The New TOEFL Writing Task Practice: Writing for an Academic Discussion

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Test Resources - TOEFL Preparation

11 ай бұрын

Here's a new video about the TOEFL Writing for an Academic Discussion Task (that's the new TOEFL writing question).
Check out the end of the video for how you can get some feedback on your practice responses. If you need more feedback, you can sign up at the website: www.toeflresources.com/writin...
The master list of practice questions is over here: www.toeflresources.com/toefl-...

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@mahboubehkamalkhani4006
@mahboubehkamalkhani4006 10 ай бұрын
Hi Micheal. You are a great teacher. This is my response. Thank you for your precious feedback in advance. In my opinion, remote educating is one of the most invaluable results of the technological advancements. To be more specific, it makes incredible effects on education worldwide. For example, I have a friend that he interested in an innovative major, which our country's universities haven't presented it yet, so he couldn't be able to study in his favourite major. When one of the foreign universities added online education on its plans, he applied for that, and now he is one of the well known researchers in that field. I totally agree with Wayne about being time and cost consuming of offline classes. His insightful remark underscores availability of online learning. Sarah points out a relevant point about more convenient communication in physical classes, but she overlooks that in some situations that it's impossible to go to university, such as the pandemic era, having education without this advantage is better than not learning. To sum up, I believe a multifaceted strategy is imperative to ensure an efficient method for learning.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
Write a single paragraph. Don't write four short paragraphs. There are a lot of grammar and language use errors, which will lower your score. I see multiple mistakes in just about every sentence. Try using something like "Grammarly" to learn what mistakes you are making. I think this one would score about 17 or 18 points.
@ranjeetsingha2254
@ranjeetsingha2254 11 ай бұрын
Thank you, Micheal. I got 101 in a recent toefl-ibt Go exam. Keep up your great work!
@amirzaman1563
@amirzaman1563 11 ай бұрын
Dear can you help and guide for its preparation
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 ай бұрын
Fantastic! What's next for you?
@architshukla2042
@architshukla2042 11 ай бұрын
I can't thankyou enough for this content. I gave my toefl last week and I got my dream score all because of your speaking and writing tips that you gave. Thankyou so much sir.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 ай бұрын
Great job! I am so happy to have helped a bit. What's next for you?
@architshukla2042
@architshukla2042 11 ай бұрын
@@Toeflresources I scored 110 so I'll be applying for my dream Universities for the fall sem of 2024.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 ай бұрын
Nice score! Let me know if there is anything I can do to help as you move forward!
@angelloera1342
@angelloera1342 10 ай бұрын
Congratulations @architshukla2042! Can I ask how long did it take for you to receive your scores after your test?
@architshukla2042
@architshukla2042 10 ай бұрын
@@angelloera1342 I got them on the fifth day after I gave the test.
@musicforlife3229
@musicforlife3229 10 ай бұрын
When weighing the pros and cons of online learning, if I were to highlight its most significant benefit, I would underscore the valuable opportunities it provides. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience during the lockdown period. Access to online education enabled me to carry on with my semester, ensuring that our academic year wasn't lost during this critical time. I concur with Wayne's point regarding the accessibility of education, making it available to students from every corner. I would also like to add that online education allows working individuals to pursue their studies. I recall my uncle having to drop out of college due to financial pressures that necessitated him to work. Thanks to online classes, nobody has to abandon their education due to other responsibilities nowadays.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
I don't really like your opening line. It seems awkward to me. I would just say: "If I were asked to highlight the most significant benefit of online learning, I would say that...." Otherwise, your work is pretty decent. I think it would score about 23 or 24 points.
@hosseinmehdipour2996
@hosseinmehdipour2996 6 ай бұрын
Hello Michael! Thank you for helping us. This is my response: I agree with Sarah that attending an online class can not benefit students as much as physically going to an actual class. At first glance, it seems like the most important aspect of a class is the material the professor is teaching or speaking, but there are other significant things that make an actual class the clearest option. For instance, the friends you make in those classes and during the breaks and the intimacy you reach in a physical class is not comparable to an online experience. Furthermore, in online classes, you barely learn and practice mannerisms, which can be a deciding factor in your success in the future. Therefore, I think online classes can not replace physical ones.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 6 ай бұрын
Just use "material the professor is teaching." Don't use "or speaking" as well. Overall, this is a really solid answer, but it might be a bit short. I think it would score about 24 or 25 points.
@yiliaz4330
@yiliaz4330 10 ай бұрын
Hi, Michael! Here is my response, thanks for checking, love your video! Like a coin with two sides, while online learning advantaged us a lot during the pandemic, I think its most notable impact is that it makes students harder to develop their critical thinking. For one thing, online courses are usually filled with professors’ output, with less space for students to discuss or communicate. In that case, students get more used to sit in front of the laptop just being passive recipients. Meanwhile, with regard to the technique of online meeting softwares, even if the debate was set, it will be like one hundred ducks quacking together when more than two people speak at the same time. As we all know, debate is an crucial part in academic development, and critical thinking matters as much as knowledge input for students. Therefore, offline learning would be a better choice from my point of view. ❤❤❤
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
Don't use "like a coin with two sides." That's always weird. Never, never, never. Don't use "advantaged us a lot." Use "helped us a lot." Use "makes IT HARDER FOR students to develop..." There are more errors in your work, but I think you get the point. Try using something like "Grammarly" to identify the sorts of mistakes you make most frequently. I think this one would score 21 or 22 points.
@barssahin163
@barssahin163 6 ай бұрын
Hello Michael, thank you for your help. While this topic is challenging, in my point of view, online classes create an environment without limitations. In other words, students now are able to attend their lessons wherever they want. For instance, when I was a student my university was considerably far from my house that I need to spend 2 hours to get there. Moreover, it was costly. In order to finish my school I had to work extra to get my transportation money however, that was not only tiring but also time consuming for me so I could not finish my school. If I had a chance to attend online classes I am sure that I could be graduated. So i believe being present in the classes anywhere is the most critical impact that online classes made and it is crucial because there are many examples as I am. In other words, it has a great impact that more people could be graduated with the help of online classes. As Wayne also stated, that made education easy to Access and I would like to add just one more point to that which is online classes also made learning cheaper.
@mohammadamirkhani7510
@mohammadamirkhani7510 10 ай бұрын
I believe that online classes, despite their unquestionable benefits, pose a great threat on the overall well-being of the education system. Even with the help of the most sophisticated tools to monitor the students during exams, there could be still some ways to cheat. In fact evaluation of each student can be a very challenging and daunting process for test takers. Moreover, given the current situation of the infrastructure, even in the developed countries, the internet facilities are not strong enough to support a full online education system. Furthermore, internet is not a reliable ground to hold classes. The whole thing can crash just in a second and cause a national disruption in the education system which definitely brings about tremendous economic losses afterwards.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
There are some errors in this work. Like: "pose a great threat on" (should be "pose a great threat to") "in fact evaluation" (should be "in fact, evaluation") "test takers" (should be "teachers") There are more, but I think you get the point. Work on your grammar as much as possible! I think this one would score 21 or 22 points.
