DEFINITELY Evidence of prejudice. I've always said the rules of prose are totally misplaced and full of condescending excuses. I used to get in arguments over it with my sophomore year english teacher all of the time...and he was totally racist. I used to have to tell him that he was "totally proof that Thomas Jefferson was totally gay!" I Am an -ing man and I also assert that the entire lexicon of prose is meant to imply philosophy; not where you place the action or emphasis of your sentence. But this would require an education and not just inundation to previous egoist ideology. (Not personal to You, just the way it is.) Oh wait; By the Gods of Prose, now just been inspired, have I! How about "Whick Whack"...or is it Wick-Wack!!!
@trboenvrnb4tingio4rn3 жыл бұрын
A
@user-ck8kp8vb4l3 жыл бұрын
@@Musiqwest i've had dreams that made more sense and had more context than your comment
@raniazahra44099 ай бұрын
1. cut your "-ing" verbs 2. avoid adverbs 3. avoid dialogue tags 4. no abstract words (some, thing, it was) 5. no overspecifics (holding in hand, shrugging the shoulders, blinking the eyes) 6. no unneccessary adjectives 7. no overused/weasel words 8. would/had constructions. if you need it, introduce it at the start of the paragraph and then go into simple past 9. don't use as/while illogically 10. no convuluted phrasing 11. no suddenly/started/began 12. no up/down (Stood up, stat down) 13. avoid to be words 14. avoid to me/ to myself 15. avoid realisations (realised, felt, saw) 16. avoid unplanned repetition 17. no passive voice in general 18. telling when its already implied 19
@winterrenes12493 ай бұрын
thank you! :)
@matthew4497Ай бұрын
List starts at 06:07
@theorosef7 жыл бұрын
It's proven that when you put a text in another sort of... format, or font, you can better see the mistakes. That's why many fanfiction authors notice mistakes only after they've published the story to whichever site they use.
@ShaelinWrites7 жыл бұрын
It's true! I actually change the font when I start editing because of this!
@mchobbit29516 жыл бұрын
Font size works too. I usually enlarge mine as much as possible and suddenly the mistakes start jumping out at me. Honestly I can't edit on paper. I can't afford buying all the paper and a print, all the ink etc. I'm not planning on being published so I couldn't justify it.
@sanityone6496 жыл бұрын
Absolutely true. I resize my Word docs to the book trim size...and boom...it's like editing a different manuscript. Things that I never noticed stick out like a sore thumb.
@Caboose009able5 жыл бұрын
Thanks ya'll for this advice! Never thought about it before but I shall employ each.
@legal0403 жыл бұрын
@Lee Hayman maybe yours does
@estherwaters22182 жыл бұрын
I watched this video five years ago and it SIGNIFICANTLY changed the way I write. I implemented this advice and saw dramatic improvement in my poetry and prose overnight. Thanks for this!!!
@dragonchr156 жыл бұрын
Bottom line here is to JUST WRITE. Even if it reads like shit. I go out of my way to write poorly. The beautiful prose happens in the editing process.
@urorazbojnik56785 жыл бұрын
Sometimes I wish i could., but editing is far more painful to me when the sentences and paragraphs are poor, than when there's actual quality in them. Also I like getting lost in the visualization and analysis of the current word, so it takes longer time for me to write, but I manage to paint the picture right and draw far more pleasure from the process itself while doing it ^^
@xtonibx57705 жыл бұрын
write drunk. edit sober.
@samwallaceart2884 жыл бұрын
Allegedly, The Gumtree Bookshelf Story was a first draft. Just saying.
@fanbuscus22444 жыл бұрын
The beautifully written prose began to happen when the editing process started
@kayhaych054 жыл бұрын
My story started as a creative writing piece for a year 12 assignment. I fell in love with the characters and story and decided I wanted to create a world in which they exist. It’s been 2 years and I still go back to that piece as some of the best prose I’ve ever written. I’m still writing my first draft and it’s only now that I’ve FINALLY come to realise that my first draft isn’t supposed to be that great. It’s supposed to be shitty and the editing is where the magic happens. It took me far too long to realise this
@austincrook53044 жыл бұрын
3:39 The “everyone’s style will just be the same” argument always peeved me off. The nuts and bolts of concise, good writing have so, so, SO little to do with authorial style. Stephen King and Noel Gaiman both know how to avoid unfitting adverbs and use active voice, but you couldn’t possibly mistake one with the other. You’re not going to lose the forest by trimming the rotten branches.
