's like a love triangle but with 16 characters! That not only makes it unimaginably convoluted for readers, but critics can't accurately attack it without knowing everything about your story! Plus it references high level mathematics so you can stand atop your knowledge and laugh at the rest of the population for not being able to comprehend your genius!
@hannahsutter3147
@hannahsutter3147 6 жыл бұрын
Even better, no one can accuse your story of being flat or two-dimensional when it's modeled after a four-dimensional cube! Complected=Deep, right?
@terry_the_terrible
@terry_the_terrible 6 жыл бұрын
YOU MANIAC! WHAT HAVE YOU DONE! Were you not content with the love dodecahedron?!? Why would you unleash such infamy upon the internets? Sweet tropes of TV have mercy on us.
@Autissima
@Autissima 5 жыл бұрын
Wait, are you the guy with hypothetical stars?
@synflwr
@synflwr 4 жыл бұрын
“Tesseract” Loki: *heavy breathing*
@shytendeakatamanoir9740
@shytendeakatamanoir9740 4 жыл бұрын
You fools! The only way to solve a love triangle is to unite every single characters together in a Love Sphere. Only then will we attend perfect harmony.
@-TPLT
@-TPLT 6 жыл бұрын
Everybody's a critic. Which is perfectly fine, as long as they keep a relative level head about it.
@ComradeDragon1957
@ComradeDragon1957 6 жыл бұрын
Are you *fucking* stupid? No,true critics are supposed to be using fucking vulgar language and logical fallacies such as ad hominem you have to be a fucking idiot to not understand this,you dont understand it because you are an idiot and this makes you so wrong. true critics also crush their dreams because we dont want to see this garbage anymore. /Sarcasm
@grrr1351
@grrr1351 6 жыл бұрын
^ Sarcasm /sarcasm
@kindoflame
@kindoflame 6 жыл бұрын
You want to hear something really sad; I almost wrote an angry comment because I though TheCommunistDragon was serious for a moment.
@adelaida5019
@adelaida5019 4 жыл бұрын
No, we have to fight immaturely!!
@adelaida5019
@adelaida5019 4 жыл бұрын
@@kindoflame that is sad😂
@AegixDrakan
@AegixDrakan 6 жыл бұрын
Love triangles are totally a running gag now, JP. I'm sorry. You are now forever saddled with the terrible burden of referencing them. XD
@paradoxzee6834
@paradoxzee6834 6 жыл бұрын
Well to be honest he started to make it a running gag, if you watch his early videos he place a love triangle in every video
@StupidMarioBros1Fan
@StupidMarioBros1Fan 6 жыл бұрын
Not sure if stating the obvious or haven't seen a lot of his older videos...
@giantflyinghog3550
@giantflyinghog3550 6 жыл бұрын
It could be worse. At least his fans aren't obsessed with throwing pommels at people.
@andrewluther9028
@andrewluther9028 6 жыл бұрын
END THEM RIGHTLY!
@oscarprudencio1799
@oscarprudencio1799 6 жыл бұрын
GiantFlyingHog I understand that reference.
@blueblade8075
@blueblade8075 6 жыл бұрын
I have a piece of advice for anyone attending a writing workshop: You don't even have to read the stories written by your fellow classmates! All you have to do is listen to what everyone else says in their critiques and piggyback off of them, saying "I agree with what they said," while tossing in a bunch of other vague criticisms like ""x' is cliche" and "you need more character development." It's easy!
@dmas7749
@dmas7749 6 жыл бұрын
*that easy
@jaschabull2365
@jaschabull2365 6 жыл бұрын
Can't say I haven't had to bluff my way through a workshop like that (mainly because I kept forgetting that some people might forget to print copies and I'd have to check online). Though I always did try to be sure to take a copy home and write down a critique after.
@xemnus766
@xemnus766 6 жыл бұрын
Is this video suppose to be satire or sarcastic? I never really knew the difference
@blueblade8075
@blueblade8075 6 жыл бұрын
Satire is a humorous yet arguably constructive way to show someone their mistakes (or mistakes that they could make,) whereas sarcasm is used to insult people and hurt their feelings. They both try to be funny and clever. Satire is usually aimed at a large audience, and sarcasm used most often in one-to-one conversations.
@dmas7749
@dmas7749 6 жыл бұрын
Mostly sarcasm. Satire is using mockery and exaggeration to point out the flaws in something, while sarcasm is something said or done in a way that strongly implies another, usually opposite way.
@neiva3250
@neiva3250 6 жыл бұрын
ALL HAIL THE LOVE TRIANGLE
@jonsnor4313
@jonsnor4313 5 жыл бұрын
Join the jove triangle, resistance is futile.
@Xx_STRHMN_xX
@Xx_STRHMN_xX 2 жыл бұрын
how
@martatarasiuk5198
@martatarasiuk5198 6 жыл бұрын
Don't forget about commas! There is no good review without rambling about every single place the author misplaced a comma!
@Lt_Voss
@Lt_Voss 6 жыл бұрын
What, do you, mean, misplaced, commas,? Commas, indicate pauses, and obviously, we should all, like, use commas, to, represent when our, brain pauses, while typing.
@lizzychrome7630
@lizzychrome7630 6 жыл бұрын
Excuse me but, sometimes a, misplaced comma is , simply, indicating that the speaker, is, William Shatner.
@julietfischer5056
@julietfischer5056 6 жыл бұрын
And the review does this while not using a single comma anywhere. Along with proper grammar and spelling -- and punctuation in general.
@julietfischer5056
@julietfischer5056 6 жыл бұрын
Shatner was trying to convey that Kirk was thinking and speaking off the top of his head. If you've seen his other work, you know he doesn't do that as a matter of course.
@waharadome
@waharadome 3 жыл бұрын
@@julietfischer5056 Picard in Tapestry: Passion..., And imagination!
