please be aware that this video contains mentions of s**c*de, s*x*al violence and schizophrenic hallucinations

An author being allergic to the word “said” is an immediate red flag for me. Characters shouldn’t be whispering and murmuring and purring all over the place

“She realized it was a first time she was feeling lust induced by an actual man and not a fictional character” oh no its a self insert.

If a book has a "song list," its entered fanfiction territory.

You guys may be asking, "why would she squirm in her seat though?" Easy! Her fish instincts told her to.

“Magic eyes, magic p*ssy” I can’t believe the author stole my main pick up line…

"the singular masculine attention from a very masculine male" - me trying to hit the 2000 words bottom mark on an essay

*teacher yells at her for calling him “sir”* classmates: omg you two were such lovebirds! so much chemistry!!!

17:57 not wearing underwear while youre wearing a skirt is actually so nasty omg 💀💀💀

Remember, fellas: If your girl's eyes don't change color when she climaxes, it means she's faking it.

“His naked hand”…How dare he not wear a suit on his hand?

coming back “negative” for schizophrenia like its a litmus test 💀

Yeah, the author wanted main male character to be "dark mysterious dangerous" type, but ended up with a common asshole

Any romance book with the words “Possessed”, “claimed” or “owned”: 🚩🚩🚩

This book would have been a hundred times better if it had a little author's note at the end of each chapter saying something like "omg sorry i didn't post for so long, you guys! I was in prison xD but I'm out now and exams are already starting!!! >.< eeep! my mom is yelling at me to go study! wait and see what happens in the next chapter owo"

ah yes "she breathed through her mouth" probably the most normal line in the whole book

“You may be a siren, but I am a mad pirate who will resist your lustful call that threatens to drag me to the depths of an unforgiving sea…” “Sir, this is a Wendy’s-“

"Oh, Corvina? Like the crow?" "No, actually, it's a type of bony fish." Teacher slowly walks away.

I like how the teacher has that "oh yeah he like fucking students" reputation and school hasn't even bothered like stepping and firing him

The fact that it's SELF PUBLISHED and from TIKTOK is all you need to know. No reputable publishing company would waste money on that book💀

"possessed, claimed, owned" CORVINA MAAM ARE YOU OKAY💀💀💀

"the singular masculine attention from a very masculine male" has the same vibe as "she breasted boobily down the stairs"

You shall never know why this comment has so many likes, jeez, I’m just as mysterious as this book

Guys, corvina isn’t like other girls.

I can’t believe I’ve never gone over my family’s history of mental illness during foreplay, truly a missed opportunity

"all he did was explain the english syllabus to you, why are you squirming in your seat?" is possibly one of my favorite sentences ive ever heard spoken

This book has a strong "Wrote this instead of sleeping" energy

It's always the fucking English teacher when it's not the Ethics professor 💀🤣

Why did this author romanticize so many red flags??? I'm so boggled, "You chose the wrong man for your first time," NO NO STOP RIGHT THERE

"You wanna know who I am?" He asked her harshly. "I," slam. "Am," slam. "Madness!" He put a hand on the back of her neck and suddenly slammed her into a tree, and she yelped. When your scene reads like an episode of Incredible Hulk.

IM SORRY BUT HER TALKING ABOUT SCHIZOPHRENIA WHILE THEY WERE GETTING NASTY IS KILLING ME 😭

I just realized how uncommon female-dom male-sub romance books are, I'd love to see that

the fact that my real actual legal middle name is Raven makes this insanely difficult to sit thru 😭😭😭 my goth parents thought they were so quirky

I can’t explain why, but ‘the wet slaps of their skins the only sounds in the room’ while they’re in a FOREST and she’s against a TREE just completely sent me

Ok wait this man has a whole ass reputation for sleeping around with students and he is still hired??????????

I think whoever wrote this book has never had sex but read a lot of fanfic

If they gave Vad a penny for everytime he says "fight your demons" he would be rich enough to leave the academia and start a new life

27:07 "I don't give a flying fuck if you have schizophrenia, now get on all fours" such an amazing man, wow

"commanding the molecules around him to shift" what a weird way to say that he was moving

It really is giving Ebony Darkness Dementia Raven Way😭✋🏾

this singlehandedly convinced me that I need to write a book because such bullshit exists and I'm out here thinking "oh there's no point bc great books already exist and there are already good authors"

Since he has a reputation for sleeping with his students, it would have been funnier if she kept trying to get with him to make the plot happen but he was completely disinterested and going after someone else.

