Admissions tutors reveal what makes them reject a personal statement. READ THE FULL ARTICLE HERE www.thestudentroom.co.uk/conte...
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@meganthomas50706 жыл бұрын
"Im not awarding you a degree in nepotism" 🤣
@ryo27225 жыл бұрын
They should straight off slap Harvard in the face with this video
@xm34054 жыл бұрын
Eton college will be blacklisted lol
@dantae6664 жыл бұрын
yeah that's bullshit lol
@JHS2706944 жыл бұрын
@R K Yeh but the 'donations' don't hurt... Quid pro quo n all that.
@1stewok5874 жыл бұрын
seems stupid to shut down decent or possible business
@macalby7 жыл бұрын
"In my free time I like socialising and hanging out with my friends. You'd be a really strange person if you didn't" Well shit.
@shabrinaikbar31757 жыл бұрын
Finely guess i'm strange then
@corteiz6 жыл бұрын
I'm more guiltier than a convict
@faithmoll33406 жыл бұрын
Finley Lane Mcelroy 🙄
@SoniaVictoria6 жыл бұрын
I felt the same way
@Indausn2 жыл бұрын
🤣🤣🤣
@GGRocks10123957 жыл бұрын
Anyone else procrastinating writing their personal statement, by watching this video?
@hyacinthp48826 жыл бұрын
yes me!! it has been two months now..i finally got a word down lol
@DIYKRISSY6 жыл бұрын
YES LOL
@MMmm-bg9li5 жыл бұрын
Me haha! It’s due in like 2 weeks fml
@yoyaoo82674 жыл бұрын
meeee
@sntzksworld4 жыл бұрын
meeee
@erzan5 жыл бұрын
I bet the guy in the glasses is a legendary lecturer. 😂
@okpolihenry9834 жыл бұрын
I swear
@corporateraider97664 жыл бұрын
That line was gold
@KaizerBeatz-vf9wf4 жыл бұрын
that's a woman edit: nvm, see the geezer now
@whoneedsapillowwhenjinshou26602 жыл бұрын
Fr😭😭😭
@Indausn2 жыл бұрын
true
@yaseen14785 жыл бұрын
It might get rejected because : 1- It's written for a major different than what it's been applied for 2- it extensively mentions irrelevant facts. (like what does your dad do) 3- it has grammar/spelling mistakes
@jianpingdeng55644 жыл бұрын
Helpful
@kunalbang093 жыл бұрын
I Don't Have A CS Background In 11 And 12th , Will They Reject Me If I Apply For Bsc In CS , even though the university doesn't ask for previous experience in that field
@dhsf59373 жыл бұрын
@@jianpingdeng5564 don't forget the clichés.
@MrCollegeConcierge3 жыл бұрын
Agreed!
@nandinitalukdar34952 жыл бұрын
@@kunalbang09 Maybe take some courses on a certain programming language or any cs related course, that should help
@user-ub8oi7oh3r7 жыл бұрын
I just got called strange by a university professor.
@kingrobert72466 жыл бұрын
Aksangel _ a doctor called me strange. Then wong entered the room
@rachelp99545 жыл бұрын
LMAO
@sarujanrupan48314 жыл бұрын
Lucky
@Wingcrawler4 жыл бұрын
😂
@behuman38013 жыл бұрын
I. Some culture being strange is a very good thing
@kwatay38966 жыл бұрын
I love the second guy- I'm not giving you a degree in neputism. Best thing I've heard perfect sentence
@weaponofmassconstruction19406 жыл бұрын
Nepotism* (My dad owns a dictionary publishing company)
@samjam1706 жыл бұрын
Weapon of mass construction Very underrated comment
@hhughes94655 жыл бұрын
sol walker I think that what he meant is that he's looking for people who have actively sought out work experience. For example, you might want to put 'I worked with *insert company here* to gain experience', rather than a 'My dad owns *insert company here* therefore I automatically have experience in the field'. Just because you have been surrounded by a certain subject doesn't mean you have good experience.
@Jungleland335 жыл бұрын
On the other hand if he taught astrophysics he would be awarding a degree in Neptunism........ I'll get me coat.