@MatanteDodo
@MatanteDodo 4 жыл бұрын
My criticism pet peeves: - Treating all flaws as equally serious, especially when commenting on a noob's work. Someone's first work will be full of flaws and they'll likely delete it later in embarrassment. But they can't focus on all of them at once, so a rant that puts equal stress on things that can be fixed at their current skill level, things they should practice towards in the near future, and things that really won't come without more experience, doesn't tell them anything useful at all. - Thinking you can always pinpoint where something went wrong. Like there's a hundred steps between an idea and a final work, but you can ALWAYS tell which one the artist doesn't master and how strange, it's always either something that can't be fixed so they should quit, or something revealing a shameful hidden aspect of their personality so they should quit. - Posting your hilariously hyperlative critic to a cringe media forum. Nothing more constructive than submitting some 12 years old's Pokemon fanfic to worstfictionever dot net and have a hundred edgelords flooding their comments for a couple of weeks.
@johnathonhaney8291
@johnathonhaney8291 6 жыл бұрын
I got a client I'm helping right now with his book. Poor guy actually was expecting me to rip it to shreds, probably due to a number troll reviewers he'd had to put up with. As that paralleled my own experience with a script I'm writing with a partner, I took the time to point out strengths and weaknesses. Memo to anyone who thinks they know better than the published: should you ever get past your fear to write your own script, don't be surprised to find out how hard it is to get things straight.
@PalmerDudeGamingChannel
@PalmerDudeGamingChannel 6 жыл бұрын
oh boy do I know, I wrote a novelesque fan story cause the developer of an indie game was quite enthusiastic on the idea and let me tell you it was my first one, wrote the first chapter in an essay format, ooh boy that was a mess, but I learned and now I am not as terrible, maybe I really don't know and by the way my stories do not have run on sentences like in the comment here i am just lazy when it comes to commeting
@vocalcalibration8033
@vocalcalibration8033 6 жыл бұрын
I remember writing a handful of scripts for my drama class when I was in highschool, boy were those first few drafts messy.
@johnathonhaney8291
@johnathonhaney8291 6 жыл бұрын
PalmerDude Gaming Hey, it's a KZfaq forum, pal, not a final draft. Trust me when I say practice actually does make perfect. Keep it up and you might be surprised what you come up with.
@PalmerDudeGamingChannel
@PalmerDudeGamingChannel 6 жыл бұрын
I have already surprised myself with just how complex I can actually make a story but with subtlety, for example of the course of two stories I slowly built up this corporation that was in the background for the most part and soon it will be taking the forefront, whenever I make my third story, I still think I am not amazing though, I know you can be your own worst critic but I tell myself purposely that its not perfect because it helps me with realizing what does not work
@johnathonhaney8291
@johnathonhaney8291 6 жыл бұрын
PalmerDude Gaming If you can see the improvement, then never fret about it being perfect. At the same time, see if there are ways you can improve as you go. Perfection is a journey, not a destination. Sounds like you're already on the right track.
@cryptidcreates9942
@cryptidcreates9942 6 жыл бұрын
Thank you for existing
@PalmerDudeGamingChannel
@PalmerDudeGamingChannel 6 жыл бұрын
hey you spelled existing right! It's good to see another intellectual like myself :)
@cryptidcreates9942
@cryptidcreates9942 6 жыл бұрын
PalmerDude Gaming Yeah, that's right. I'm a fuckin genius. (I'm not though)
@PalmerDudeGamingChannel
@PalmerDudeGamingChannel 6 жыл бұрын
lol, I mostly say that cause its one of those words that always trip me up XD
@TheoneandonlyDrops
@TheoneandonlyDrops 6 жыл бұрын
You mean comments like 'If ppl mispeling exicting makes u mad mebeh u shuld stp exsisting '?
@PalmerDudeGamingChannel
@PalmerDudeGamingChannel 6 жыл бұрын
more like holy crap someone spelt a word I always struggle with flawlessly unless spellcheck was used but hey I dont blame anyone for that cause I seriously am dyslexic at typing
@gcircle
@gcircle 6 жыл бұрын
120 days of Sodom "If you value your sanity do not look up this book!" Me: Challenge accepted Me (later): I have seen things...
@PrimordialNightmare
@PrimordialNightmare 6 жыл бұрын
Someone read a feww passages while I was around. the ... erm ... instruction like form of the text made it surprisinlgy easy on my sanity. Or maybe I was already beyond broken.
@leadpaintchips9461
@leadpaintchips9461 6 жыл бұрын
Makes Human Centipede almost look tame. . . .
@andreyv.vieira521
@andreyv.vieira521 5 жыл бұрын
I got it. *GLORY TO THE EMPEROR!!!!!!!!!!!!!*
@luciferangelica
@luciferangelica 4 жыл бұрын
I read a ton of marquis de sade. i actually wanted to see how other authors handled sexual content. 120 days of sodom was like an encyclopedia of perversion
@calebwheeler8143
@calebwheeler8143 4 жыл бұрын
@Char Azanabl, don't compare it to the Dark Eldar. It's well known that The 120 Days Of Sodom is Slaanesh's favourite book. Oh, and his favourite film is Caligula.
@karaoconnoraliasraidra
@karaoconnoraliasraidra 5 жыл бұрын
What's also aggravating is when hateful trolls try to play the victim. They'll send the most hateful insults and threats to someone on social media, and then when they get blocked, they'll cry that they got blocked just because they offered a little "criticism". 🙄😤. Edit- Kudos for pointing out how ridiculous the idea that someone will give up what they're doing because someone criticized them is. I wonder about those people who think insulting and threatening others will make them bow down to them. They probably had bad parents who defended everything they did, so now they get they'll get whatever they want just by throwing a tantrum.
@ExplosiveBrohoof
@ExplosiveBrohoof 6 жыл бұрын
Hi, I'm here to give some constructive criticism for you: Quit writing. Hope I helped! Not bad over-all; just implement my advice, and I think you'll have promise!
@nenmaster5218
@nenmaster5218 2 жыл бұрын
Hilarious video, only increasing my Love for Good-Faith-Criticism, especially the Big and Long Variant. Hbomberguy covering RWBY and also Sherlock so well that people literally comment all the time ‚Wow, i do NOT know this Show and yet i watched hours of Crticism about it!?!’, just like Jay Exci and Mdavocate did and got the very same comments, over and over again. //takemyrecommendationordie
@shishsjxnsnzns
@shishsjxnsnzns Жыл бұрын
“LET ME GIVE YOU SOME ADVICE SON: Booo….”