@davidaksa
@davidaksa 10 ай бұрын
Hi, Michael. Thank you for all that you do! This is my answ Personally, I think the most significant impact online classes have had is that they have made the students less engaged and serious in their classes. Online education, although easier to access and comfortable, can make pupils loose focus. In an offline class, a one to one engagement with the professor can stimulate the brain, in turn make you pay attention to the matter at hand. Moreover, the relationships and connections you build with your teacher can only take place effectively in an offline class. The teachers gets to know you at a personal level and know your weaknesses and strengths. As a result, the teacher can provide you the feedback necessary for your overall improvement in your academics. Therefore, online classes have eliminated a crucial and vital part of an offline class.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
This is pretty good, but there are some language use errors. Like: 1. You should have said "made students" instead of "made the students." You are talking about students in general (and not some specific students) so you don't need the definite article. 2. You should have said "WHICH in turn MAKES you..." 3. "the teachers gets" is a subject-verb agreement error. There are other issues, but I will leave it at that for now. Overall, I think this one would score about 23 points.
@ncllnc
@ncllnc 9 ай бұрын
Hi Michael, can you give me a feedback? This is a challenging topic, but I think that online classes is a way better option between normal classes. I strongly agree with Wayne's viewpoint about the accessibility created, futhermore the incriese of their flexibility and decrease of costs. I'd add that, after personally experienced both environment, is truly creditable that online classes implies a more captivate option to students, I have myself evolve a lot more of benefits after switch to normal classes to online classes. While Sarah raised the relevant point about the relationships and collaborations you can have when you take classes in person, she didn't mention that a lot of students can have struggles with social comunication, and be able to speak and elaborate projects by their home or a comfortable space can give them more confidence. For example, as a introvert, I personally would prefer take all my classes online over take them in person, I truly would find way more easier to express myself.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 9 ай бұрын
As I said in response to your integrated submission, there are just too many grammar errors for you to score much more than 20 points. You need to focus on that aspect of your writing.
@rahmatemami6730
@rahmatemami6730 10 ай бұрын
Hi Micheal! thanks for your great contents. here is my response: The topic of online classes without physical precence in the class has generated much discussion in recent years. From my perspective, the most vital impact of online classes is making it possible to the students remain in their hometown by their family, therefore not only they have not to waste time and money to go to and live in another city, but also, they could live with their family and loved ones. This is a momentous matter in psychological health to being able to be with your family. For instance, I lost my father in my first year of undergraduate and I was not able be with my family, so it was very hard time to my and other members of the family. (123 words)
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
There are a lot of grammar and language use errors in this answer, sadly. They made it difficult for to grasp the meaning of the middle part of your answer. Try running your work through a service like "Grammarly" to get an idea about the sorts of mistakes you make most frequently.
@qishunliao1837
@qishunliao1837 10 ай бұрын
Hey Mr.Michael! This is my answer Due to the shift in recent trends in regard to education moving towards a more internet-based fashion, it is inevitable to consider the upsides of learning virtually. While virtual learners are allowed to have access to a more diverse range of resources, it is also believed that classes can be made more interactive through means of applying intriguing emojis and other fun and innovative accessories, thereby promoting course efficiency and effectiveness. Not to mention that students will be able to study within the comfort of their own house which is a driving factor for people who live remotely and thus mitigating the possibility of wasting time commuting daily, with all the points made, it is tempting for one to think of all the unlimited possibilities of learning virtually, and how this revolutionary concept may potentially be more efficient as opposed to the traditional way of study.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
This is okay, but your sentences are awkward and unidiomatic. I feel like you might be trying a little too hard to use advanced vocabulary. Is that a possibility? If you are doing that... you should stop.
@qishunliao1837
@qishunliao1837 10 ай бұрын
this is my first time trying the new edition, and just to be clear this is the tone I usually write in, and obviously I am not a native speaker so I still got a lot to improve. I only got 103 last time so...@@Toeflresources sorry if its not really composed well in your opinion😅 I will definitely do better next time
@sofizuniga148
@sofizuniga148 5 ай бұрын
Hi Michael! I absolutely love your content. I really appreciate you helping us. Here's my response: If I were forced to choose, I would definitely say that online learning is a negative development in the world today. My personal belief is that when people take online classes, it reduces social interactions, which are just as important as learning the course materials. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. For example, individuals who never interact with others might develop social anxiety, or, in other cases, it can also lead to more severe problems like depression. I understand Wayne’s positive attitude towards the accessibility that online classes offer, but I believe he misses another critical point. Online learning means more screen time, which can cause different ailments such as headaches or poor posture. To illustrate, during the pandemic, many children developed diverse types of vision impairments from being glued to the screen all the time, and many of them couldn't learn essential concepts that would be applied in classes the following year at school. In light of the reasons mentioned, I strongly believe that on-campus classes are more beneficial than online classes.
@oscargonzalez2028
@oscargonzalez2028 10 ай бұрын
Hello, Michael. Could you please review my answer: Some people are concerned whether online classes are an excellent option for their children. Although I completely agree with Wayne’s claim that online education is advantageous in cases where a kid may have a disability or the transportation service is defficient, I have a few reservations. Namely, I believe that online education prevents kids from learning in a meaningful way. My first reason to think this is that when I was taking online classes during the pandemic I had to constantly remind my parents to not use the internet because the house’s internet connection was extremely deficient, so my brother and I really struggled to recieve a proper education service. I would also like to add that sometimes kids really need to use a physical space when learning new things. For instance, laboratory practices can not be taken from home, you need special equipment. Thus, this is why I strongly believe that online classes aren’t the best option when it comes to education.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
Avoid using "kid" in this sort of writing. Stick with "child" or "student." Don't use "namely" to introduce a supporting argument. Try "to be specific" instead. Don't use "my first reason to think this." Try "One reason I feel this way is..." Overall, though, I like your work. I think it would score 24 or 25 points. Nice work.
@magdalenaalvarez7549
@magdalenaalvarez7549 11 ай бұрын
Hi, Michael. This is my answer: Universities have started to let students take online classes. The impact in the students it is positive for many reasons. First of all, it makes educations more accessible for the students. On one hand they not only reduce the commute time but also costs are lower for them. Not all the students can afford to have a car to go to the main building and even if they take a bus the time involved will be considerable more than the time spent on an online class. Secondly, by taking an online class students can learn more. Time is very sensitive for the students. Some students need to work to support the cost of the university so by not expending money going to the university they can save more money.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 ай бұрын
I think this answer would score about 19 points. There are multiple grammar and language use errors in just about every sentence. That's a problem. Try something like "Grammarly" to identify the mistakes you make in your practice responses.