@yeetwchybaban4 жыл бұрын
@@weaponofmassconstruction1940 gay
@jess47095 жыл бұрын
Babe, I wasn’t going to apply to Oxford anyway
@maimunanuhah48773 жыл бұрын
Literally 😭
@antonydandrea6 жыл бұрын
The trouble with the personal statement that I found was the character limit and the actual line limit! It becomes less about writing and more about how to say as much as you want in as few words as possible.
@yourface7476 жыл бұрын
That's what writing is about.
@erzan5 жыл бұрын
Smart people can say more in a sentence than an entire paragraph. 😎
@aidstoon72795 жыл бұрын
+erzan Fuck off, loooool.
@highlandragdoll5 жыл бұрын
VERY late comment, but for the benefit of anyone reading, it's very important to be succinct in your essay writing. I didn't realize or grasp this for quite a while. For any beginning students out here, this'll help you immensely: Each paragraph should have a PEEL structure. POINT: State your, well, point here. The main concept of your paragraph. (For example: Puppies are cute.) Evidence: What supports your point and backs up this point that you made? (A study by Andrex (2018) shows that 9/10 people faint with cuteness overload at the puppy on their advert.) Explanation: So? How does this evidence support your point? (When asked to describe what caused them to faint, the affected participants commonly described feeling overwhelmed by feelings of joy and adoration.) Link: Either link back to the main question that your essay is asking you, or onto the next point. (The above research would certainly support that puppies are, indeed, cute.) That's essay writing, though. In regards to the personal statement... I had to change big words to small ones, change sentence structure, and even entire sentences to sacrifice. I felt that talking about my research methods and numeracy skills were more important than my hobbies, so they had to go. Hope this helps someone! Cheers!
@RK-ep8qy4 жыл бұрын
Ashendoll I rate this ☝️ when I wrote my personal statement I more or less did this and got a couple of medicine interviews because of it (but nearly all med schools don’t read your personal statement anymore)
@muzzy5626 жыл бұрын
Who applies to Oxford as their 'I can't apply to medicine 5 times' choice? Who? Who in their right mind?
@kathman69526 жыл бұрын
s d Are you an idiot?
@ona9076 жыл бұрын
lol I did and I got an offer
@ona9076 жыл бұрын
+Kathmandu calm down wow, that's really rude
@lulusun26 жыл бұрын
Yh tons of people apply for biochem at oxford as their 5th
@RK-ep8qy4 жыл бұрын
lulusun2 i think i get why, if you can’t get the prestige of being a doctor then get the prestige of an oxbridge student. I get that.
@kiwikiwi73755 жыл бұрын
I mean I’m doing law and bullshitted my entire personal statement. Got offers from Bristol Nottingham York and Warwick. Say you like the subject, say you read some books, say you played a sport, that’s it. Oh and don’t use the word ‘passionate’
@vercetti86704 жыл бұрын
Kiwi Kiwi what uni did you go to?
@kiwikiwi73753 жыл бұрын
Tommy Vercetti Nottingham, figured it had a good balance between student life and a decent law school, a nice student city with a good campus and sport reputations
@kiwikiwi73753 жыл бұрын
Raul Ramirez how?
@kiwikiwi73753 жыл бұрын
Raul Ramirez you got to remember these people read 100s of the same applications. DofE and EPQs don’t make you unique, they literally just want people who will do well on the course, and possibly in sport.
@ashwinramesh41863 жыл бұрын
What's your reason for not using the word "passionate"?
@Lara-vm2ki6 жыл бұрын
"i'm not awarding you a degree in nepotism" fuckin savage. i love that man.
@dunyamalibabakishizada77444 жыл бұрын
I think biggest issue today is demanding masterpiece letters which non-natives simply are not capable. On the other hand, some people who really deserve stay out of course due to ones get written their letter to freelancers or agencies. Instead who wrote letter based on natural thoughts and feelings usually ignored. I think this is little bit a injustice.
@timjenkins85384 жыл бұрын
I'm a 31 year old man who finished uni in 2012. Thanks algorithm!
@pnp82352 жыл бұрын
😂😂
@BridgetSonobe6 жыл бұрын
Thank god I watched this because my personal essay actually included "from when I was younger, I fell in love with film," and one of my PIQs included socializing with friends.