@missmorbid1439
@missmorbid1439 6 жыл бұрын
I haven’t watched the video yet, is there a love triangle?
@cryptidcreates9942
@cryptidcreates9942 6 жыл бұрын
Miss Morbid Obviously
@trashrat279
@trashrat279 6 жыл бұрын
Yeah there is
@FourOf92000
@FourOf92000 6 жыл бұрын
There's an armada of love dodecahedrons that march on the citadel of all things decent. It's glorious.
@physetermacrocephalus2209
@physetermacrocephalus2209 6 жыл бұрын
OH BOI IS THERE EVER.
@dractolis1592
@dractolis1592 5 жыл бұрын
Doi Bantikov I choose death
@ComradeDragon1957
@ComradeDragon1957 6 жыл бұрын
Lets not forget the worst critic of them all The one that destroys everything you worked for,every word you write they critize you for it,they tell you you will never be anything good,that you will have nothing after you are done That critic Is You.
@carbon1255
@carbon1255 6 жыл бұрын
Dude, people's work who do not have this or have lost it are absolute turds. Only someone who is truly and severely self critical can get any good. Otherwise you reach good enough.
@flying-frog2669
@flying-frog2669 3 жыл бұрын
I'm so confused why did I smile at this-
@meloneatingwolf1882
@meloneatingwolf1882 3 жыл бұрын
@@carbon1255 That sounds good, until you realise too much of that means you won’t feel good enough to make any because, “why bother, It’s not like it’s going to be any good” hasn’t worked out for me so far.
@gabriellegibby3293
@gabriellegibby3293 6 жыл бұрын
Don't forget to be critical with really young writers to get some really juicy insult potential and to crush out the ambition and motivation of future creators.
@carbon1255
@carbon1255 6 жыл бұрын
3/10. That is the rule. You must compliment/hold criticism from a childs work 3 times in 10 even if it means complimenting shit else they will stop. Bit of pop psych for you there. Less than you thought, perhaps. It is also true giving praise more than about half of the time is also really bad for them.
@TOMNICE
@TOMNICE 3 жыл бұрын
Do not forget to be offended when someone criticise you back.
@sherlocksmuuug6692
@sherlocksmuuug6692 6 жыл бұрын
„Critisism should be used in order to cut loose and put other authors down while elevating your own position“ *unrelated image* A few moments later „Tearing people down is really great entertaining and great for strocking ones own ego...dont forget to be snarky too“ *another unrelated image* Yet even more few moments later. „...and go over every every minor error in excrutiating detail“ *yet another unrelated image*
@aaroncsoka7294
@aaroncsoka7294 6 жыл бұрын
(..in response to "strocking" instead of "stroking.") 01:11: "Your (1st) draft has a typo which means you are no longer considered a writer. And since your art sucks that means you no longer have any value as an indivual. In short, you suck and are a terrible person." PS: I agree with you, lol - I just wanted to reference something from this writers bible's chapter 😏
@sherlocksmuuug6692
@sherlocksmuuug6692 6 жыл бұрын
+Aaron Csoka Curse on you typo, I have brought dishonor on my family and must now commit sudoku. *(starts scribbling furiously)*
@lady_apocalypse178
@lady_apocalypse178 3 жыл бұрын
Your pp and name is amazing...
@sailornaruto39
@sailornaruto39 6 жыл бұрын
"it might be their turn" Well good thing there's already a vid for that and we know what to do.
@deltawarrior2323
@deltawarrior2323 2 жыл бұрын
On one side, there’s TAKING criticism: “How dare they not like my writing/art! There’s no possible way that anything I do needs improving! They’re just not reading/looking at it right!” Then there’s GIVING criticism: “Ugh how dare they respond to my totally well-thought out comment about how their story filled with magic sucks because It lacks logic!? I must be the only smart person on the internet!”
@timothymclean
@timothymclean 6 жыл бұрын
It's okay, your channel is -mocking- criticizing entire genres. That's not subject to the same rules as criticizing specific people, because genres don't have feelings that can be hurt. At least, I _hope_ not. If they do, and they've been biding their time to wreak their vengeance on those who mocked them, then we're all doomed...
@keithplayzstuff2424
@keithplayzstuff2424 6 жыл бұрын
I thought he just makes fun of the bad cliches...
@DrewLSsix
@DrewLSsix 6 жыл бұрын
Timothy McLean. When has this channel ever mocked a genre?
@stellam8936
@stellam8936 6 жыл бұрын
They manifest their vengeance through the actions of the authors that are their most devout followers.
@chickenbouilloncube7038
@chickenbouilloncube7038 6 жыл бұрын
YA Vampire fiction is coming for us all
@louisduarte8763
@louisduarte8763 6 жыл бұрын
DrewLSix He's mocked Cyberpunk, Urban Fantasy, and Post-Apocalyptic Dystopias.
@Site_42
@Site_42 6 жыл бұрын
I’m going to show this video to the entire SCP Community. Thank you for your service to my channel lol.
@kylehill6636
@kylehill6636 6 жыл бұрын
Site-42: SCP Foundation Fanworks what does SCP stand for?
@HonestHappyHater
@HonestHappyHater 6 жыл бұрын
Site-42: SCP Foundation Fanworks Tired of all-killing Keters, that have no lore or mistery behind them? Me too. That's why this universe should not be popularised. Seriously. Without huge popularity boom, and getting into mainstream, "Confinement" might be the only SCP-themed show ever, but at least there will be less egdy teenagers, that write unimaginative shit
@Site_42
@Site_42 6 жыл бұрын
Kyle Hill Secure. Contain. Protect. The SCP Foundation is one of the internet’s biggest creative writing communities with a focus on Sci-Fi, Horror, and Creepypasta style stories. It’s a really deep fan community; there are artists and animators and voice actors (like me) who take the stories and make things out of them.