@jack-he7fv7 жыл бұрын
watched the whole video without knowing what prose means
@marcelljambor25296 жыл бұрын
I didnt know too
@PeachyLiv6 жыл бұрын
LOL ME TOO
@hooptyloop7276 жыл бұрын
me too
@portgasdann33896 жыл бұрын
What's prose tho
@threeletteragent6 жыл бұрын
Portgas D Ann Prose is the actual writing, and the use of words in your book, rather than the plot, characters, etc. Ex: "The boy ran up the stairs angrily." Vs. "The boy stormed up the stairs, kicking dust with his feet in rage." Same story and character, but the prose is different.
@Juxtaposedjoker6 жыл бұрын
Rule 19. Remove all squirrels.
@cheesecakelasagna5 жыл бұрын
*PETA wants to know your location*
@j.f.fisher53184 жыл бұрын
I first learned the "ing" thing from resume writing. An -ing word is something you are doing and maybe you'll succeed or maybe you'll fail. An -ed is something you did, it is an accomplishment.
@tinypoolmodelshipyard4 жыл бұрын
Yes, i learned the same thing
@mikelounge43257 жыл бұрын
"I know 'it was' is basically the weakest way you could possibly start a sentence." "It was a bright cold day in April, and the clocks were striking thirteen." ~1984. How about starting a book? :D Good advice, and though it's clear a lot of writing advice is debatable, it's very useful to know both sides so you can form your own opinions and writing style from them. What's that saying, learn the rules like a pro, so you can break them like an artist.
@PeppermintCereal7 жыл бұрын
Mike Lounge "The clocks struck thirteen on a cold April day." Does that not sound punchier?
@mmaakk326 жыл бұрын
Hyong Leppy Punchier isn't always better, muscle man. By putting your most interesting detail in the middle of the sentence, you've made the 'April day' detail lacklustre filler, all while losing the intrigue of the twist. Pacing is key, friend. I know it's a month late but I had to.
@PeppermintCereal6 жыл бұрын
Mahoole Magic School I'd like to know why it changes the importance of a bright cold April day. It has two adjectives, so how likely will someone forget that detail?
@mmaakk326 жыл бұрын
Hyong Leppy You want to end your line on the point of intrigue, not a trivial detail. Order matters.
@mmaakk326 жыл бұрын
You dob't have to be a writer to know as much.
@samhayes-astrion7 жыл бұрын
Here's one that peeves me. "Her lips let loose a growl." If your lips are growling, you need to see a medical professional.
@jch-eg4vd6 жыл бұрын
Gynecologist?
@RashmikaLikesBooks5 жыл бұрын
@@jch-eg4vd 😂
@crappyaccount5 жыл бұрын
i think i pulled a muscle in my neck laughing
@aishaarshadalam34124 жыл бұрын
Yeah I'm pretty sure they (author) meant "A growl escaped her lips."
@nagisadies79674 жыл бұрын
That's actually pretty funny.
@planetarianprince8257 жыл бұрын
I JUST SAW THIS. AND LEGIT THREW MY HOMEWORK TO THE SIDE, AND DRRAAAGGGED MY SCREEN CLOSER.
@Jenny-zi3by7 жыл бұрын
Planetarian Prince Loveeee your profile pic 😏 are you part of the phandom?
@alyssahebert56026 жыл бұрын
You yous all capitals
@BillyxRansom6 жыл бұрын
you yous "yous"
@candy-ninja5 жыл бұрын
Rip your grades
@laifuthelife84835 жыл бұрын
R. I. P. grades
@navin49847 жыл бұрын
Who needs to go to English class when we've got Shaelin!