@rashagh3950
@rashagh3950 10 ай бұрын
Hi Mike. Thank you for your help. The topic of online classes has generated much discussion in recent years. Sarah and I are on the same page regarding the ineffectiveness of online classes. I wholeheartedly believe that online studying is less beneficial for students than the traditional classroom way. Students have a better focus during in-person classes since the conversation; and the direct interaction with the professor helps them to concentrate better. In addition, they can ask any question, and the professor will answer them directly. On the other hand, for online classes, most of the students do not interact immediately, and conversations take place through email. Therefore, many students can not comprehend the subject, and this may negatively affect their intellectual leanring. As a result, they may obtain low scores and decrease their opportunities to get a better job in the future.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
This is a pretty solid answer. I think it would score about 24 points. There are some slightly awkward expressions (like "the traditional classroom way" and you should not try to use semicolons (that part is all messed up) but overall I like your work.
@rashagh3950
@rashagh3950 10 ай бұрын
@@Toeflresources thank you
@user-HollowEnglish
@user-HollowEnglish 11 ай бұрын
I ended up writing a passage very similar to Wayne's because I had no time to read the students' words.10 minutes limit is ridiculous
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 ай бұрын
Yeah. Time management is a challenge.
@siavash6528
@siavash6528 10 ай бұрын
Hi michael, thanks for the video and also correcting my writing Education plays an integral part in every human’s life. While online education has been disrupting the education industry for past several years, I think it has some serious setbacks and cannot replace the official academic education. First, the teacher plays a minuscule part in the online education, as the students are attending the classes remotely, there is no direct connection between the student and the teacher so the students cannot get proper feedback on their work. Second, there are not supervisions on the behavior of the students, they could easily cheat in the exams and get high scores even if they have not learned anything. I agree with Sarah that it is way easier for students to build relationships and make friends in person, online education may even lead to future depression in humans as they do not learn the ability to interact with each other properly.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
Use "drawbacks" instead of "setbacks" when you mean to say "negative aspects." Spend some time studying how to use "the" properly (and when to not use it) as that seems to be a weak spot for you. Overall, I think this one would score about 22 or 23 points.
@AlirezaGhafouri
@AlirezaGhafouri 7 ай бұрын
Hi Michael, thank you for helping us. This is my response: Students’ education is one of the most challenging topics in today’s society. While many people oppose online classes, I want to underscore their profound impact on students’ education. One of the most important advantages of online classes is that they can provide flexibility for students in order to attend more classes, as Wayne mentioned earlier. In addition, they can help students to return to the contents of the classes and watch them several times, especially if they have problems with understanding materials. I want to add that online classes are really useful when some students suffer from illness because by attending classes online, they will not put their classmates at risk, and they will not miss the class since they can attend from their rooms. For instance, one year ago when coronavirus emerged, students could not attend classes, but online. In conclusion, online classes have numerous advantages and can play a key role in students’ education.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 7 ай бұрын
Avoid using the possessive form of plural nouns as that often looks awkward. I would say "the education of students" rather than "students' education". Otherwise, I like this response a lot. I think it would score 26 or 27 points.
@angelloera1342
@angelloera1342 10 ай бұрын
Thanks for the video, Michael. Here's my answer: As Wayne and Sarah stated, accessibility and learning are affected by online education. However, I would say that they impact in a different way compared to their opinions. The main impact that online learning has is accessibility, but accessibility to a wide variety of sources and knowledge. Through the Internet, students are not confined to the contents they might access from a book or from a lecturer. Sources from all over the world could be readily available through the learning platform used by the school, while students might also access further websites by themselves. Formats of those additional materials are also varied. Learners can watch short clips and even animations, which can be a great asset to understand complex topics on Math or Science courses. These innovations surely would add up to students’ overall learning.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
There are a few little errors like: "they impact in a different way" (should be "they impact people in a different way" or some other object) "but accessibility to a wide..." (I am not sure what this clause means) "could be readily available" (should be "are readily available") Overall, I think this one would score about 22 or 23 points.
@angelloera1342
@angelloera1342 10 ай бұрын
@@Toeflresources Great! Thanks for your feedback.
@levsiii
@levsiii 10 ай бұрын
Hi again❤ In my opinion, online classes help students with different lifestyles, which encouraged many people to pursue their dreams. For example, online learning can be done from home, a convenient learning environment for many of us who struggle to wake up and drive in the morning, especially in a bad weather. Additionally, many students are parents or part-time workers who do not have enough time to commit; online learning could be the perfect choice for those people. I totally agree with Wayne; this type of education is very important for people with disabilities, It also offers them the chance to communicate with other classmates through live online classes, which can improve their social skills. Finally, online classes might not be for everyone, but I am sure that they have made the learning process for many of us much easier.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 9 ай бұрын
There are some grammar and language use errors throughout your answer. Like: "which encouraged" (should be "which encourages") "in a bad weather" (should be "in bad weather") The comma before "it also" (should be a period) There are other mistakes, but I think you get the point! Overall, I think this one would score 23 or 24 points.
@levsiii
@levsiii 9 ай бұрын
@@Toeflresources Thank you so much! ❤️
@sophyzhang8608
@sophyzhang8608 11 ай бұрын
Hi, Teacher, here is my response. Thank you for your job. While I appreciate the ideas Wayne mentions, I agree with the points make by Sarah. I want to add that Schools are small societies, students go to school not only to accomplish studies,but also to learn how to build relationships, friendships with others and etc,. Moreover, As Sarah says that students need to learn things through personal engagements in realistic atmospheres, they can ask some questions at classes, and discuss with each other, which can help students understand the knowledges much well than just online listening to the teachers. Furthermore, studying on campus, students can take part in many communities’ activities and sports, which students can learn much more beyond the online courses.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 ай бұрын
I think this one would score about 18 points. There are multiple grammar and language use errors in every sentence. You really need to reduce your error rate.
@sabasoltani-su7of
@sabasoltani-su7of 11 ай бұрын
Hi, Michael . Thank you for your valuable information. This is my response. I firmly believe that online classes have caused solitude. I totally agree with Sarah's idea that online classes are not efficient, and I would like to add that participating in attending classes can help students to mitigate their sense of loneliness and stress. As a result, this will lead them to a more socially successful life and prevent them from being socially isolated. Moreover, through classes in person, students will acquire team-working, problem-solving, and decision-making skills that can be fundamentally beneficial for their professional success later in life, as these are among the sought-after skills by employers. Furthermore, when people are in classes, their learning efficiency and productivity will improve, making an outstanding contribution to a better learning process.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
I think this one would score about 20 or 21 points. There are errors throughout the essay like: "participating in attending" (should be just "attending") "as a result, this will lead them to" (should be "as a result, they will have" "are among the sought-after skills" (should be "are among the skills that are sought after by") There are more, but I think you get the point. Work on your grammar!