@kathrynwilliams7097
@kathrynwilliams7097 6 жыл бұрын
"SCP stands for either Secure, Contain, and Protect (the main aims of the Foundation) or Special Containment Procedure." -the first result on Google
@Site_42
@Site_42 6 жыл бұрын
Honest Happy Hater I can’t abide by that kind of isolationism. Sure, we’ll get more bad articles, but we’ll also get more creative minds to build bigger and better things. Had I never found it myself, I wouldn’t have gotten interested in making live action adaptations of them. I’ve got a theatre and film background and lots of talented connections, and once my channel’s big enough to give me a budget, we’re going to make good shit.
@calebwheeler8143
@calebwheeler8143 4 жыл бұрын
"Why learn to break down a story to understand why it`s popular when instead you can attack it because it`s popular. Telling diehard fans they are stupid for liking something will most definitely win them over." The Hipster Creed.
@hannahsutter3147
@hannahsutter3147 6 жыл бұрын
In my college writing class (and probably many others), we were paired with another student and told to write a critique of their essay. The professor gave us specific advice for how to write the critiques and graded them. I think I learned as much from writing the critique as I did from writing the paper.
@nenmaster5218
@nenmaster5218 2 жыл бұрын
Hilarious video, only increasing my Love for Good-Faith-Criticism, especially the Big and Long Variant. Hbomberguy covering RWBY and also Sherlock so well that people literally comment all the time ‚Wow, i do NOT know this Show and yet i watched hours of Crticism about it!?!’, just like Jay Exci and Mdavocate did and got the very same comments, over and over again. //takemyrecommendationordie
@Nikku4211
@Nikku4211 6 жыл бұрын
I knew this was coming ever since the "Taking Criticism" video was released.
@themambawarrior2290
@themambawarrior2290 6 жыл бұрын
"Giving criticism is not a skill" I am glad this channel is pretty much entirely sarcastic, otherwise I would be very angry. As someone who criticizes stories and writing a lot, I know how best to do things: be polite to those who you don't know, or people who are just asking for criticism. If they obviously prefer politeness, keep being polite until they go horribly wrong. If they're small, they may have gotten to know you somewhat and realized that you actually getting angry may be an indicator of them screwing up royally. There's one person, he wrote a story rather similar to another, more popular story. I compared the first two chapters in a really long post, mostly positive towards the new story. I continued to read it, and then one chapter came along which was so poorly written that I went a bit off the rails. "There is a feeling I don't usually feel when reading, and it was surfacing during this. There are only 2 other times that I can remember feeling this: one was when someone said that men are bad, disgusting, and vile." Just a little bit. So anyways, after that, we had a discussion (a civil one, mind you) in which he asked me for advice on what exactly he did wrong (showed me his thought process) and I showed how those things may not be clear or lead to an entirely different conclusion. The two major aspects are that you keep yourself polite and constructive, and even when you get very angry, at least keep it constructive. Never just say "you suck" or "this sucks" since one's an ad hominem, and both don't have any meaning. "Actual constructive criticism in a comment thread? Have I struck gold or found Shangri-La?"
@Sashrunner
@Sashrunner 6 жыл бұрын
Constructive criticism in a comment thread can be rare, but not as rare as you think. However, the chance of constructive criticism appearing is connected to what the video is about. The chance of it appearing will definitely increase if the video is about a topic and what views or claims are made toward it. =Y
@carbon1255
@carbon1255 6 жыл бұрын
I think that if some criticism can be harsh enough to hurt your feelings, it HAS to be. That part when you feel hurt is generally the blindness to a certain inadequacy in your ability being exposed. Only when you can see it you can deal with it. If you are fully aware, then criticism of your work cannot hurt at all, polite or impolite, because you can understand whether is is correct or not. Having said that, that is not the same as shouting or aggression. Remember, it wouldn't hurt if it was not true.
@themambawarrior2290
@themambawarrior2290 6 жыл бұрын
Sashrunner The last quote wasn't actually something I said. Rather, it was a quote from someone responding to my criticism of the questionable choice of music on a certain video (the music is too loud to hear the sounds which are present in the video, but it's also far too soft and the words within the song are inaudible because of it, meaning that the possible meaning that could have been conveyed through those words to the video is lost). I was attempting to provide an example of how people think when it comes to criticism on comments. Confusion of the point is most likely due to me not explaining where that quote came from or the context.
@Sashrunner
@Sashrunner 6 жыл бұрын
That's fair
@E8794v
@E8794v 6 жыл бұрын
**Marvel movie spoiler** Thank you about mentioning target audience. I read movie reviews of people that don't like what I like because maybe I missed something. This female critic always complains and says the marvel movies are bad because there is no romance. When I read that she only likes romantic comedies all I thought was, then why the fuck is she watching action films if she is biased against the genre. If it's romance she wants, then will she be embarrassed if the movies follow the comics of why Thanos is collecting the infinity stones?
@kachiechan
@kachiechan 6 жыл бұрын
that critic must be the only person in the theater who enjoyed the subplot of Age of Ultron then LOL
@jolitero
@jolitero 6 жыл бұрын
Oh, so she's the reason why every movie feels like it needs to put some shitty romance even when it doesn't fit
@giveandtake8428
@giveandtake8428 6 жыл бұрын
Well, Thanos reason for collecting the Infinity Stones is because of his love of death.
@E8794v
@E8794v 6 жыл бұрын
GIVEandTAKE- That is what my last sentence says. You must be unfimiliar with subtlety. :V
@GigaChadh976
@GigaChadh976 6 жыл бұрын
She the same one that hated that Steve and Bucky weren’t gay for each other?
@lettuce7835
@lettuce7835 3 жыл бұрын
Once, I saw someone genuinely say they thought telling an artist that their art is horrible and that they should off themselves was a good way to offer encouragement
@caylacappel7368
@caylacappel7368 6 жыл бұрын
I had a friend who volunteered to help edit a story of mine. At first she was good and gave helpful comments, but when it was finished, and I asked her to look over it, she read one page, called the whole thing boring and terrible. Litterally, she said that it was the worst book she ever read. From one page.