@NovelNovelist7 жыл бұрын
Regarding adverbs, I keep them out of my prose for the most part, but I find one recurring place that I'm not comfortable cutting them is something like "said softly/quietly." I know that looks ripe for 'whispered' or 'murmured' or something instead, and sometimes I do use those, yet often I specifically don't want to imply whispering. To me whispering is a specific, muted thing, like...speaking in black and white. There's not really a tone/timbre to the voice. It's just gusts of air. You can 'speak out loud' QUIETLY and with the full spectrum of voice, yet not be whispering. And it's THAT that I often want to convey that my characters are doing. Mostly because it's a richer way of communicating. Likewise, something like 'murmuring' or 'mumbling' implies that the speech is unclear/indistinct. When I hear 'said quietly/softly' I imagine the person using their NORMAL complete voice, just at a low volume; whereas when I hear 'whispered' I imagine that wispy, gusting speech. It's just not the same thing. I'd love a verb that conveyed that method of speech without an adverb, but I don't know of one.
@sauteedbread5 жыл бұрын
If you want to get rid of the adverb you could say "said in hushed tones" or something like that
@samwallaceart2884 жыл бұрын
Agree in this case. _The party was chaotic but not without its charm. Abby tapped my shoulder. “Hey, could we talk in private?” she whispered._ _The party was chaotic but not without its charm. Abby tapped my shoulder. “Hey, could we talk in private?” she said quietly._ I don’t know about you, but the use of whisper could mean anything from “Let’s snog” to “someone is stalking me and I need help rn”; whereas _said quietly_ at least to me implies emotional vulnerability, like Abby’s about to tell you she’s taking the kids.
@samwallaceart2884 жыл бұрын
I think what it is is “whispered” means “I don’t want others to hear,” while “said quietly” gives the vibe of “it’s not easy for me to say this.”
@rodschmidt89524 жыл бұрын
@@samwallaceart288 The party was chaotic but not without its charm. Abby tapped my shoulder and put her mouth next to my ear. “Hey, could we talk in private?”
@lowercase_ash3 жыл бұрын
@@rodschmidt8952 that's my favorite, avoiding dialogue tags entirely
@AdrionProbe7 жыл бұрын
I'm an engineering student with a long-time passion for writing. Wish I could have studied this instead. Your videos are amazing. It really makes a difference learning from someone who's clearly so passionate.
@i.k514311 ай бұрын
Too many -ings.
@sqjpure3 жыл бұрын
I used to write "nodded his head" ALL THE TIME. Who knows what else you can nod...
@PrestonWillis5 ай бұрын
I nodded my head knowing I do the same
@3harrypotterfans5106 жыл бұрын
The longest book i wrote was ONLY 17 pages.🤣🤣🤣
@lyricbot85136 жыл бұрын
3 Harry Potter Fans A4 pages or smaller?
@3harrypotterfans5106 жыл бұрын
Geo Globe A4
@arsonvamp4 жыл бұрын
one of the things that completely changed the way i wrote was reading my immortal. it’s both one of the funniest things i’ve ever read and a surprisingly helpful what not to do guide. whenever i use or read the word suddenly and overly descriptive dialogue tags in place of said, i catch it instantly. bless your soul, ebony dark’ness dementia raven way
@almaerica5634 жыл бұрын
Same! I haven't read that, but I've read lots and lots of similar shit on wattpad (I did it bc I was desperate for fanfic, don't judge), but yeah whenever I see a mistake I catch it instantly! I've also started hating ing-verbs, I literally rewrite the sentence in my brain bc it bugs me so much. But even though I see these mistakes, it has also made me immune to bad writing so there's that
@vennisan72682 жыл бұрын
Great, now I actually want to read it..
@vennisan72682 жыл бұрын
Just checked it out, first paragraph in and I'm already cringing.