@raniatheholisticdentist4320
@raniatheholisticdentist4320 10 ай бұрын
Hey Michael! My exam is after 3 days! Pls help me out :D Here's my response hopefully I will get your reply before my exam! In my opinion, I strongly support the on-campus classes. As Sarah mentioned, we learn from personal relations just as much as we do from books and lectures. In addition, the personality and interaction of the professor with the students build our soft skills preparing us for the working field. Being in class with other students with different backgrounds, cultures, and opinions fosters our debating skills and enriches our experiences. We learn how to resolve conflicts as well as the beliefs and attitudes of other cultures. It’s a small world, and if we don’t have enough cultural awareness, acceptance, and soft skills, we won’t bloom in our careers. That’s why I truly believe that on-campus learning is better than online learning.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
Don't use "in my opinion" AND "I support." Just pick one, as using both is redundant. Note the pattern: "we learn JUST AS MUCH from personal relations AS WE DO FROM books and lectures." Your grammar is pretty good, except for the second sentence, which is mangled. I would have said something like: "In addition, we build our soft skills by interacting with our classmates and professors." Overall, I think this one would score about 23 points.
@DuaaHasan-zg9dj
@DuaaHasan-zg9dj 7 ай бұрын
Hi Micheal. This is my response. Thank you for your feedback in advance. While I really appreciate what Sarah said, I strongly share Wayne’s opinion. Online classes make learning more accessible and affordable. I’d add that they offer a precious chance to some students who cannot, due to certain conditions and obstacles, attend actual classes in person. Therefore, they have to put off their studies till they have the appropriate conditions for learning. For example, when I gave birth to my child, I had to postpone my study for two years till my child grew older and started going to the kindergarten. However, had the university implemented online learning, I could have managed to attend the lectures online and I would have pursued my studies and graduated without delay. Consequently, I think that online learning has many benefits that can help numerous students and open the gates in front of them to achieve their dreams and continue their studies regardless of the difficult conditions which can hinder them from attending the lectures on campus.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 7 ай бұрын
I think "I strongly share" is a little awkward. It isn't a big deal, but I would just say "I share." Drop the adverb. Use "until" rather than "till" in academic writing. Otherwise, this is really fantastic. I think it would score 28 or 29 points. Nice work!
@thecaptainindia9790
@thecaptainindia9790 9 ай бұрын
My response The topic of online classes has generated much discussion in recent years, especially after the Covid pandemic. My personal belief is that online classes are much more flexible in terms of their timings, so I prefer to take such classes. I must admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. I remember when I was in high school, I used to face difficulties while following the lectures. I felt that the teacher used to teach very fast, hence I reached out to my friend who suggested me to use the online lectures provided by the school's administration, which was specifically designed to address such issues. I was able to rewatch the lectures and repeat certain parts of it which really enhanced my understanding and improved my performance. I totally agree with Wayne's point regarding the accessibility of the online classes, I would add that adults who have the inspiration to learn new things can also use the lecture videos and learn from them. I firmly believe that age is not a limitation for education, and availibility of online courses just supports this idea.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 9 ай бұрын
This is a bit better than the other one you posted. I think it would score about 23 or 24 points overall. Consider running your work through something like "grammarly" to get an idea of the sorts of mistakes you make most frequently.
@poonamkundnani2393
@poonamkundnani2393 11 ай бұрын
hello Michael! please evaluate my response. This is certainly a topic that makes you think. From my perspective, physical classes have significantly more impact than online classes. I strongly share Sarah's concerns that the classroom provides students with an opportunity to engage, I would like to add here that in-person endowed students with integrity and wholeness of the lecture. Additionally, it grants students to participate in discussions after classes, which is indeed pivotal for deeper comprehension and retention. While Wayne has made a pertinent point about saving the resources such as time and cost, he has overlooked the major concern of building cognizance for the subject. Thus, I firmly believe universities should be more thorough when switching to online classes.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 ай бұрын
Don't waste your time with a memorized opening sentence. Just start by stating your opinion. Overall, I think this one would score about 24 points.
@Miami7Heat
@Miami7Heat 10 ай бұрын
Hi Michael, I hope you find time for feedback for my response. Many Thanks! ------------------------ The topic of online classes has gained significant interest, especially during the Covid-19 pandemic. While I appreciate Wayne’s opinion, I agree with Sarah in many points. In addition, I would like to add my opinion. I think the physical distance between people reduces the productivity of students significantly. I recall from my personal experience, during the Covid pandemic, that I was less talking out loud. I think talking, especially together with other people, increases the flow of ideas dramatically. I missed the time when we were sitting together discussing a problem and brainstorm. It released a “start-up mentality”. Every one of us wanted to solve the problem and ideas were flowing like a river (114 words).
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
"gained significant interest" sounds a bit clunky. I would say "has attracted significant attention". Try using "I agree with many points raised by Sarah." You should try using some coordinating conjunctions. The e-rater looks for those. Overall, I think this one would score about 21 points. Maybe 22!
@Oo_Ghen
@Oo_Ghen 10 ай бұрын
Hi, thank you so much for the lesson. Here's my response... With the current rate of digitalization in the world, it is understandable that many universities are likely to offer virtual classes. Although I do acknowledge the important highlights made by my colleague Wayne, I strongly feel that online classes can actually degrade our learning abilities, like Sarah had mentioned, it can cause people to learn less. Learning by doing is one of the effective ways to help our brain memorize as well as grasps the concept. In a physical learning space, it is far more inclusive due to the availability of the resource materials and the fact that the students and teachers can interact with each other easily. Online classes can certainly become a problem especially in the fields where practical sessions are needed, for example a student learning horticulture through virtually might not have adequate materials or if procedures were done incorrectly, there's a higher chance of getting it overlooked by the teachers
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 9 ай бұрын
There are a lot of grammar and language use errors here. I can't really fix them all in a comment, so I suggest you try something like "Grammarly" to get a clearer picture of the mistakes you are making. I think this one would score about 19 points, but I am sure you can do better.
@MahsaOmri
@MahsaOmri 10 ай бұрын
Hello, Michael. Thanks for these helpful videos. Here's my response: In my opinion, while online classes can be beneficial for some individuals, they are generally less fruitful than traditional classrooms. I strongly agree with Sarah, who claims that online classes will make learning less effective than before. In online classes, students do not have the opportunity to engage in lively discussions with their peers and instructors, so they have to passively listen to their professors teaching the material, which makes the learning process boring. This also prevents students from participate fully in their learning process and decreases motivation, casuing students to perform poorly in their studies and get low grades. Furthermore, during online classrooms it is difficult for students to ask questions and seek clarification since the whole process is unconvenient, making the learning shallow and unsuccessful.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
I really like it. I think this one would score about 27 or 28 points.
@thematrix1308
@thematrix1308 11 ай бұрын
Hi Michael! this is my response. While many believe that online education is better because it is easier to get access for those who can not afford the college tuition, I believe physical classes are still superior to non-physical classes.This is because students can engage deeply into their lessons when they are learning with their friends and teachers in one room. You see, we have more freedom in classes in terms of discussing with the professor. For instance, we can ask as many questions as we want till we get the full understanding and insight of the lesson. Contrary to that, in online classes we are not able to do so. We can not grasp the whole concept of the lesson for we do not access to a real life teacher to discuss or even debate with about our misunderstandings. As a result, Though online education might have its own advantages, the benefits of in person classes overweight the negatives in several ways. (141 words)
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 ай бұрын
I think this one would score about 23 points. Your ideas are strong, but there are grammar and language use errors throughout, like "overweight" (should be "outweigh") and "contrary to that" (should be "in contrast").