I love how the "you may be a siren" scene is one hair away from being an "Arrr, I'll be plunderin' yer booty soon enough, ya salty wench!" kinda flirting.

You forgot the author note at the beginning of the book “I was high at 3am when I wrote this- sorry im bad a summaries 😅 Edit: omg 😮 5k reads THATS CRAZY YOU GUYS I LOVE YOU SM xoxo”

In the Italian version of "TeenTitansGo" the character "Raven" is called "Corvina". She has violet eyes, a dark personality and magic power/parents. I believe the protagonist is based on a character from TeenTitansGo.

"She is special" proceeds to describe generic copy and paste emo girl.

For the love of god. JUST NAME HER RAVEN.

I don’t even cringe this much at Colleen Hoover books.

I’m sorry, but the minute you described the dark gothic professor, Severus Snape popped into my head. 💀

No one could convince me that this isn't originally a snape x hermoine fanfic 💀💀💀😊

"Who has a reputation of sleeping with his students" How does this guy still work at a school-

The fact that the author's official pen name is RuNyx tells you everything you need to know about this book.

I don’t like when people use “fanfic-like” writing as a criticism, because a lot of fanfic writing is pretty good. I feel like we should just say cringy writing..

I'm from Estonia and "kana" stands for "chicken" in Estonian. I'm therefore having a hard time paying attention when you're holding a book titled "Goth Chicken"

Can we change the 'fanficy' insult to 'tiktoky'. Cause at this point the comparison is a insult to the fanfic community

it’s actually so funny that the book makes this big deal of corvina hearing voices but not having schizophrenia but the final twist is yeah, we were wrong she just has schizophrenia, sorry my bad

"slightly breathless, fully pissed" that is very me

tiktok has ruined peoples perceptions of what good writing is

Imagine Nietzsche or Poe coming back from the dead to see their quotes being used in books like these 💀

I have an idea. At the end of the book we find out that it was written by Vad. So, even though it was written from the perspective of Corvina, in fact it is all just his experience, his point of view. And that makes me theorise that Corvina... Probably was not a character we saw her to be. She even could never exist. As far as I understood, he has a sister, who is pretty controlling. Or I even would say a bit crazy and possessive. She even thinks she has a right to kill some of people he loves. And maybe such a behaviour was really traumatic for him, so he got a bit insane. I think, there was a second he turned from just traumatised person to completely ruined - the death of his previous love. After that, everything that was happening, was not completely real. The first meeting of main characters happens at night, when Vad plays on piano. And maybe, that was never happened. Let me explain. Maybe, he saw Corvina at first some hours before this meeting, when she arrived at the school. However, she didn't notice him, being busy. But for him it didn't matter, because he fell in love with her from the first sigh. She was extremely beautiful for him, that was a real passion appeared in his heart. And even though they didn't even met each other Vad believed, that they should have a romance. Since that second he couldn't forget about this girl. This night, he was not even able to sleep, burning from a big desire to talk to her. And, spending a sleepless night alone with a piano, he maybe fell asleep and had a dream, or maybe had a hallucination that Corvina came to him. That was make no sence because it was deep night, but it happened in his head. And the reason Corvina immediately fell in love with him was that he wanted to imagine it that way. In common, what I am trying to say is that our main female character was indeed an ordinary student he fell in love. Because of traumatic experience in last relationship he was afraid to actually come up with her and become partners. So, he started to imagine it all, and the figure of Corvina in his mind was not the real girl. It just looked as his new student did, but, since he had no idea what personality she possessed, her character was made up by him as he wished it to be. Since that moment, let's keep it all in mind and look on situations in the book with new eyes. There are some things that I think, make sence in that case: 1. Remember how everybody was saying main characters have big chemistry? Maybe, the reason to it was that Vad actually behaved very attached to Corvina, obviously liking her. That was a one-side love of his, and everybody probably noticed that. 2. Do you remember the boy that was a reason for Vad's jealousy? Maybe, that was real Corvina's boyfriend. And the fact they are together made him even more possessive about the imagined Corvina. 3. Oh, yes, the possessiveness. I guess, the reason he was like that was the fact, that she was his fantasy. It was a part of him, of his mind, and of course, he didn't want to lose part of his own soul. He was really afraid to lose their love cause of previous experience, and wished to claim, to control this girl completely. So that was not just possessiveness towards another person, but to the last love figure he had in his mind. 4. Also, do you remember how they were in library, and she had no underneath? I guess, that is also because the scenary of them having hot time together was one of his fantasies, which were all perfect. Every piece of them was imagined as he wished that to be. And the reason sometimes Corvina behaves strange was just because he wanted it to be this way. 5. In addition to that, what happened in the car was also his dream. The real Corvina asked him to deliver a letter, and he immediately started to imagine how they will have a ride together. Being in the middle of the rain, alone in the car, he sincerely wished to have her beside him. 6. I think, there is a possibility, that real Corvina did actually have normal parents. The relationship of the female mc and her insane overprotective mother was just a mapping of Vad's and his sister's relationship. Mr Deverill probable needed a girl who is not just the object of his love, but also a person who can completely understand his pain. And the reason Corvina had such a strange mother is this - it was just a projection. 7. Also, I believe that real Corvina had no mental problems. Imagining his love has the same problems hr has (like voices in his head) was nothing but an attempt to cope with his own madness. 8. Also, a tiny, tiny detail that makes sence is that the name Corvina is not only connected with crows, but with a fish. Maybe, Vad didn't know about the second meaning, butin his mind the fact that he understands the sence of this word made him feel like he is really meant to our girl. And that is why he was calling her crow - he really liked that concept. Well... I hoped you enjoyed my theory😂. Maybe, you have something to add, would be interesting to hear it. Have a good day!