@sickdream40677 жыл бұрын
I love the info that you give in your videos. You clearly know your craft. BUT please!! Could you slow down the pace a bit, and make the transitions more obvious? For example, here you say “18 writing hacks”, but I lost track after the first 2 or 3. If you could just pause between key points and stress each of them when you first mention them, your videos would be more viewer-friendly. I know that you don’t like to make things too obvious because you believe in trusting the audience’s ability to understand. But when it comes to tutorials and tips, the easier to understand, the better. Remember that information is much more digestible when clearly segmented than when presented as a continuous stream. So the best you can do is treat each of your tips like it’s a PowerPoint bullet point in a presentation to a slow audience. Mention each number, announce the transition, “now tip number 5”. If possible, show the number on screen. I guarantee, your viewers won’t feel like you’re insulting their intelligence, if that’s what you fear. They will thank you
@shelliewolske89773 жыл бұрын
Why don't you just pause, rewind and take notes
@anneahlert29972 жыл бұрын
Amen! I can't take notes that fast! 🤪😄
@anneahlert29972 жыл бұрын
@@shelliewolske8977 It's not easy to keep pausing, when watching AND note-taking on the same device.
@silb13502 жыл бұрын
@@anneahlert2997 get a notebook or something then
@anneahlert29972 жыл бұрын
@@silb1350 No duh! I tried that. I don't know Gregg Shorthand, so I couldn't keep up then, either. There's a lot more good info in this video than what most people can write fast enough to note it all.
@st.friendship2 жыл бұрын
I love the suggestion of introducing the past perfect and then dropping it. I'm not going to pull out my copy to confirm this, but I'm pretty positive Alice Hoffman did does this quite a lot in Practical Magic, and it did so much for the whole tone of the storytelling. It created a dreamier, more vivid, and more engaging experience.
@cyrillechidiac63684 жыл бұрын
*Shaelin lists weasel words* *anxiety rises*
@jpch88143 жыл бұрын
Right? lol. Are you Lebanese?
@cyrillechidiac63683 жыл бұрын
@@jpch8814 yeah i am
@jpch88143 жыл бұрын
@@cyrillechidiac6368 Awesome ! Would love to read another Lebanese person's work. Wish you the best.
@aquasphere19595 жыл бұрын
A simple sincere thank you Shaelin, for all the work you do to bring us your videos. Bravo!
@valhalla12407 жыл бұрын
a good example is the word "then". The first time I heard it's a bad word and you should cut it, I thought 'why? this is a pretty common word, everyone uses it constantly, no one will notice whether I used it or not'... but the thing is: "then" instantly structures the actions in your story and gives them a chronological order. So it basically functions as a cheap trick. If you have to cut it though, you have to make sure, with your sentence-structure and arrangement of words, that the chronology of actions comes across. So your writing improves immediately in ways it wouldn't have with the word "then".
@TanyaGriffiths4 жыл бұрын
Ahhh this is amazing!! I just found your channel and I'm so glad I did. I also really like the way your profs phrased following prose rules as a way of enhancing one's style. Tha's beautiful. Thanks for sharing what you've learned :)
@sunsetxsong6 жыл бұрын
This video is fantastic - it includes a lot of specific advice that other writing vids gloss over. Shaelin, you're great - keep making awesome videos :)
@ashleybrooks97406 жыл бұрын
To paraphrase Will Hunting: you're giving me a $100,000 education for free. THANK YOU!!!
@okok722773 жыл бұрын
She said no -ing words smh 😤
@aal3xa7 жыл бұрын
I love you and the way you write! I look forward to your next video, I get super giddy when I see you post a new video!
@TomorrowWeLive6 жыл бұрын
Easily the best and most useful writing advice video I've seen so far. These are great rules, and I shall endeavour to apply them from hereonout.
@poop-bf4fs5 жыл бұрын
when you’re trying to use this for roleplay but it all comes down to first drafts..
@dreamalittlebook7807 жыл бұрын
Thanks, Shaelin. I'm definitely coming back to this video when I get to the editing stage.