@lalala4404
@lalala4404 10 ай бұрын
@@Toeflresources Hi Michael! The question is about 'the impact of online courses' and this article is mainly about 'the physical classes are better than online classes'. Does this kind of response meet the requirements of the question? Will it affect the score? Appreciate for your help.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
@@lalala4404 That is a good point. My first impression is that it was appropriate, but it could be problematic.
@degiarifiyantoro3126
@degiarifiyantoro3126 11 ай бұрын
Hi Michael! Thanks your video again! I hope you would give some feedback on my response. While Sarah's points are undeniably noticeable, Wayne's statements about flexibility of online classes break the limitation of who can access the education. Before the era of online learning, students need to stick to their commitment to attend the class physically, no matter what kind of business they must do out there. As a result, this limitation prevents people who have more important business than studying such like workers, mothers, businessmen, etc. Online classes' development transforms this limitation into freedom for anyone who want to take education. For instance, I remembered when i was taking my bachelor degree as a worker, I had to leave my office early to attend my class on time even though my tasks had not done yet. Rarely had I passed my days of taking my bachelor degree without being scolded by my boss. That time would be easier if online classes were generally implemented.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 ай бұрын
There are a lot of grammar and language use errors in your answer, so I think it would score just about 17 or 18 points. I recommend using something like "Grammarly" to get a clearer picture of your error rate.
@degiarifiyantoro3126
@degiarifiyantoro3126 11 ай бұрын
@@Toeflresources i will do it, thank you so much
@jaahnavijaanu8797
@jaahnavijaanu8797 10 ай бұрын
Hi Michael, could you please take a look at my answer - While I do appreciate Sarah's opinion about the lack of energy and engagement in online classes, I don't agree with that point. Online classes nowadays have a ton of tools to encourage engagement between students and in fact, many students find it more comfortable than a class setting to open up to their fellow students when they're not visible to them and only have a mic to express their opinions. Also, Online classes have made it possible for students to learn from the comfort of their home, when they find time and at their own pace. The most important aspect according to me is the chance to revisit a lecture and understand something they missed during the class, which was not possible in a physical class setting. For intance, students tend to have a lot of other commitments apart from classes and sometimes miss their classes or fail to focus well. The only way for them to understand the missed concepts would be to speak to others or gather the info from other resources. So, I think in this case, online classes definitely help people learn better.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
I like this one, and think it would score about 25 points. Watch out for sloppy capitalization errors like "Online" and try to avoid starting sentences with coordinating conjunctions like "so."
@MohammedAqar
@MohammedAqar 11 ай бұрын
Please can you score my response:❤❤ Online classes and their marked impact on students have generated much discussion in recent years. In my opinion, this sort of teaching makes more students lazy to go to their schools since they do not spend any effort to go their. As many students nowadays prefer to study most of their courses online with a strong demand, I am convinced that this education trend has such a negative effect to students. For example, my college makes some courses online which makes me more lazy to go to it; thus, a big negative impact is put on me due to these sorts of classes. I totally agree with Sarah's perspective concerning the lack of power and engagement in online classes, and I would like to add that this point of view has indeed been endorsed and supported by many universities and students worldwide. To sum up, online classes hold very negative reprecussions because it makes numerous students lazy or careless to go to their classes and participate cooperatively with others.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 ай бұрын
I think this one would score about 20 points. There are just too many grammar and language use issues. I mean stuff like "makes more students lazy to go" and "with a strong demand."
@MohammedAqar
@MohammedAqar 10 ай бұрын
So I got this score because of grammar and language use only?
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
For the most part.
@user-vd8rr8zf4t
@user-vd8rr8zf4t 9 ай бұрын
Hi, Michael. This is my answer: In my perspective, online classes provide convenience for students’ studies. I strongly agree with Wayne’s idea that online classes help reduce commuting time and costs and give students more flexibility in their schedules. I’d add that online classes also enable students to revise after classes. To be more specific, it gives students good opportunities to gain a deeper understanding of the subject matter by watching recordings. whenever they need information, the only thing they need to do is to enter the keywords in the search engine, and the information will appear within seconds. While Sarah raised the relevant point that online classes cause people to learn less than before, since they cannot learn from personal connections any more ,she overlooks the fact students can communicate with each other,which is not only time-saving but also not limited by geographic locations and other factors. overall, then, I would say that online classes undeniably have a positive impact on students’ study.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 9 ай бұрын
Your arguments are solid, but there are a few language use errors like: "it gives students" (should be "they give students") "the subject matter" (should be "academic subjects") the period between "recordings" and "whenever" There are other errors, but I think you get the point. Focus on reducing your error rate as much as possible. Overall, I think this one would score 22 or 23 points but I am certain you can do better.
@bejei
@bejei 7 ай бұрын
While I appreciate Sarah’s opinion that online classes make learning less than before, I think that is not entirely true. Many people can learn a lot from online classes because they can focus more than inside classrooms; therefore, they can educate more. Also, I definitely agree with Wayne’s points that online classes can reduce commuting costs and time. I think it is very important to take online courses because we have to reduce pollution in the environment. If we do not use transportation to go to the universities, we will reduce emissions from cars or buses. As a result, the air will be cleaner than before. Additionally, online courses will lead to less traffic on the streets. So, I encourage all universities to advise their students to take online courses for all the advantages that I mentioned before.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 7 ай бұрын
I think this one would score about 22 points. A few things are worth mentioning here. They are: -change "make learning less than before" to something like "cause people to learn less than before" -I don't know what your second sentence means. I just can't figure it out. -Don't start sentences with "so." Use something like "as a result."
@khalebakoussouleloyakpa8580
@khalebakoussouleloyakpa8580 11 ай бұрын
Could you provide us with the a answer using your template that you suggested ?
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 ай бұрын
Not really. You'll have to just use the sample in the video. :)
@user-st1sq6fd9c
@user-st1sq6fd9c 8 ай бұрын
Hi Michael, Please evaluate the reponse. Thank you The accessibility to learning has sky rocketed with introduction of online classes, especially post COVID 19. While I agree with what Wayne says, I feel he has missed an important point. The social intelligence quotient has dropped down drastically with students taking only online classes. As mentioned by Sarah, the spirit to learn and have a healthy competition is somewhere lost amongst the students. This in turn leads to a lower confidence level in them in person. This is crucial since at some point in their lives, there is going to be a point where they have to interact with the person in front of them and not just through a screen. Thus, I feel that online classes are leading to individuals with low self confidence due to lack of human interactions in person.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 8 ай бұрын
I think this one would score about 25 points. Your grammar is great, but there are a few awkward and unidiomatic sentences like "dropped down drastically" and "the spirit to learn" and "somewhere lost amongst the students." Try to resist the urge to write fancy sentences. You should keep everything clear and concise!