@thegreatsalad4 жыл бұрын
Bridget Sonobe Honestly it's quite hard to think of a first sentence. I think with things they've seen a lot they just skip over to the next sentence and see what you've got to say. It also depends how competitive a place you're applying to. Anyway it's usually better to get an application sent and be further up the queue than to spend a few more weeks making it "perfect".
@brokke83884 жыл бұрын
'you'd be a really strange person if you don't like socialising..' *me and other autistic people stare sadly into the distance* But this was a genuinely helpful video, thank you!
@mesia24534 жыл бұрын
I am not autistic but same **can feel you*
@AGMtagious Жыл бұрын
as an autistic, i did stare sadly into the distance when he said that
@pinksssss Жыл бұрын
LMAO
@sersastark3 жыл бұрын
In my statement to University of Edinburgh I was honest in what I learned, what inspired me, and what I didnt know but wanted to learn and how I felt the university would fill that role for me. It was this statement along with recs and my grades that got me in, but it took me a whole semester to get that statement to where it needed to be.
@emilycarter89222 жыл бұрын
You might want to check this out kzfaq.info/get/bejne/a8CFmrdmyM24l2Q.html
@zuko496 Жыл бұрын
Very helpful thank you
@audreyboustani7667 Жыл бұрын
Very interested in Edinburgh how are you liking it ? Are you still going there ?
@aarya6976 Жыл бұрын
Hi! Could you perhaps share it please?
@grigorioschatziandreou255810 ай бұрын
I mean, it’s not that it’s a tough uni to get into😂
@9_in_the_afternoon7 жыл бұрын
WAIT - you have to be a sane and quite nice person to get a place at uni? Well then, goodbye dreams of getting a degree XD
@faizolmai58447 жыл бұрын
Tori Lee 😂😂😂😂
@christianplummer33156 жыл бұрын
"Don't try to be too clever" well shit
@oratval4 жыл бұрын
the application process in the UK has so many differences from the US. this video contradicts a lot recommendations for writing essays in the US. lol idk I just found that interesting
@harryscorah20915 жыл бұрын
“I’m not awarding you a degree in nepotism” brilliant
@rahulchaudhary44286 жыл бұрын
That guy in the blue sweater: Don't tell me that you love film, who doesn't A few moments later, The psychology professor in the grey jacket: you love music, tell me that ! That is real enthusiasm coming from a student.
@Malene_Simonsen6 жыл бұрын
I think it was more the whole "from a young age" thing he was objecting against. If you are applying to a film or media course, it would be quite strange to not mention that you have an interest in films :P
@marionkokkinou72814 жыл бұрын
I HAD THE SAME QUESTION WHO ARE WE SUPPOSE TO LISTEN TO
@_aimeexo_5964 жыл бұрын
Marion Kokkinou I think it depends on the course and the skill in question. Watching a film isn’t impressive, so if you were applying to nursing and you mentioned how you like films that’s irrelevant and not going to help you. But if you are applying to a media or script writing course saying how you enjoy watching films and that you want to enhance that knowledge into behind the scenes is useful as it is directly linking into the course. With the music one, it is technically a good skill. I feel like saying how you’ve always participated in clubs growing up like music for example can leave a good impression that you are a hard worker. Obviously don’t write a huge paragraph on music if that’s not the course you’re applying too, but you can still mention it.
@snuffles42914 жыл бұрын
I imagine the person who loved music was applying for a music degree. I doubt the other person was applying to a socialising with friends and watching films degree
@magtazeum40714 жыл бұрын
@@snuffles4291 haha.."socialising with friends and watching films degree" LOL..
@Mirsab5 жыл бұрын
I didn't know the student room had a KZfaq channel till now 😂
@jonnylons14 жыл бұрын
“Oxford, Sussex, Greenwich, Bangor” Not exactly all in the same league there....
@casablancasj25704 жыл бұрын
Jonathan L you get rejected by Bangor by using too intelligent language
@mxxx95614 жыл бұрын
😂😂😂 literally what I thought
@rosie62 жыл бұрын
Literally I was like huh
@rosie62 жыл бұрын
Honestly for Cambridge it needs to be extremely , if not completely academically orientated for an interview and offer. My cam interviewer also asked me questions in my statement about wider reading and supplementary writingzGood luck 🍀 I hope we can all get to our dream destinations.