@carbon1255
@carbon1255 6 жыл бұрын
If you are a girl, do not ask another girl for opinion based advice. It is a genetic imperative for women to put one another down for social advantage, whether they know they are doing it or not. Or in other cases to brown nose. You are unlikely to get neutral advice from a female as a female if you have a social relationship with them.
@caylacappel7368
@caylacappel7368 6 жыл бұрын
It depends on who you ask, I think. I asked a different female friend to look it over, and she is giving me honest advice. She's even calling me out on typos. There's a difference between constructive criticism and just criticism. The other girl gave criticism, and this friend gives constructive criticism.
@carbon1255
@carbon1255 6 жыл бұрын
Please, take general terms as general statements, everyone is different, of course. Just a balance of probabilities.
@un-capital3666
@un-capital3666 6 жыл бұрын
I have some neat ideas for videos: Continuing a series, writing an antagonist, in-universe politics, and creating side-characters.
@nenmaster5218
@nenmaster5218 2 жыл бұрын
Hilarious video, only increasing my Love for Good-Faith-Criticism, especially the Big and Long Variant. Hbomberguy covering RWBY and also Sherlock so well that people literally comment all the time ‚Wow, i do NOT know this Show and yet i watched hours of Crticism about it!?!’, just like Jay Exci and Mdavocate did and got the very same comments, over and over again. //takemyrecommendationordie
@Pikazilla
@Pikazilla 6 жыл бұрын
oh so that's why Anton EGO is a critic
@s19tealpenguin61
@s19tealpenguin61 6 жыл бұрын
Don't forget that you should never criticize a story for love triangles. Stranger Things has a love triangle and it's great, therefor love triangle make stories better.
@Moonstar79
@Moonstar79 4 жыл бұрын
2:07 The ending says "We must get oiled up and-" And what, Jeff? *And what?*
@Luke90500
@Luke90500 6 жыл бұрын
I have a problem. I'm addicted to drugs. I can't function properly, nor can I be a productive member of society. my family has disowned me all because of this drug. Terrible writing advice is my drug, and I can't stop watching his videos. Send help.
@MyVanir
@MyVanir 6 жыл бұрын
Car bomb on it's way.
@iamwhatitorture6072
@iamwhatitorture6072 6 жыл бұрын
I'm gonna give you my subtle criticism: YOU SUCK YOU PIECE OF SHIT AND NO ONE WILL HELP A PIECE OF SHIT LIKE YOU!
@Freadauk
@Freadauk 6 жыл бұрын
You had me worried about you for a second there......... Fuck you , you gay commie, you nazis should all burn in hell.
@KittyKatty999
@KittyKatty999 5 жыл бұрын
*Sends you more Tribble Writting Advice, while laughing in a cute evil way.* >:3
@fantasyshadows3207
@fantasyshadows3207 4 жыл бұрын
Would you like a dose of free hugs?
@shinyduke1791
@shinyduke1791 6 жыл бұрын
I enjoyed the self aware humour and find this to be a crucial piece of advice to end the year on. I understand that it's meant to be a recurring joke but the Mary sue love triangle as your go to thing to poke fun at may lead to an implication that as long as your story isn't that it's all good. I want to dislike this video and send angry tweets because it doesn't have a Donald Trump reference But your also a perfect human being and your videos have never had any flaws please love me and respond to my stalker like messages.
@kayelao2005
@kayelao2005 6 жыл бұрын
Kudakwashe Timba you got a good point.
@aaroncsoka7294
@aaroncsoka7294 6 жыл бұрын
"..this is too convoluted for me", he said. "But maybe it's bc my mothertongue's Germans & I love nowhere near any English speaking country (😜)", he added - after a short pause.
@ivaldi13
@ivaldi13 6 жыл бұрын
After just thirty minutes in the oven, your triple-layered example cake is done!
@shinyduke1791
@shinyduke1791 6 жыл бұрын
ivaldi13 that's what I provide half baked jokes
@Johnny12575
@Johnny12575 5 жыл бұрын
And then there's guys like me. "you're"
@HQ_Default
@HQ_Default 6 жыл бұрын
1:54 As a creator, these types of "critics" bother me more than people who just directly insult me. The worst thing you can EVER say to any content creator is just "it's good", because it's too basic to sound like praise, and it effectively says "change nothing." I don't wanna hear that everything's perfectly fine, I just wanna hear what the hell is wrong with my writing!
@tromboneman4517
@tromboneman4517 Жыл бұрын
Criticism should be given with the goal of helping someone improve. Be kind yet honest, sacrificing neither to criticize someone. Just make it clear to the person you’re criticizing that you care and that’s why you’re saying what you are. That way they’ll be more likely to respond to it well.
@frankwest5388
@frankwest5388 6 жыл бұрын
2:01 didn’t know you were such a great young adult novel writer
@casualcraftman1599
@casualcraftman1599 6 жыл бұрын
Every one in the KZfaq cartoon community needs to see this.
@PrimordialNightmare
@PrimordialNightmare 6 жыл бұрын
Everyone on the internet, needs to see this.
@BirdRaiserE
@BirdRaiserE 6 жыл бұрын
Casual CraftMan *Everyone You made a typo, thus you suck
@HERObyPROXY
@HERObyPROXY 6 жыл бұрын
This is the best video on the internet! Okay, hyperboles aside, thanks for summing up my feelings on so much of the petty so-called "criticism" that infests the internet today. I shall enjoy re-watching this video to raise my spirits after wading through the torrents of ridiculous threads and articles that bombardall forms of social media.
@michaeldavis9190
@michaeldavis9190 6 жыл бұрын
"Insert -ism here" HAHAHA, I loved that part. I love how poltically neutral this statement is. It could easily refer to liberals saying things are racism or sexism when they aren't, or to conservatives saying they are feminist or whatever else conservatives say things are when they aren't. It leaves it open for each side to fill in their own -isms.