@mehdiashayeri1533
@mehdiashayeri1533 11 ай бұрын
In my opinion, the drawbacks of online classes outweigh the benefits, which aligns with Sarah's idea. In this regard, I want to add that in online classes, students' activities cannot be monitored by educators, and they are more likley to be distracted by using their electronic devices during their classes. As a result, they may not pay attention to their teachers, leading them not to absorb and grasp their educational concepts and information.Some people, including Wayne, mention that online classes can eliminate the need for people to commute, which can help them save a lot of time. However, they overlook the fact that in physical classes, students can have face-to-face communication with educators , helping them to better interacting with their educators and even classmates about their educational subjects, something beneficial for their learning process because they can utilize others' ideas and suggestions.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 ай бұрын
I think this one would score about 22 or 23 points.
@asurvivor3846
@asurvivor3846 10 ай бұрын
To begin with, I think the most significant effect of online classes on education is the teaching experience quality, the interactions between a student and an instructor differs when it's ran online or via a connecting server on website, it's inferior and less interactive, therefore, students will not get a very good tuition throughout their online academic journey. Moreover, students in online classes focuses lesser than in a traditional classroom, because of the distractions in their houses, as well as the feeling of not being subject to judge by the teacher if the student is not paying attention, So I agree with sarah's opinion. but despite those drawbacks, we cannot allege the online education has no benefits at all, as wayne has mentioned, online classes would be very helpful for incapacitated students or individuals who cannot afford education fees.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
I think this one would score about 19 points. There are just too many grammar and language use errors for you to score much higher than that. Consider using something like "Grammarly" to highlight the mistakes you make most frequently.
@asurvivor3846
@asurvivor3846 10 ай бұрын
@@Toeflresources ok thanks
@MrezaDaemi
@MrezaDaemi 11 ай бұрын
Hi there, This is my sample As technology becomes more advanced, it has a great impact on education one of which is the emergence of online classes. Personally, I think that its advantages outweigh its disadvantages for 2 reasons. Firstly, access to education will no longer depend on the one’s location. That is, people now can access high-quality education in every corner of the world regardless of their time zones and locations, and high-quality pedagogical resources are not confined to some people in certain areas like before. Moreover, the cost of education is now dropped drastically because all a teacher need is fast Internet and a computer, and there is no need for huge class and expensive air condition system or lighting system in each class, and we do not need huge building, so the final cost for students will become less expensive.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 ай бұрын
Your answer is okay, but there are grammar and language use errors throughout. I mean stuff like: "it has a great impact on education one of which is" (should be "it has a great impact on education. One impact is..." "for 2 reasons" (better is "for two reasons") "is now dropped" (should be "has dropped") There are others, but I think you get the point. I think this one would score about 22 points!
@nafismomeni8192
@nafismomeni8192 10 ай бұрын
Hi Micheal! thanks for your great contents. here is my response: I believe that online classes lack the efficiency and productivity of in-person courses. While online education offers us many benefits, such as accessibility for a broader range of people, in my opinion, the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. Comparing my experience of online courses and on-campus education, when I am in an academic environment by seeing my peers trying hard, I get more motivated to do my best; also, I can get help in my studies from other students, which help me make more connection. Additionally, there are many facilities and equipment that are not available for students in online classes, for example, libraries, laboratories, and gyms. Moreover, I think college life is not just about studying but engaging in other activities such as entertainment and the opportunity to learn about culture and art, which are not possible in online education; therefore, a physical campus adds valuable dimensions to learning. Overall, I believe in-person academic experience is essential in students’ lives and cannot be replaced by other methods.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
Don't use "comparing xxxx and yyyy" at the beginning of a sentence like you did here. Try Just getting to the point: "When I am in xxx, I yyy. In comparison, when I am..." Do you see what I mean? I think this one would score about 24 points.
@kinnarinakrani2570
@kinnarinakrani2570 10 ай бұрын
Hi, Michael. This is my answer: In my opinion, I would prefer attending online classes to traditional classes. As Wayne wrote, online classes are more accessible and flexible for the students who live afar from the university. Also, it gives same amount of the knowledge as the traditional classes. Moreover, online studies are helpful for the students who are working and studing both together. Sometimes their work places are far from the university or their working hours schedule is difficult to adjust for the student. Online classes can help if students are having evening or night classes in the university. Student who live outside of the campus and have no vehicle can face difficulty to reach home. Drawing from my own exeperience, when I was in college I was having evening classes 7:00 pm to 10:00pm. There is no shuttle services available after 9:00pm. But out faculty understood the problem and converted classes to the online formate. So, every student can have benefit of learning from that class. Hence, for these reason I believe that online classes are far more better than the traditional classes.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
Don't use "In my opinion, I would prefer." Just use "I would prefer" or "I prefer." Don't use "live afar from." Just use "live far from." I don't like "drawing from my own experience" at the beginning of a sentence. It looks weird. :) Stop starting sentences with coordinating conjunctions. I think this one would score about 23 or 24 points. Nice work.
@helyasehat5501
@helyasehat5501 11 ай бұрын
Hi, Michael. Thank you for your videos and scoring my response. This is my answer: I am strongly in favor of Wayne's opinion that online classes made education easier and more affordable, due to the fact that the commuting costs and time will vanish. Additionally, I would like to add that online classes enable students to explore other talents rather than just studying by having more spare time, and as a result, their creativity will flourish. Sara raised a valid point by bringing up the fact that the engagement in online classes is lower than in-person ones, but she fails to mention the fact that having to pay huge costs of commuting, tuition and time would also distract students from learning properly, and might even cause them to get disappointed from continuing their studies. In a nutshell, I believe that online classes are effective in many ways including reducing the costs of time, commuting, and tuition, and also providing students with more free time to encourage their creativity.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
I think this one would score about 20 points. There are grammar and language use errors throughout, like: "made education easier" (should be "have made education easier) "by having more spare time" (should be something like "by giving them more spare time") There are more errors, but I think you get the point. Really try to focus on learn proper verb tenses as you continue to study.
@Mahdi_Rezaie_
@Mahdi_Rezaie_ 8 ай бұрын
Here is my response ; It can be a tough topic but, I think the biggest effect of online classes is sever depression. Sine majority of students will stay at home for longer period of time and constantly looking at the screen is going to damage their mental health. As a result learners wouldn’t go out or are reluctant to spend time their friends for fun. I support Sarah because she mentioned the relevant idea that students will make less communication in online classes which I think in long run will engender plenty of negative impact in diverse area. In addition online classes are not much effective as traditional classes based on the experience in recent years we can see that most of students cheated on their assignments while there were gaven in online portals.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 8 ай бұрын
There are a lot of grammar and language use errors here. Punctuation errors too. I think this one would score about 18 points. You need to reduce your error rate.
@aat_k9830
@aat_k9830 9 ай бұрын
The most significant negative impact of online classes in my opinion is the lack of engagement and honesty. Students often turn their camera off during online classes which does not allow the supervisor to understand them completely. Interaction without seeing someone’s face hinders the growth of the relationship between the student and teacher. Some students take undue advantage of online classes by cheating during tests or coming up with superficial excuses to skip classes. Moreover students who do not have access to the internet or smartphones in some of the rural areas of India face challenges with this system of learning. More often than not, underprivileged families cannot afford laptops or phones. These children end up feeling isolated. In my opinion, traditional classroom learning is the most effective way to encourage a positive academic environment. Thank you for your dedication to fostering academic excellence.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 8 ай бұрын
This is a fantastic response. I think it would score 28 points. Just be sure to throw in a few more coordinating conjunctions next time.