22:28 As someone who actually has the flaw if being possessive and jealous, I need it tk stop being romanticized.

Synopsis of this story: Bird Girl gets sauced up by her English teacher with "Immaculate Rizz"

I understand why the last student dated the teacher jumped off the roof, after all if the person I am dating spoke this cringy bullshit I would jump off the roof too. Edit: omg this is crazy and the dog one T-T??

I get wanting dark edgy books. But these things all annoy me, even if they just something slight 1. Being allergic to the word "said" 2. Having eyes that are odd colors. I get like, having slightly violet-y blue eyes, or Red-Brown eyes. But if the eyes are just straight up purple. Man. What. 3. If its written like a wattpad fanfiction. 4. If they try way too hard to be relatable 5. TOO MANY SPELLING MISTAKES. Somehow this book fits all 5 of these categories.

As an aspiring author, this book makes me feel incredible about myself

alternate title: 38 minutes of leonie trying to call this book horrible without kink shaming

I'm sorry, you CANNOT convince me that someone older than 14 wrote this.

"the end, for now... sounds like a threat" had me CACKLING

A book with a music playlist is and will always be concerning even on Wattpad. It either results in two reactions, 1) Okay yes this was good or 2) RUN RUN RUN RUN SHOOT OUT YOUR EYBALLS

i love how they're talking in such melodramatic way and all of sudden they go like "no panties?" "i don't like underwear"

*Corvina sounds like a nickname for Corona virus* 💀

as you were introducing the book and it's premise i thought "huh, this Vad Deverell physical description reminds me of Divus Crewel from hit mobile game Disney Twisted Wonderland...and a book with a bunch of crow motifs, just like the setting of twisted wonderland...a college that's held in a gothic castle, on a mountain, just like...........twisted...wonderland...." if there's ever a moment i hoped im just projecting, this would be it. bc if i swear i connected some forbidden dots i might just ask "jade" to end me.

"I don't like wearing underwear" made me laugh out loud 😂

Any time a guy doesn't ask and enters you painfully, refusing to slow down. That is r*pe. And I'm tired of this scenario being played as a first time sex thing. No its sexual assault and it's disgusting

At least it's a uni teacher and not a highschool teacher, I'll at least give them that

I personally really dislike smut books, because it feels more like a dramatic p*rn script than a book. I don’t mind sexual scenes in well written books but I noticed that smut books are just terribly written. I guess it’s because these kind of books are meant for people who aren’t used to reading books that often, or just aren’t capable of reading difficult writings or poetic writings. (Sorry for my bad English)

i searched up the book and found a description about the author, "RuNyx likes to create universes and set them on fire" would be such a cool line if the fire wasn't caused by whatever the hell kind of crack they took to cough up gothikana

"this isn't lust, it's worse. It's a barbaric need to own and to destroy. This is madness!" "This is Sparta!"