@jenniferiwuese4 жыл бұрын
I wouldn’t want the guy to read my personal statement 😂
I thank my parents everyday for enrolling me in a school with a KILLER university counsellor. He knows what a personal statement needs and makes them real good.
@watanabeyedam94792 жыл бұрын
Give us some useful tips pls
@khadija27392 жыл бұрын
Don’t say that and not give us any tips then
@thatcat54012 жыл бұрын
drop some tips
@grassytramtracks Жыл бұрын
Divulge!
@LeeKnowsCatss Жыл бұрын
6 years on and this is still VERY useful, thank you!
@shivam13juna5 жыл бұрын
the professor, from the University of Sussex. WOW so succinct and precise.
@crisyorke13287 жыл бұрын
Are you sure most ivy league or Russell universities aren't awarding nepotism?
@felicityaeh6 жыл бұрын
Cris Yorke this is the UK
@Charlzton5 жыл бұрын
@@felicityaeh Russel Group is in the UK
@jess47095 жыл бұрын
That guy is from Sussex, and Susssex isn’t a Russel Group uni
@lucydaniel28115 жыл бұрын
Have you got proof that they are?
@MegaTammy3214 жыл бұрын
Lucy Daniel Sussex isn’t Russell Group it’s part of another I think the 1994 which Loughborough is in as well
@chiedzamatowe43974 жыл бұрын
Best advice ever. At first I dreaded listening to this because I thought it would give negative vibes. But in fact, I feel this is another wonderful way to learn, from mistakes Thank you "the studentroom"
@jaytalkss4 жыл бұрын
Best video about writing Personal Statement. Thank you for the tips!!!
@michellesantos57942 жыл бұрын
So I actually did my personal statement in the right way!! I was so worried but this video helped a lot.
@user-py5ml5yy1pАй бұрын
That last statement was powerful. What you really want to convey.
@desankad.8707 жыл бұрын
I really like Mr. Sharif Mowlabus's personality and way of thinking. Those people are the reason why I live.
@ghjghvdib41714 жыл бұрын
That dick?
@jackorourke16847 жыл бұрын
Thanks for this useful informatoin.
@WriteYourAcceptance5 жыл бұрын
So important to personalize your personal statement! Great info.
@hamzalaher1028 Жыл бұрын
What are you smoking you lanky bastard. Personalise deez nuts
@spiritblood11003 жыл бұрын
oh my god i love the default youtuber no copyright music. genuinely.
@andiviolet50275 жыл бұрын
Second guy was a full on savage. I love it.
@aditisiddharth64725 жыл бұрын
I know the lady from oxford - she comes to my gym. She s very nice
@noneofyourbee-siness5 жыл бұрын
The Oxford professor seems quite scary😑
@julianshirnia39224 жыл бұрын
Pritika yeah and interviews are far worse than this
@behuman38013 жыл бұрын
Their campus is scary and outdated and old too
@faithlesshound56213 жыл бұрын
@@behuman3801 That's exactly why kids want to go there!
@ellie-ng6nr4 жыл бұрын
im so glad I applied to sussex .... I hope to see this guy at the open day
@sujathasatheesh1096 Жыл бұрын
Well done my dear son...❤❤ hope you will reach greater heights in drawing in future....keep going
@theliopleurodon3 жыл бұрын
The guy is so sarcastic and funny. I want him as a teacher
@GeeseAreJustBastardizedSwans3 жыл бұрын
I feel as though he'd tear into you so fast but actually be there to help.
@sarahbelal18476 жыл бұрын
This was so incredibly helpful! Thank you
@wediyemane78316 жыл бұрын
Usually, I don't struggle with doing my assignment, however, I am very struggling to make suitable my personal statement. SPAG 😁
@Lymbo5 жыл бұрын
Wedi yemane ahh he’s. Good old SPaG
@davidbanahene3074 жыл бұрын
Same to me
@misterman66913 жыл бұрын
agreeance, i am in greatly
@beautifulL523 жыл бұрын
lmao! The guy talking about youd be a strange person if you WEREN't that way. Had me cracking me!