@heather2503
@heather2503 2 жыл бұрын
Salopsism
@pandoraarts7748
@pandoraarts7748 6 жыл бұрын
I'm going to look up that book. I'll be back 😄 It's a terrible book, people actually debated if it should be burned or not and it's banned in some counties.....😶
@itsJamesCaligo
@itsJamesCaligo 6 жыл бұрын
I'm against book burning but for this, I'll make an exception
@elazarsinger4187
@elazarsinger4187 4 жыл бұрын
The word "sadism" came from the author's name
@RtxtDriver
@RtxtDriver 6 жыл бұрын
I had to pause the video at self awake "Unrelated Image" joke because I was laughing too hard XD
@Alienrun
@Alienrun 6 жыл бұрын
"self awake"
@GlitchyShadow13
@GlitchyShadow13 6 жыл бұрын
Whenever I write a story I always ask my readers to give me criticism, much better than just receiving hugs and kisses from all around.
@notoriouswhitemoth
@notoriouswhitemoth 6 жыл бұрын
Make sure that you argue with the person you're criticizing, and make it as personal as possible as soon as possible - and never give any indication that you believe they will - or even can - change.
@kismete6921
@kismete6921 6 жыл бұрын
Who else paused at 2:26 to read that story? It was great!
@badassproductions4734
@badassproductions4734 2 жыл бұрын
It looks like a wattpad book
@iexist1300
@iexist1300 3 жыл бұрын
5:15 we must work day and night to save people from the oppressive grips of metabolism
@Bananappleboy
@Bananappleboy 3 жыл бұрын
oh my god another niko clone
@danaa-
@danaa- 5 ай бұрын
Fiber?
@Ahalaya
@Ahalaya 6 жыл бұрын
I have multiple people reading something for me. Thanks for the helpful guide to give them. ;} Yeah, the internet can be a hive of vileness and empty insults, but it can also be a source of sincere compliments and genuine critique
@DanieleCapellini
@DanieleCapellini 6 жыл бұрын
But what happened after Jeff, Steve and Anthony oiled up? I’m hooked, don’t just leave me hanging!
@germanvisitor2
@germanvisitor2 6 жыл бұрын
"They fucked. *Hard!* " - The Cinema Snob
@Lycan_the_deerdog
@Lycan_the_deerdog 5 жыл бұрын
They either wrestled or "wrestled" if ya know what I mean...
@cyansuy3062
@cyansuy3062 6 жыл бұрын
He managed to shoehorn love triangle in a video totally unrelated to any form of storytelling
@onairwithjarvis
@onairwithjarvis 6 жыл бұрын
I had a writing friend on Twitter give me feedback for my query letter and first chapter. It was the best criticism that I've ever received. To the point and addresses why the problems are problems
@alfalafelstine1536
@alfalafelstine1536 6 жыл бұрын
0/10. Not enough love dohecahedrons.
@Rainbowthewindsage
@Rainbowthewindsage 4 жыл бұрын
I feel like one of the issues with giving criticism is that we aren't really taught how to give good feedback. I didn't really learn how to give decent feedback until I took creative writing and we had to give feedback for every single person's short stories.
@SUNSHINE-t-m
@SUNSHINE-t-m 6 жыл бұрын
Can you do an episode on horror /creepypasta?
@buttermeat6529
@buttermeat6529 6 жыл бұрын
so basically a video explaining the creative prosses of Jeff the killer.
@leandropeixotodemelo7610
@leandropeixotodemelo7610 6 жыл бұрын
Apolo Trevent IV.5 he already made some about slasher movies and survival horror
@leandropeixotodemelo7610
@leandropeixotodemelo7610 6 жыл бұрын
he could make one talking about horror in general, like "how to write a scary story: just make it all about gore and jumpscares". creepypasta would be awesome too 😃
@sleepyc.6110
@sleepyc.6110 6 жыл бұрын
Leandro Peixoto de Melo I mean, you can't write a jumpscare
@SUNSHINE-t-m
@SUNSHINE-t-m 6 жыл бұрын
Leandro Peixoto de Melo you are assuming bad creepypasta has anything to do with horror. Is just gore and teen ocs
@austin88u
@austin88u 6 жыл бұрын
The love triangle dystopia is becoming the next illuminazi- i meant illuminati.
@sandwichmonster7067
@sandwichmonster7067 3 жыл бұрын
Forget writing, this video works for criticizing or debating pretty much ANYTHING and should be a required watch for anyone who partakes in human interaction, whether in person or online.
@superattackgamer
@superattackgamer 6 жыл бұрын
This is actually a perfect commentary on the subject. And especially from 4:20 onwards, it really applies to video game fandoms, anime fandoms, and perhaps the worst fandoms of them all; kids cartoon fandoms.
@thedoruk6324
@thedoruk6324 6 жыл бұрын
*95 likes; No dislikes; This channel is loved so much*
@_chew_
@_chew_ 6 жыл бұрын
You might say that between this channel, the viewers, and the like button, what we have here is a ... *dun dun DUUUN * Love Triangle.
@beck0251
@beck0251 6 жыл бұрын
2 views, 2 likes. Guess KZfaq’s sober.
@PhyreI3ird
@PhyreI3ird 6 жыл бұрын
It's an Eve-mas miracle!
@dractolis1592
@dractolis1592 5 жыл бұрын
It's about time
@nohaxmeh576
@nohaxmeh576 6 жыл бұрын
I looked up 120 days of Sodom... I haven't used this bottle of bleach since Boku No Pico. *Unscrews cap*
@Aadhitiya_Murali
@Aadhitiya_Murali 3 жыл бұрын
watching boku no pico was a mistake in itself, also do you need more, cuz i can give you one. 228922
@ryangallagher2190
@ryangallagher2190 6 жыл бұрын
I feel like Digibro died from this video.