Imagine actually writing "Magic eyes Magic P*ssy" into your book and then proof reading it and still keeping it in like bro wtf, I dead 💀

I watched this video thinking I’d never have to deal with this in real life….I know that while watching you we see you physically holding the book but it still felt like a fever dream, right? Well, a few days ago in the bookstore, I SAW IT ON A SHELF. I DIDN’T THINK IT WAS REAL BUT SEEING IT ON A SHELF WAS LIKE A NIGHTMARE. THE FACT THAT I RECOGNIZED IT AND KNEW WHAT HORRORS AWAITED INSIDE WAS TERRIFYING. OPENING IT AND ACTUA SEEKNG THE NAME CORVINA WRITTEN IN BIG BLACK PRINT MEANT THAT IT WASN’T A HALLUCINATION 😭😭😭😭😭

Her name is also, a type of wine. Which one would you pick? Me personally I would pick the fish.

The teacher calls their relationship madness so often that I was half expecting him to be a piece of her imagination, and the whole ordeal is her loosing her mind

Poorly written romance books challenge: stop making every wholesome or simply normal interaction sexual

the “I’m not yours!! 😠😠” trope is giving “you’re not my alpha!” gacha videos from 2019-2021

5:33 Probably a play on the word corvid. Which does not, in fact, mean raven, it is a category of bird that both ravens and crows, among other birds, fall under. Bird nerd here

imagine if she was hallucinating him the entire time and in reality he had no interest in her whatsoever

_An unusual girl. An enigmatic man. An ancient castle. What could go wrong?_

One of the first things I learned long ago was that doing a full head-to-toe description of your characters upon first meeting is bad form. It halts the narrative dead for no real reason and doesn't read well unless you have a high-level grasp of your language and a talent for writing. Which I don't. 😂 I find, from me, that it's much better to parse that type of information out over the course of several pages organically as they interact with other characters or objects in the environment. Those are the type of lessons you learn as you do revision work and have test readers giving you feedback.

wait hang on sorry, as a forensics nerd, THAT'S NOT HOW DEAD BODIES WORK LMFAOOOO "she died two years ago and then was burned post mortem some time in the last two months, probably to make her harder to identify." bones. those are bones. that's not a corpse anymore, unless it's been carefully preserved or mummified, and considering the fact that it's in the woods, it seems highly unlikely that the body is just somehow mummified. also, it takes a LOT of effort to identify a body when there's just bones, especially if it's a partial skeleton. here we can assume that this is a full skeleton, and i have no idea how long of a gap there is between the discovery of the body and the identification, but like even if the pool of potential victims is incredibly small because these are school grounds and there's only a handful of people that go missing, if even that, it would take them for-fucking-ever to even THINK that the corpse belongs to someone that's still alive? jade wouldn't even be on the LIST for potential victims. ain't no way yes this is nitpicky but aaaaaAAAAAAAAAAGH it's just another example of how the author Doesn't Know How This Shit Works

The fact that in my mother tounge, "Kana" means blind. Makes perfect sense as to how she ignores all red flags ☠️☠️

i once read a snape x reader fanfic as a joke and tbh their chemistry was still better than this

I peed a little I laughed so hard at the map (& your commentary on it) I’m loving how the “drawings” of the school are just various different styles of clip art castles. Also enjoying how the staff quarters & faculty residences are the same image 😂

im writing a book, and often i get insecure. yet watching this video has made me feel a bit better so, thank you leo!

“The silver eyed demon” sounds like a Yugioh card

I'm 5 minutes in and Corvina is giving that "Ebony Dark'ness Dementia Raven Way" energy

When people say that these kinds of books have a "fanfic" dynamic me, as a fanfic reader, i get offended. Like how dare you compare fanfics to those b*llshits. Most of the fanfics i have read have better explanation of the plot than this☠☠☠

I did start to teach at 27, but my thesis was so narrow and was a source of so much frustration that I was tearing my hair out trying to get it approved. I am glad it was so demanding. It made writing so much easier when I had the focus. I'm starting to think Mr. Deverell printed his degree from an office supply store and bought a frame at Walmart. “Mr. Deverell graduated this year from the University of College.”

This entire book is literally the one scene in Twilight where Bella and Edward are in the woods and Bella says: "I know what you are"- and Edward goes "Say it-" "Vampire." and bam that is the ENTIRE book. That is this book. It's that scene. Dragged out.

""the end, for now" that sounds like a threat" lmao you're killing me

The aesthetics were so cool it's like a book that gets you hyped just by intro or cover and then it just-