@laurelwatts62332 жыл бұрын
My paper was well-written . I will order more and more😍😍😍😍😍
@crisyorke13287 жыл бұрын
One main point: Use COMMON SENSE.
@KingEutony6 жыл бұрын
Cris Yorke like J hus.
@xenia75306 жыл бұрын
Apparently I'm a very strange person because I don't like socialising...
@taiji14785 жыл бұрын
@Read This maybe instead of having a developmental disorder, she just doesn't like people. there is nothing wrong with that. to hell with autism, online autism tests, bipolar, online bipolar tests, adhd, online adhd tests, etc. there is more to life than collecting diagnoses of disorders, identifying yourself as disordered, and finding online support groups. and not liking socialising with people should not be looked at as a personality disorder, as-yet-undiagnosed. i remember back in 2006 or something, on a different YT channel i made a video talking about my personality. more than one person showed up to try to welcome me to the Aspergers community. telling me i should get tested for it. give me a break. i utterly despise our culture of disorders.
@fffernsw4dl5394 жыл бұрын
@@taiji1478 yes 👏 and for real.
@user-yr3uj6go8i4 жыл бұрын
@@taiji1478 Completely agreed.
@sivabalankaniapan62753 жыл бұрын
Thank you for such an informative video.
@FrangoTraidor3 жыл бұрын
j'y ai passé beaucoup de temps et j'en suis fier
@andrewgregggregg41323 жыл бұрын
The people of the world are the most Important part of any statement..
@nightwolf7yt4 жыл бұрын
ops I started my statement with "since I was young" to give an intro to my personality, I hope that won't affect my application
@reptilianmentality5 жыл бұрын
I decided to watch this out of pure curiosity. I managed to get 2 unconditional offers and i'm incredibly pleased. Good luck to everyone xo
@daredevil64944 жыл бұрын
This made me nervous but made laugh a lot
@sutoreikyatto2 жыл бұрын
low-key wished I found this video way sooner
@TheWoeJoe15 жыл бұрын
I gave it a like because of the funny bald guy.
@lenard39353 жыл бұрын
i love it when people can effectively articulate that oxford psychologist a grade
@JonathanSteadman200311 ай бұрын
College or schools should be able to help out.
@tharinisriskandarajah33104 жыл бұрын
i didn’t need this in my recommended when i just applied to ucas 😭😭😭
@chichicox2v4422 жыл бұрын
jajaja same PS. Sorry for the 1 year response. Ive applied recently
@starboivids11382 жыл бұрын
Samee🤣
@yuliethojeda52923 жыл бұрын
Very useful content. Thanks for sharing it
@kyurindiaryvlogs77142 жыл бұрын
Amazing tips! Thanks for this video =D
@xueyizhou79263 жыл бұрын
The male professor is hilarious (brutally honest) oh I love British accent!!
@elisakolb40254 жыл бұрын
Thank you this is great !
@alibutt37533 жыл бұрын
I think if you will not understand the environment and the person to whom your emailing so it could happen.there is always a situation means direct dialogue environment or indirect environment. You need to understand environment management means
@polyglotdream38636 жыл бұрын
Ohhhhh I really wanted to start my SOP with a quotation that explains my nature and ambitions :/ what should I do now??
@paulinegonzalez7526 жыл бұрын
I'm an American trying to apply to Oxford and ahhh this is so much different then the American personal statement
@indirects8686 жыл бұрын
pauline gonzalez What's an American personal statement like?
@hannahbridgetprice42376 жыл бұрын
Indirects they're more general- they like to know that you're well rounded and get involved :)
@paulinegonzalez7526 жыл бұрын
you do pick an intended major! but the personal statement is more ablout who you are and how you think rather than about your academic interests and what youve done since that is already expressed in other parts of ur application
@gracescott69514 жыл бұрын
Pauline Gonzalez taming you back to this comment two years later haha! Did you end up applying to Oxford after all?
@randomperson94564 жыл бұрын
Did you end up getting into oxford?
@elenadelgadoEHS15 жыл бұрын
I love this vlog.
@K10jak4 жыл бұрын
Some good advice, shame it didn’t come with a few poor attitude statements.