@aat_k9830
@aat_k9830 8 ай бұрын
Thank you for your support @@Toeflresources
@mehmetemin7321
@mehmetemin7321 9 ай бұрын
Hi Michael. I'm Pelin , this is my husband account. My response : I graduated veterinary faculty almost twenty years ago. I remember we attended all lessons everyday , because we had to attend %80 lessons and % 90 laboratory practices. Six years later we learnt how to cure some kind of animals. But in 2020 covid-19 pandemic started in the world. Schools and universities started online classes, even medical schools too. In my opinion, a physician cannot be trained without practice . Despite this all medical schools tried to teach their classes online over one year. It should not be this way. At that time, doctors studying at the university were inadequately trained. This will cause problems in the future. I definitely agree that taking classes online is easy but not effective.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 9 ай бұрын
There are too many weaknesses with grammar for you to score much more than 20 or 21 points. Try using a service like "Grammarly" to get specific feedback on that aspect of your writing.
@alanNankam
@alanNankam 4 ай бұрын
Hi Michael, please is there still the independent writing task ?
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 4 ай бұрын
Nope. It was removed from the test.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 4 ай бұрын
Nope. It was removed from the test.
@keivanipchi2940
@keivanipchi2940 8 ай бұрын
Hello Micheal. While there are many merits to learning online, I am convinced that the biggest negative impact on students is that it increases the likelihood of them cheating during exams. When sessions are hosted on campus, students have to attend classes in person, complete the assignments, and collaborate on projects. Consequently, they may read more books to help them gain more knowledge, or ask the teaching assistants for extra help, which all would contribute to them learning more and thus performing better on exams. However, people tend to be lazier when learning online, and they don’t put as much effort into it. Furthermore, online exams tend to be shorter in time for the sole purpose of preventing students from cheating, which makes it only more difficult. Nevertheless, students feel compelled to cheat to achieve high grades, and that is a never-ending cycle. How is my score?
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 8 ай бұрын
This one is really strong. I think it would score about 28 points. Just try to avoid repeating words too often.
@pattraporn101991
@pattraporn101991 10 ай бұрын
Hello Michael, would you mind to grade my writing as well, please? It is my first one so far. Thank you so much. ^^ While I appreciate the points made by Sarah, I believe that online classes have a significant impact on students' life routines. Nowadays, education is more accessible for all ages so everyone can study what they want to study. Thus, I really agree with Wayne's idea and I would add more about adults who already have families and children. Online classes will allow them to study whenever and wherever they are available, in this case they can have a better life balance and will be able to spend more time with their families. Overall, I am certain that online classes will benefit a lot of people who have busy schedules.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
This is pretty good, but probably too short. It is one of the shortest responses posted in the comments here. I recommend aiming for about 20 words more than this. Also note that you should not use "in this case" like you did. Use "so" as a coordinating conjunction instead. I think this one would score about 21 points. Maybe 22.
@sandraraffoul4328
@sandraraffoul4328 10 ай бұрын
Hi Micheal can you rate my answer: The topic of online classes has generated much discussion in recent years My personal belief is that online classes have negative impact on students because it reduces the cooperation and the social interaction with the professor.For instance, when the corona pandemic prevailed in my country, we started taking the classes online, it was such a bad experience because i got bored and could not concentrate well with the professor . I understand wayne’s concern over the flexibility of the student’s schedule, but i think he misses a critical point. Students can time themselves to attend the classes in advance.Moreover, friendships that students make in the campus is priceless, they can ask each others about the ideas they do not understand in addition for having good times in campus, which is why i believe it is crucial to the student to attend classes in person.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
End every sentence with a period! Don't hit the enter key at the end of each "part" of your answer. Just write a single paragraph. Capitalize the pronoun "I." I think this one would score 22 or 23 points, but I am sure you can do better.
@abdulrahimhani1370
@abdulrahimhani1370 11 ай бұрын
Hello Michell, I hope you are doing well. Here is my response Well, in my opinion, online classes are extremely beneficial and have many advantages. The ability to learn from home will solve the traffic jam issue in major cities. Moreover, remote classes save a lot of time, since students do not have to go to universities, they will not waste time to attend classes. Therefore I agree with Wayne's perspective, and I would like to add that the lower cost of education will result in more people having college degrees. This will significantly benefit the society and will give the opportunity to people with limited budgets to be able to get higher education, which will eventually lead them to better careers.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 ай бұрын
This one would probably score about 22 or 23 points. There are minor errors like: "benefit the society" (should be "benefit society") and "since students" (should be "and since students"). Focus on eliminating those sorts of errors and on beefing up your word count a little.
@abdulrahimhani1370
@abdulrahimhani1370 11 ай бұрын
appreciate your response! @@Toeflresources
@Aydin1095
@Aydin1095 10 ай бұрын
Hi Michael, I just have question, I keep getting 4 from AI and don’t know how to fix it and I know it’s not for the grammar cause I used Grammarly for bunch of them while I was writing and have tried many ways from comparing two students’ opinion to use only one. Can you give me an advise about how to raise it to 5?
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
Honestly, without seeing your work I don't know what you are doing right and what you are doing wrong. If your grammar really is flawless, the main thing you could focus on is adding more complexity. That means using conjunctions. Check this out: www.toeflresources.com/blog/more-toefl-e-rater-fun-conjunctions/
@Aydin1095
@Aydin1095 10 ай бұрын
@@Toeflresources I tried to write my answer similar to those that I have written for AI for this question This indeed is a thought-provoking topic, but I’m of the opinion that online classes have been mostly detrimental. I strongly agree with Sarah’s idea that the environment that you are learning in affects your level of education and also it is incredibly easier to communicate with other people while you are in physical classes. I’d add that traditional learning would also help you consult the issue that you have in a specific matter to a peer who you know is great at it in break times between classes. While Wayne raised the relevant point that online classes have made education more accessible, especially for those with disabilities, he didn’t mention that this may lead to loneliness and depression. In fact, going to school is a good excuse for them to go out there and socialize. This is one of the ways that I have tried, I think the problem with this one is that there is almost no self opinion, right?
@Aydin1095
@Aydin1095 10 ай бұрын
I’d be grateful if you give a feedback🙏
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
This is really solid. I don't think the AI is penalizing you for a lack of opinion, as it never judges the actual ideas in your work. Did this one get a 4? You could probably increase that score by writing a longer response and adding more coordinating conjunctions.
@Aydin1095
@Aydin1095 10 ай бұрын
@@Toeflresources Is it one of the samples that ETS gave? If it is, please tell me which phone so I can try this exact answer to that question and inform you about it, My other answers were kind of like this, but they usually got a 4 from the AI.