@elenawickman45497 жыл бұрын
Wonderful advice, as always! A lot of these are ones that definitely took me a long time to incorporate, and I still catch those pesky sneaks in my drafts. The -ly and -ing elaboration was great. You explained everything so well. :)
@ShaelinWrites7 жыл бұрын
Sometimes I feel I'm kind of irrational with my -ing verb hatred haha
@nathanphillips40272 жыл бұрын
This is an excellent video. I learned so much from it. I'm definitely going to rewatch this and take notes. You make some great videos
@rodschmidt89524 жыл бұрын
I recently changed "The van parked across the street. The driver pretended not to be watching." to "The driver appeared not to be watching" because the first one has a POV problem: only the driver knows whether she's pretending or not; from anyone else's point of view, the driver appeared not to be watching.
@leeky-chan38577 жыл бұрын
Thanks for all of the wonderful information Shaelin. I'm a self-taught writer, and have never taken any creative writing classes. All of my writing education has been from KZfaq and online writing forums. I am so thankful for fiction vloggers such as yourself. I also subscribe to Jenna Moreci and Vivien Reis for their views on writing fiction. I am currently in the world building phase for the fantasy series my writing partner and I are working on. If you have any tips for building a fantasy world (particularly a large urban metropolis which will be our primary setting) I would really appreciate it. Thanks!
@mckenziestaley90637 жыл бұрын
Gamerdaddy428 I would suggest taking your time and making sure you know everything you can about the world. You need to treat the world like a character in itself when you are writing a fantasy. I've made the mistake of jumping into fantasy world without knowing everything and that's one of the reasons why I had to rewrite the novel. Glad to know there are self taught writers out there. I hope you continue following your dream and that my advice helped a little. I' was actually planning on making a video about it sometime.
@leeky-chan38577 жыл бұрын
Kenzie Staley Thanks for your advice! We are working in stages. My partner and I have the protagonist and antagonist character profiles done and now moving onto world building. We have some world history and political stuff written but our main goal right now is nailing the city where the majority of action will be taking place.
@mckenziestaley90637 жыл бұрын
Gamerdaddy428 It sounds like you guys are getting really far! Keep up the work and you guys will get it!
@magithedon7 жыл бұрын
Go into as much detail as necessary for example your metropolis, what state is it in? Is it in poverty or prosperous? Are there other areas? If so what is the relationship between those areas and your metropolis and the relationship between the other areas. Races what are they physical descriptions how do they think differently from other races, racial abilities and weaknesses. Magic if there is magic in your novel what types are there? ( if different types exist), political hierarchies. Law system(s). Important historical events.
@sabrinacarleigh7 жыл бұрын
Leeky-chan38 ii
@sonsontheprince26717 жыл бұрын
This is a great KZfaq crash course video for writing stronger prose! Thanks, Shaelin!
@umaimaxsaleem4 жыл бұрын
Great video! I definitely plan on saving it. There is a lot of good advice!
@milliegrace51907 жыл бұрын
Just found your videos and they're so good! Watching this video I realized, wow, I do everything in this video. Thanks for helping me make my writing better 😊
@christopherdrost37645 жыл бұрын
this is such a great video if you're starting out to understand writing craft. It touches upon a lot of things and gives you handles to dive deeper into the material. Thank you so much for making this. It's been very helpful.
@ninakennett-estadocida39566 жыл бұрын
finally, a truly helpful writing video. examples! you give us many. thank you!
@leahgodson23194 жыл бұрын
Thank you for these tips Shaelin; now I can edit my writing effectively.
@The_WriterVerse5 жыл бұрын
I adore this video. So helpful. I can’t find the full essay you’re speaking of, just snippets of it here and there on random blogs.
@leo-author Жыл бұрын
Your amazing Shaelin
@mcjcave18 Жыл бұрын
Lovely video, I've been coming back to this video over the last 3 years and it's still as good
@eriksmith25146 жыл бұрын
I'm glad to hear the "edit on paper" advice. I thought I was the only one who experienced that phenomenon.
@edenmckinley34722 жыл бұрын
Thank you so much! After watching this video, I went over my own book, and I found eighty - count 'em, eighty - instances in one chapter where I used "ing" verbs and I didn't need to. I have some sort of "ing" verb disease. This advice is invaluable to me, and I'm sure my beta readers will thank you. God bless you, Shaelin!