@lucygordon9264 жыл бұрын
oops...I started mine with a quotation 🤣 still got offers though
@Antweezy3 жыл бұрын
Would most admissions discard the SoP if it's not completely formal? As in using words like "really"?
@Anonymous-li6py3 жыл бұрын
Except oxford, all the other universities do not have the privilege to select students as they have problems admitting enough students.
@wojciechsuch66263 жыл бұрын
Bit late now that it’s sent. Thanks KZfaq Recommendations
@jingyiwu96422 жыл бұрын
Me: just submitted my uni application. Algorithm: Why your Personal Statement may get rejected?
@jingyiwu96422 жыл бұрын
It's a really good video though! Thank you for posting it!
@kishanchali87523 жыл бұрын
Too bad that I didn't come across this before I applied for Oxford three years ago.
@bradleykingston5512 жыл бұрын
I am applying hope it works
@msscrazybuthappy5 жыл бұрын
Fantastic video
@aniketmaheshwari12754 жыл бұрын
My man Sharif Mowlabus is savage AF.
@ahuman4874 жыл бұрын
Why am I watching this, im in uni...
@Maaarrina4 жыл бұрын
Savage professor from Sussex😎
@guenli78383 жыл бұрын
well shit lol, im currently waiting to get my offers back and ive already done the first two, love that for me :]
@deekswarner72833 жыл бұрын
rip
@jxmilx34092 жыл бұрын
How have ur teachers not said anything about that? WAIT OMDS DID YOU GET IN?
@veenibik3363 жыл бұрын
*" ever since i was young, i love film. In my free time i like socializing and hanging out with friends"* *you'd be a really strange person if you dont like those two things* I agree with the first but i don't know about second
@Shirley_BK2 жыл бұрын
Problem is the word count. Some unis ask for 200 words max. What can you put and what can you omit in a 200 word statement
@choccomonde4 жыл бұрын
this was really helpful
@ardalla5354 жыл бұрын
Interesting. I was thinking your personal statement would get rejected if it threatened the safe space of the tutors.
@StDurendal5 жыл бұрын
Ah, strange-hood. Not liking socialising is the key to standing out, my bespectacled egg!
@cennysworld3 жыл бұрын
Thanks.👍
@nodiyaa1582 жыл бұрын
Haha, jokes on you. I applied for aerospace engineering with a medical degree and still got in
@Aristotle2000 Жыл бұрын
1:33 This video IMHO really emphasizes the privilege of wealthier applicants who get better mentoring and understand many of these norms as a simple matter of being part of their own wealthier academic subculture. Many student from Eton College would know these things merely as a matter of course. Better students from other UK subcultures would not know these things.
@Egirl_Slayer3 жыл бұрын
grades are number 1 priority though, personal statement is the least important.
@afraanan64486 жыл бұрын
Really helped this vid.
@alinao.39874 жыл бұрын
Stop reading comments and go write your paper
@KaizerBeatz-vf9wf4 жыл бұрын
you do the same then ill do the same. gobshite
@searchdoublejeje70426 жыл бұрын
OH MY GOODNESS, this is so difficult for me
@asl199994 жыл бұрын
Never even heard of any of the universities in the video, other than Oxford
@ronayosufi85653 жыл бұрын
can i write? To whom it may concern. when i don't know who will read our intent letter or motivated letter.
@sadhnagupta5534 Жыл бұрын
1. Don't try to be clever 2. Present your statement in a humorous way. 3. Don't tell about family, childhood n all as they are interested in knowing what you could do now at your present age. 4. Don't write irrelevant, obvious things which a person does, mention things which help them understand about you truly.
@dude143777 жыл бұрын
Im at Sussex right now. Guess I didnt do any of these things haha.
@hawra43335 жыл бұрын
Is the social life there good? I went to the open day.. It seemed a bit dead? I dont know. Please say if you like it? And why? What you dont like?
@josephmonti-kaye24875 жыл бұрын
Hawra Albadran mate Brighton is one of the best cities to live in in the UK. Don’t worry about a social life, that’ll come almost immediately.
@durgacherry6194 жыл бұрын
Dude 14377 how is sussex university for study Business bro??