@WhaleManMan
@WhaleManMan 5 жыл бұрын
"This anime had the greatest story ever told in it, but it had stock faces -100/10 it's fucking dumb. Subscribe because KZfaq's algorothim hates me and wont give free subscribers.:"
@wajikuroki4177
@wajikuroki4177 6 жыл бұрын
You should do a collab with Overly Sarcastic Production
@Ankhtowe
@Ankhtowe 6 жыл бұрын
6:12 whose* WURST MOVIE EVER U R LITERALLY HITELR :P
@unknowndane4754
@unknowndane4754 6 жыл бұрын
The comedic timing of the spelling error is kinda fun
@douglasballoni6074
@douglasballoni6074 6 жыл бұрын
4:20 - 4:35 So many internet "critics" need to see this!
@Liggliluff
@Liggliluff 4 жыл бұрын
I've gotten perfect criticism like "you made an error". Thanks, that'll help me know what to fix. Or "you misunderstood the original statement". Okay, which of all statements did I misunderstood? In what way can you see that I have misunderstood it? - Perfect help.
@dawngrrrl
@dawngrrrl 6 жыл бұрын
This video is everything. Also shout out to 120 Days of Sodom aka the greatest nightmare fuel of all time.
@laurencleveley
@laurencleveley 6 жыл бұрын
I went onto its Wikipedia page expecting it not to be that bad. God I was so wrong.
@ABPHistory
@ABPHistory 6 жыл бұрын
Lauren Cleveley same here don't make the same mistake
@itsJamesCaligo
@itsJamesCaligo 6 жыл бұрын
Lauren Cleveley now read the book and you'll prefer the wiki
@vidblogger12
@vidblogger12 4 жыл бұрын
From the Wikipedia page: “The characters consider it normal, even routine, to sexually abuse very young children, both male and female. A lot of attention is given to feces, which the men consume as a delicacy. They designate the chapel for defecation.” Aaaand that’s all I need to see of this book.
@GentleMannOfHats
@GentleMannOfHats 6 жыл бұрын
You’re beautiful and at least it wasn’t written in comic sans xddd
@admiral_m_10k35
@admiral_m_10k35 6 жыл бұрын
Don't forget that when you when giving criticism over time to one particular writer, you become harsher and decrease your amount of compassion while doing so, especially when the writer doesn't make the amount of progress you deem necessary.
@TheFYI1
@TheFYI1 6 жыл бұрын
This sounds like every "critique" against StarWars I've ever heard.
@bremcurt9514
@bremcurt9514 6 жыл бұрын
OOOOOH, CHIRSTMAS CAME EA- oh...wait... Happy chirstmas anyways yall ^^
@Lycan_the_deerdog
@Lycan_the_deerdog 6 жыл бұрын
Brem Curt you too! :-)
@bremcurt9514
@bremcurt9514 6 жыл бұрын
Chiyeeld of Yeesus Thank you ^^
@midnight8341
@midnight8341 6 жыл бұрын
Here in Germany it's only half past eleven ob the 23rd of december :(
@matthewr6148
@matthewr6148 6 жыл бұрын
It is still technically early, though; at least around where I live, Christmas is still more than a whole day away.
@RascaldeesV2
@RascaldeesV2 6 жыл бұрын
@Terrible Writing Advice I love your channel. End of story. Also, I have a bunch of friends attempting to write their own stories too and they... have mixed opinions about the channel.
@RascaldeesV2
@RascaldeesV2 6 жыл бұрын
"And one day, it might be their turn..." Terrible Writing Advice, 12/23/2017
@kachiechan
@kachiechan 6 жыл бұрын
nobody ever likes to look in the mirror for this kinda stuff
@waynehayes912
@waynehayes912 6 жыл бұрын
RascaldeesV2 yeah you're friends probably don't like it cause it might hit a little close too home. They might also not like terrible writing advice cause he can come off as snarky 1:33 so they might ignore his advice. Also J.P. advice isn't absolute. It's pretty clear he is a science fiction/fantasy writer. For example the love triangle can be an effective tool when writing a Romance or a Drama. In a Romance can be used as a contrast and a test for your main couple to show how strong their bond is. In a Drama it could be used to show how messy interpersonal relationships between people can be. Though for genre like action, sci-fi, and fantasy love triangles are usually a crutch to fill in plot. So it makes sense why J.P. avoid them.
@legrandliseurtri7495
@legrandliseurtri7495 4 жыл бұрын
@@waynehayes912 I mean, hey, no one's advice is absolute. TWA has interesting things to say, but you don't have to agree.
@assman7969
@assman7969 6 жыл бұрын
You should do a video about mentor figures in fantasy/sci-fi and how they almost always seem to die. Seems like it would make a good addition to The Chosen One video.
@carbon1255
@carbon1255 6 жыл бұрын
It is a logical move. It is the only character you spend time with that becomes superfluous later on.
@purplehaze2358
@purplehaze2358 2 жыл бұрын
Seeing people botch criticism is somewhat frustrating when the piece of work being criticized is godawful because the artist responsible is way less likely to not only ignore the criticism present, but ignore reasonable criticism from others.
@shishsjxnsnzns
@shishsjxnsnzns Жыл бұрын
This comment is completely useless because you said less when you should’ve said more. Please never give another opinion for the rest of your life because your lack of grammar proves what a bad person you are /j
@Crystal_959
@Crystal_959 6 жыл бұрын
6:12 ecscuse me it's *******whose* turn it iz now wurst video evur!!!1!11oneone!
@roguedogx
@roguedogx 6 жыл бұрын
Crystal 959 the intentional misspelling hurts worse than the actual critique. well done.
@Angela.Perkins
@Angela.Perkins 6 жыл бұрын
Bratwurst?
@dirkbaldorad3634
@dirkbaldorad3634 6 жыл бұрын
Bratwurst!
@hannahsutter3147
@hannahsutter3147 6 жыл бұрын
I laughed so hard at this one! These videos are always great. Why not give "advice" about writing comedy, memoirs, kid's books, or fanfiction? This is a bit different than what you usually do, but you could also give "advice" on starting a blog or youtube channel.
@AvengerGreen
@AvengerGreen Жыл бұрын
Basically CinemaSins and all Fandom Menace channels in a nutshell.