@crstph7 жыл бұрын
deadass going to make a list of these when i line edit my next draft
@JustinWhiterules7 жыл бұрын
This was a wonderful video. You're right, I won't be able to unsee it lol. I just looked up the paper you suggested and I am going to read it probably several times over. You're a huge help. Thank you :)
@byindi5 жыл бұрын
best part of this video is coming back to it after a year or so to go through your story and then finding that you've stopped doing most of these things
@hayleyhistorynerd22117 жыл бұрын
Great vid Shaelin thank-you for the essay resource and giving examples of the parts of language you're using that helped me avoid confusion I'm definitely coming back to these vids for my edits. Hayley ^_^
@martelldave71697 жыл бұрын
Hayley Gross whats the name and author essay?
@Gemwielders7 жыл бұрын
Great video. I am very much looking forward to the one about interesting prose!
@HeatherDeweyPettet7 жыл бұрын
You make a lot of valid points. My critique partners and I have discussed these issues to no end. I agree with you on a lot of this.
@veganphilosopher19752 ай бұрын
Loved this want to scan through my work with this eventually!
@th3logician Жыл бұрын
This video is liquid gold for writers. Thank you!
@petragrace18317 жыл бұрын
i was so happy when i saw that you had posted. like i always am that is. :)
@lanalytch4 жыл бұрын
This was amazingly helpful, thank you so much!!!
@rgarlinyc3 жыл бұрын
Really found this informative and educating - I'm going to look at all your other works too. Thanks a lot! Roger
@pgaquigz11254 жыл бұрын
I’m having such a great epiphany watching this. She’s going off on great things I will be incorporating in my speech and writing!
@halynaryf7 жыл бұрын
Thank you! This will be very helpful once I get to editing. Enjoy your trip!
@ruinel5695 жыл бұрын
"I don't think I use unnecessary language in my writing..." *peeks at first chapter of current fanfic....'she picked herself up off the ground'* "Gosh DANGIT"
@samwallaceart2884 жыл бұрын
How does one pick oneself up? You can get up, stand, erect yourself. But to grab yourself in your own hands and lift? Ergo, not unnecessary language if foreshadowing of later sorcery.
@zlch40213 жыл бұрын
This video is amazing, this really struck a chord with me. Sometimes my writing just has TOO MUCH, too many unnecessary words, and this has really helped.
@derekfirmo4375 жыл бұрын
This is a really helpful video. Awesome stuff.
@heal41hp3 жыл бұрын
There are so many good hacks/tips/philosophies in here! Some of them I've stumbled onto implementing myself, like avoiding dialogue tags as much as possible. I try to replace them with formatting or action beats as much as possible, and reading stories that use them prolifically drive me mad now. I was skeptical about getting rid of -ing words, but after hearing your before and after, I think I'm going to give that serious consideration. I've been spending some quality time with online dictionaries to make sure I'm not wasting time and space on words already implied by the word I was wanting to use. It's been eye-opening; I've learned I had very wrong assumptions about a lot of words. lol I'm so glad you pointed out "as" means simultaneous. I am enmaddened by most uses of "as" and use it carefully myself.
@froggleberry2 жыл бұрын
Some great tips here - really compels you to re-examine work you thought was finished!
@raynermooney12396 жыл бұрын
These are really good advice. So glad I clicked on it. I'm going rewatch it later when I'm more awake and take notes.
@j.mbarlow59526 жыл бұрын
"Nobody is going to be in a kayak and not feel it flip if they are in a kayak and it flips" Quote of the day! (This made me sub btw)
@samwallaceart2884 жыл бұрын
J.M Barlow - alternatively. You wouldn’t feel the kayak flip; you would feel the strained rigging of the structure, hear the hull flex, your sense of up and down jumbled as the water floor pounces and engulfs you from what you thought was above. That right there would give the vibe that maybe the protag is in an adrenaline focal moment. Either keep it simple, or way overshare on the nitty grit of what the character would physically notice. When a person is in a plane crash, they aren’t noticing the way the plane skids they’re noticing that they can’t feel their teeth.
@RebeccaAEmrich6 жыл бұрын
some excellent advice, ones I can use- the change in font/format looks like a good idea for me.