@guguecheng4892
@guguecheng4892 11 ай бұрын
Hello Michael Sir. Please check my answer sir. From my point of view, I prefer to learn on campus. I am not that just into in studying subjects alone which makes me so boring. When I study on campus, I have surrounded with people who also trying hard for their future which make motivate me to study harder. If not, I will left behind them and I might probably get regret about not being try hard. Those thoughts push me in the positive way to study harder. I also love to do activities which boost up my energy in studying with classmate. In contrast, none of them from above I can't do when I study through online. All I have to do is helping the household chores. Most of my time ends up by watching movies and I don't really study much. Sometimes I feel so lonely and get depression because I rarely go outside of my house.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 ай бұрын
Don't use "from my point of view" AND "I prefer." Just use "I prefer to learn on campus" as you ropening line. Say that things make you "feel bored." Don't say that things "make me boring." There are other errors in your work, but I think you get the point. I think this one would score about 20 points.
@user-ub6mo8oz3g
@user-ub6mo8oz3g 10 ай бұрын
Hi Michael! This is my response. I disagree with Claire because I believe that limited urban space should be used to create an area where people can spend their time in nature without leaving the city. Nowadays, most jobs are sedentary, and sitting for long periods is detrimental to our physical and mental health. A park is where we can take a break from our daily routines and escape from pressure. At the same time, we can relax our eyes after spending a long day in front of a computer and use the park to exercise. Claire raised the relevant point that we should use available areas for other uses, and build parks on rooftops, but she didn't mention that the current buildings do not have rooftops with enough space to construct parks. Overall, I'd say that we should use the available land to build green spaces.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
Nice work. I think this one would score about 26 or 27 points. There are just a few tiny issues that might hold you back.
@user-ub6mo8oz3g
@user-ub6mo8oz3g 10 ай бұрын
Thank you for checking my essay!@@Toeflresources
@user-ub6mo8oz3g
@user-ub6mo8oz3g 10 ай бұрын
And by the way, how can I improve my essay?@@Toeflresources
@toniaduru9594
@toniaduru9594 10 ай бұрын
Hello Micheal found below is my response. This is an intriguing topic. I strongly agree with Sarah’s view. In fact, it is vital for students to attend classes in person because it will help improve their learning experience. For instance, Sarah mentioned that it will help students to collaborate. I experienced this when I was in college, we attended classes in person, so I was able to network and learned to work with other students. I gained the confidence of working with different people and my communication skills improved. Wayne mentioned an important point, however he did not consider the overall impact of learning online. Which is student development skills that will help them when they graduate from college , example of those skills include interpersonal development and communication.
@toniaduru9594
@toniaduru9594 10 ай бұрын
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@madhoorikumari8321
@madhoorikumari8321 11 ай бұрын
Please review this response In my opinion, virtual classes are indeed more impactful than physical classes. I strongly share Wayne's concerns about online classes being more accessible and flexible. I would like to elaborate on accessibility for international students who can also enrol on online classes and pursue higher education. If online classes had not been prevalent these days, many students would have given up on their dreams considering the surge in inflation. While Sarah has made a relevant point here about engaging class, she has missed that online discussion groups are now prevailing because of their effectiveness. In conclusion, I believe online classes have taken precedence over.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 ай бұрын
Your use of "share Wayne's concerns" is awkward because you should use that phrase before something that is bad. As in: "I share your concerns about global warming." See what I mean? Don't use that before something that is good. There are other little language use errors throughout your answer, like "enrol on" (should be "enroll in") and "engaging class" (should be "engaging classes"). I think this one would score about 21 points.
@nashi763
@nashi763 10 ай бұрын
Hello, Michael, please check my writing response! My personal belief is that online lessons usually has more disadvantages than benefits and may influence students negatively. I understand Wayne’s point about the accessibility of online education, but I think that he doesn’t clearly understand negative aspects of it. The reason why I think in this way is that many students suffer from lack of organizational and time management skills. Online classes transform this problem into more serious and unsolvable thing each time. In my opinion, offline classes tend to encourage students to be on time, to look after their appearance and, of course, to do their homework and other educational tasks. Moreover, offline lessons help students to build up their communication skills and to become more confident in social interactions. For these reasons I am strongly convinced that offline type of educational process has much more beneficial things for students and other people who are interested in studying and improving their knowledge.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
Watch out for subject-verb agreement errors like "online lessons has." Those will really hurt your score. And watch out for article errors like "understand negative aspects of it." That should be something like "understand the negative aspects of them." Overall, I think your work would score about 21 points.
@alisinahussaini2123
@alisinahussaini2123 11 ай бұрын
Hello Michael, here is my response, kindly size it up. While I like the ideas noted by Wayne and Sarah, I feel that the only way to truly make money and to avoid distraction is to take online classes since by taking online classes, not only students are comfort at studying but also teachers are convenient at teaching. Moreover, if universities begin online teaching, students can work beside of their college's or university's lessons, so they will gain work experience, and in addition to that they will make money which it can be lucrative for student's futures. Therefore, I highly recommend universities and colleges to set on their online teaching process.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 ай бұрын
I am a bit nervous about this one. Your grammar is good, but there just isn't much content here. How many words did you write in total? Not only is it short, but the final sentence just repeats your main idea. That's dangerous.
@alisinahussaini2123
@alisinahussaini2123 10 ай бұрын
I agree with you, actually with this kind of writing, how much score can I get?
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
I dunno. Maybe 20 points? @@alisinahussaini2123
@sumayas.a9906
@sumayas.a9906 11 ай бұрын
Hi Michael, thanks for your valuable information. While there are certainly some advantages of online classes, I think the biggest impact of these classes is that the students become less socialized, as students during virtual classes don’t have the chance to communicate with their peers and get to know them. In contrast, during physical learning, students could interact with each other and make friends. Consequently, students would work or study together during assignments or preparing for exams which in turn, would improve their grades and help them retain as much information as possible. Overall, I’d say that although taking online classes could save student time and money, it wouldn’t offer them the best learning experience.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
This is a fairly good answer. Just consider whether using "would" and "could" is necessary all through the answer. You are just describing how the world works, and not talking about some conditional situation.
@Mahboba-zi7be
@Mahboba-zi7be 11 ай бұрын
Hi! I personally believe that online classes have negative effects on students. There are some students who do not pay attention to their lessons while studying in online classes. Because teachers are far away from them; moreover, on classes which are held personal, students compete with one another, and they have to attain classes everyday. Therefore, online classes are not effective. On the other hand, students who study personal are more interested to try hard. Many students do not participate in online classes everyday, and they make excuses for their absence.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 ай бұрын
Be careful when you start sentences with "because." In this cause you should have just continued the earlier sentence: "....because teachers are far away from them." Just avoid using semicolons. In this case you should have just started a new sentence: "Moreover, in classes which are held in person..." Overall, I think this one would score about 19 or 20 points.
@user-dw5sk4yw7s
@user-dw5sk4yw7s 11 ай бұрын
I'm knew student
@senjin8244
@senjin8244 11 ай бұрын
"new" perhaps?
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