@readuth1488
@readuth1488 3 жыл бұрын
And remember, if the book has ANY amount of negative aspects, the good aspects are worthy of bullyi- I mean criticizing as well!
@MrRushhour4
@MrRushhour4 6 жыл бұрын
I think this was perfectly timed for the TLJ response LOL
@CobraSTWK
@CobraSTWK 6 жыл бұрын
Max Von Britannia Painfully true. I thought it was alright. Not the *best thing ever* the critics made it believe, but also not the *worst thing since Hitler* the internet made it to be.
@f1s53r
@f1s53r 6 жыл бұрын
That poor woman. She looked so happy in the previous videos, but now she's just sad.
@Crigence
@Crigence Жыл бұрын
Damn, this video is shockingly great and well-made despite the intentionally poor art-style. The writing is sharp and witty, the editing is fast-paced, the subject matter is handled with a shocking amount of elegance - Just a really good video all around! Definitely a highlight of the channel
@stevie8271
@stevie8271 6 жыл бұрын
this was a WONDERFUL video, using reverse psychology to hopefully get people to change. however the question mark was the wrong shade of green tbh, -5/1 WORST VIDEO EVER tm
@koimonsterkhaos6329
@koimonsterkhaos6329 6 жыл бұрын
Most avatar fandom needs to see this.
@Betta66
@Betta66 6 жыл бұрын
Got a suggestion for a future video: Strong Female Characters
@TheKingAndLegend
@TheKingAndLegend 6 жыл бұрын
Betta66 not really. He has already done mary sues. Unless your refering to strong women which no, he does not need to do a video on strong characters who happen to be female. ;). Hes done mary sues. He can do the fact minorities and women were written horribly for a long time though that.
@Betta66
@Betta66 6 жыл бұрын
I don't mean Mary Sues. Those are different. I'm talking about that "strong female character" archetype that's so prevalent these days. I define the archetype, at least when it's done well, as a woman who is accomplished and independent. She has an arc that isn't just supporting a man. She can support a man, sure, but she does other shit, too. She has agency, motivations, and goals. She makes decisions and does things that actually affect the plot of the movie. But most importantly, she is genuinely likable, charismatic, and/or interesting. There are recent examples of the archetype done well, such as Mako Mori in Pacific Rim, Furiosa in Mad Max: Fury Road, Diana in Wonder Woman, and Rey in the new Star Wars movies (fight me). But think of all the movies that advertised themselves as having strong female characters not because the movie actually had any, but because they thought it would help sell the movie. In the last two years, we had stuff like the Ghostbusters reboot, The Emoji Movie, and Transformers: The Last Knight. They might get the "accomplished and independent" parts down, but they neglect to make them likable or interesting. Oh, and they somehow feel the need to constantly remind the audience that they're strong, independent women who don't need no man, rather than demonstrate that through their actions.
@tedonica
@tedonica 6 жыл бұрын
But writing a strong female character is easy! Just have her wear camo and combat boots, never wear makeup, and use her combat boots to kick every potential suitor in the ... face. Bonus points if she swears, lifts weights, or uses the line "don't need no man."
@lacabraasada2326
@lacabraasada2326 2 жыл бұрын
Also, if the author doesn't respond, make sure to copy paste your critique and spam it everywhere so the author notices, even on places that have nothing to do with the work. Send contant emails and DMs about how terrible the show is, what are they going to do? File a restriction order?
@thebeingdestroyerofworlds8690
@thebeingdestroyerofworlds8690 6 жыл бұрын
You realy are breaking all the clichés not uploading a christmas episode
@unxtraordinary
@unxtraordinary 3 жыл бұрын
*0:06* This, this very thing scared me. A legion of Love Triangles, *the horror!*
@sinclairethomas8197
@sinclairethomas8197 6 жыл бұрын
Can you talk about how to properly write a love story or subplot? I've always wondered if there was a correct way to make love triangles work or if it's always a bad idea.
@Sashrunner
@Sashrunner 6 жыл бұрын
I have been curious too. I always figured that it's tough to write relationships that are interesting but not too obvious or fall to love triangles. =Y
@ChaosRayZero
@ChaosRayZero 6 жыл бұрын
Love triangles can be interesting as long as they don't overtake the entire plot. Unless it's a romance where the love story is _supposed to_ be the main plot, don't let the romantic "subplot" be the dominant part of the work and you'll be fine.
@erijyn5878
@erijyn5878 6 жыл бұрын
personally, if you're writing romance as a subplot, try the Valdemar/Velgarth series. even if you're not, i still recommend it as it's an amazing series!
@tedonica
@tedonica 6 жыл бұрын
Refer to his Honest Thoughts video... or to Twelfth Night by Shakespeare.
@jonsnor4313
@jonsnor4313 5 жыл бұрын
Make the characters interesting and whole outside the love triangle, or a love triangle where one is a believed dead lover husband, or simply dead.
@TheKeyser94
@TheKeyser94 6 жыл бұрын
Something that I realise just recently now at days, most people always portray you as a troll when you give a critic that they don't like, and they dare call themselves artist, they are in this business for the praise, not because they actually care.
@threeholepunchjim721
@threeholepunchjim721 3 жыл бұрын
Also, a critic should never acknowledge any strengths in any work. Because that might mean people will take a slight interest in it! All those OTHER reviewers listing strengths as well as weaknesses are just BLIND and STUPID. Because remember: Any Negative Feedback = Truth and Honesty Any Positive Feedback = Lies and Blindness But seriously, most of the time, I find some of these reviewers who think that just because they are smaller in subscribers and views, that anything negative they say about anything is “real and genuine”. The only reason they do this isn’t to actually offer genuine criticism, but instead to “play a character”. At least, they’re able to use that excuse when someone calls out their flawed criticism. “Uhh, I was TOTALLY just playing a character when I said that. Stop taking it so seriously!” And to those people: Your ability to list flaws about something doesn’t make you better than anyone else. Your word isn’t gospel. You aren’t brave just for listing some mistakes. Actually list genuine flaws AND strengths (yes, BOTH) about something instead of masking mindless nitpicking and berating as “honest criticism”.
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