@wschippr17 жыл бұрын
I think adverbs are best used with oxymorons, such as someone screaming silently or deafening silence.
@almaerica5634 жыл бұрын
Same! I haven't read My Immortal, but I've read lots and lots of similar shit on wattpad (I did it bc I was desperate for fanfic, don't judge), but yeah whenever I see a mistake I catch it instantly! I've also started hating ing-verbs, I literally rewrite the sentence in my brain bc it bugs me so much. But even though I see these mistakes, it has also made me immune to bad writing so there's that
@linzlsleepy16274 жыл бұрын
Shaelin, I first came across this video about 2 years ago and it's stuck with me until now. It really took my writing to a whole other level. Tbh, at first I was a little skeptical. Then I saw change take place in my first drafts. It was crazy. Honestly the opening point (treat these as rules and not guidelines) made the difference. When these things started looking like 'mistakes' to me rather than choices, I was able to truly grow as a writer. ❤️
@nugal93207 жыл бұрын
Hi I'm a new subscriber and your videos have really helped me out with my writing! I was wondering if you could do a video on things it's safe to start writing a chapter or scene, not knowing. So basically things you can come up with and improvise if you will, as you go. Love you videos! X
@Jamesington5 жыл бұрын
"No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job" - T.S. Eliot
@Nate19754 жыл бұрын
Super useful and I agree with all of those and gives me hope as already noticing it all as I write. There’s only improvement that will come next time
@jackiechan37292 жыл бұрын
This saved my prose. You're a gem ❤
@hardcore_w00dland_creature187 жыл бұрын
this was so helpful. Thank you.
@psycthom7 жыл бұрын
Great post and thanks for the reference. Writers don't talk enough about prose and opt to discuss character development and plot (I guess it is fun to talk about) looking forward to reading the essay. I'm particularly bad for weasel words (i.e. particularly) but also took ages to get away from ING verbs accidentally using them as sequential rather than simultaneous
@darladarladarla3337 жыл бұрын
this video helps SO much. before, i edited grammar etc because i didn't know how to improve my prose sounds way better now. i can't thank you enough
@schleepy63623 жыл бұрын
Your vids are so helpful ;_; Hell, you even made me edit that sentence! I originally wrote "Your vids are all so helpful to me", caught myself, and changed it to that. *I'M LEARNING, BITCHES*
@ArtofWEZ5 жыл бұрын
I've always taken adverbs as a way a writer gives me mental camera. If you say someone is holding an item, my mind doesn't zoom into it, it would if you mentioned they held it in their hands. So earning them makes sense.
@jeffreyc.mcandrew89116 жыл бұрын
Thanks for the advice. I will share it with my writers club!
@mrwamble5 жыл бұрын
This is amazing, thank you :)
@aboutsexpodcastwithangelas60006 жыл бұрын
I feel like this episode needed more squirrels. Four stars! Thanks for the info. I get a lot out of your videos.
@iluvatar0037 жыл бұрын
David Michael Kaplan wrote a book called "Revision." This "Essay" "Revision your Prose for Power in Punch" is Chapter 9 of that book.
@martelldave71696 жыл бұрын
Thank you, I could never find the book now I know why
@1ivinq.dead.qir1 Жыл бұрын
i need a written version of this so i can follow them, these rules are so useful
@davidbru17 жыл бұрын
Thanks I've been waiting for this help thanks so much
@StellaDonna883 жыл бұрын
Yo! This was useful AF. Thank you. It's also relatively easy for me to get out of writing shape and let excess verbiage sneak back into my prose, so I'll likely return to this and read the essay you noted.
@BVBxXxWarriors7 жыл бұрын
Your strongest video to date. keep it up! :)
@amandarandomtube47932 жыл бұрын
You've made me realize that the english curriculum of my public school was extremely lacking. Thanks for teaching me now 💗
@yeaboi555 жыл бұрын
I always replace just with simply but turns out I replaced one weasel word with another...shit lol.
@lillydevil24862 жыл бұрын
'Avoid having your characters shrug because it's the least interesting thing they could do' LIKE THIS! THIS HERE! I can't tell you how many times I've been reading an awesome scene, when suddenly the character just shrugs, making it seem like they give exactly ZERO rats for what was going on. It's a good way to turn (imo) a fleshed out character into a one-dimensional character that is no longer worth my time XD
@GuardianKnightoftheRealm2 жыл бұрын
This was really helpful! Thanks!
@expertionis7943 жыл бұрын
SIgh I'll be back when my first draft is done.
@pheonixrises117 жыл бұрын
The thing about rules is that they're easier and sometimes better to build off of. Limitations give a visible starting point, which is why people so often make good things out of them. Ignoring rules can leave you stranded. I could just have a bad sense of direction, but I personally love rules and tips. :)
@storyminded7 жыл бұрын
Thank you for the amazing tips Shaelin. I enjoy culling adverbs ;) That's why first drafts should be free so they can then be refined otherwise as you said we would never write anything!
@reecenaidu60206 жыл бұрын
Everyday, I say "I'm not going to take notes!" But here I am with my phone, typing everything you say XO Keep up the good work :)
@mattcms05 жыл бұрын
"I'm just trying to make these all have squirrels." - subscribed
@SysterYster4 жыл бұрын
ing-verbs. I use them, they exist in the language for a reason. That said, I am limiting them because it's not nice to have them everywhere. :P Oooh, I've removed sooo many dialogue tags when editing! XD The up and down thing. I think you can use it sometimes. Like, if you describe someone entering a room and dude in there just stands up from a sitting position. Then, you can say "he stood up". Because if I write "he stood" it would seem that he was standing from the start. But if we know he's sitting already, it's not needed. Oh, and I've cut SO many "to be". XD To run - ran, to walk - walked. They often come with the "started/began" thing as well. He started to run - He ran. Or There was a stair in the back of the room. A stair rose from the back of the room... or something.
@mom2many1662 жыл бұрын
GOLD. Thank you.
@icyangel134 жыл бұрын
The thing about -ing verbs though... not using them actually changes the meaning of the sentence. Example: "I'm happy," she said, putting her sunglasses on. Without -ing verbs, it would be: "I'm happy", she said, and put her sunglasses on. I'm not saying it doesn't sound better in the second example, maybe it does, but it did change the sequence of events described. That's why -ing verbs exist, they're not just an odd-sounding quirk of the English language, they exist to express an action simultaneous to another. So how are we supposed to render that? Do we just replace all the actual simultaneous actions with "as" constructions? Also with words like "started" or "began", cutting them out can also change the meaning of a sentence. The example you used is a good example of that: he started climbing the tree implies that he is in the middle of doing so (perhaps something happens before he reaches the top). He climbed the tree implies the completed action. He's now at the top. This is a difference of meaning. Again, that's why these verbs exist, they're not arbitrary quirks of language... Realized is another one I don't agree with. Saying "he realized she was trying to kill him" implies a level of subjectivity that "she was trying to kill him" just doesn't have. It implies a change in perception, which is part of telling the story. That's what realizations are. They are moments when we become subjectively aware of a truth we were oblivious to before and this can alter our behavior. She may have been trying to kill him all along, but that's not what we're focusing on. We're focusing on the fact he realized this at some point. Am I making myself clear? It's one of those instances where we're more interested in the subjective development of the character than the actual facts. Taking "realized" out of the sentences changes the focus of it, so it isn't a superfluous word.
@feezlfuzzl5647 жыл бұрын
One thing that really helped me in my writing was being on a panel in which I had to write essays about 150 words each. That was not easy, when they asked about politics or other sensitive topics. So I learned how to cut unnecessary words, and how to add unnecessary words to make things longer!
@blacklustersoldierenvoyoft910310 ай бұрын
Limit adverbs. Develop a style by cutting out all the common mistakes. No weasel words. No convoluted phrases. Limit -ing verbs. No repetitive adverbs like "shouting loudly". Abstract words like "something" got to go. No adjectives like "unknown" and "stranger" together. No "simultaneously" if the actions cannot actually be simultaneous. No need to say "to me" or "thought to myself". No passive voice.