thank you to my FBI agent who saw me struggling on how to do my college essays

This is the BEST advice ever! Everyone always repeats the things we know “be specific” “re-read” like okay I know that, but can YOU be specific? Lmao

Me after watching this video: *DELETES MY WHOLE ESSAY*

POV: you’ve had 20 panic attacks over not learning how to write an essay cause of miss rona

me, a dad who wrote his essay 28 years ago: fml i need to rewrite my metaphors

Me, realizing that 3 years of honors/AP English classes have taught me almost nothing about how to write a college essay: >:( But hey at least I know how to emulate the over descriptive writing style of Charles Dickens and how to write in iambic pentameter 😔

Summary: - elaborate on your metaphors / don’t add a meaningless metaphor just for the sake of adding a metaphor + make sure it’s not cliché - don’t make direct statements. show, don’t tell. - explain what caused a change if you choose to follow that narrative / don’t just say “I changed...” explain how you went from point A to point B. explain the process - don’t make the focus not on you! the essay should be about YOU, not other people. - don’t use descriptions and adverbs excessively. be descriptive about your background/something specific to you, not something meaningless - don’t repeat the same idea over and over. every sentence should bring something new to your essay and be essential. don’t repeat the last sentence of the previous paragraph as a transition.

Wow . I knew what I was lacking in my essay but I didn’t know how to approach it. This helped so much!! SHOUTOUT TO MY RISING SENIORS

i think verbs are another good thing to keep in mind. like, you were talking about using too many adverbs, and you can easily shorten your sentences by choosing powerful verbs. no more “said earnestly,” make it “assert.” no more “rudely made fun of,” make it “mocked.”

I'm sorry that my writing skills are so elementary. I've only written 2 essays each school year and was not given ANY constructive criticism. Thank you to all my english teachers

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My mistake is being a perfectionist. It took me three months to brainstorm and the writing is taking forever! I may, if not satisfied, send you my essay before I submit on Nov. 1. :)

“Show, don’t tell.” 👌🏼

Another tip that seems obvious but is often overlooked is portraying yourself in a good light- focus on aspects or stories that do so. If you do something wrong, keep the word count about that topic short and focus on how you became a better person. ALSO PLEASE DO NOT WRITE ABOUT CORONA VIRUS, COLLEGE ADMISSIONS PEOPLE (HOPEFULLY) KNOW WHAT IT'S LIKE TO BE IN QUARANTINE. YOU DON'T NEED TO WRITE A BORING ESSAY ABOUT NOT BEING ABLE TO GO ON SUMMER HOLIDAY!

I just graduated from college so this is very relevant

I'm so tired of generic tips like knowing your instructions and shit like have a strong introduction. This is the only one that gave some helpful advice. Thank 🙇

me, a rising sophomore, taking notes👁👄👁

"I don't want to know about your dry sourdough bread" I just started laughing I'm a very lost rising senior in South Korea and I just wanted to let you know how much your videos make me happyyyy I will take all of these into account! Thank you SO MUCH

As I listened to this, I could clearly see a narrative form in my head. It's like the fog in my brain regarding what stuff to write about just dissipated. Thanks a lot!

this was like the first actually helpful essay video i’ve watched 🥺🥺 thanks girl!

Watching this after submitting my essay like 👁👄👁

honestly one of the best ''essay mistakes'' videos ever!!

Can u make a video on how to do short answer essays (50-300 words)? Because I love all these tips but some of them cant work in the word limit, like elaborating on metaphors or giving lots of details

This boosted my confidence in writing while also articulating why some things don't work, making me feel prepared

I think they shifted their pov to the outside perspective because in high school they don't teach how to write in first person or for college application at all, maybe once or twice every school year for a paragraph long piece. They only teach how to argue, be objective or analyze piece of paper. Especially AP Eng/Comp I took during junior year.

LADY. this is actually one of the most CONCISE and USEFUL videos i have ever watched. THANK. YOU.

Tellling us what should we avoid instead of the "be yourself" phrase, thank you so much this really helps alot!! For your next video your perspective about teachers recommendations

applying to schools next week but now panicking at 1 AM because I need to change my entire essay

I am a college sophomore. Why am I so intrigued...

Wow this advice is so helpful! Most of the time my counselors r just like: “be authentic” or “show don’t tell” and those tend to lead to a lot of the mistakes you were talking about. Thanks so much! This was super helpful!

i’m a rising senior and i’m applying to harvard! please pray i get in i’m trying to watch as much as i can

The catalyst tip was so so helpful!! I’ve been struggling with that in between portion for a while, and you gave such a clear explanation so tyyyy

every point you mentioned made me reflect on my essay and made me realize that all of what you are saying is so true 😭😭 thanks so much this advice is really helpful 🙏🙏

I'm a very confused rising senior and this video helped me so much. Thank you for giving specific tips and helping so many others

Omg Im applying this fall and I wrote literally 2-3 essays throughout these past 3 years of high school and never got any help just grades. I honestly don’t know what to do.

omg this vid popped up in my recommended and i immediately clicked once i saw how recent it was. thank you. this honestly has helped me so much and i’m so happy to have found ur channel! i’m gonna binge on all of ur college content!

This is so helpful, I’m so glad I found your channel! I’m a rising senior and I’m feeling very stressed and overwhelmed because I am behind in this process. You helped relieve a lot of my anxiety and helped me realize I can do this. Thank you so much, and I hope you have a great rest of your week! ❤️❤️❤️❤️

omg im applying to college this fall and found your videos, i LOVE ur channel!!! ur definitely one of the funniest and most helpful college youtubers, please make more videos/vlogs hehe

HELLO I watched this yesterday but I am back to tell you that your metaphor advice was so helpful and crucial in my essay,,, I had a metaphor idea but because of this video I made sure to integrate into my whole essay instead of just mentioning it in the beginning and end and omg it did so much to make my essay better 🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺💖 thank you so much!!!!! I am visiting UPenn today so I can finally see what the hype is about !!

currently using this advice to write my essay 4 days before the deadline

thank you, thank you, thank you! being the oldest child in my family and going into junior year, this is super helpful advice for when i start my essays!

Thank you so much! I knew there were a couple things wrong with my essay but I didn't know how to fix them. Your video really help me focus on what is important and stopped me from overthinking everything (like I usually do). Your points rlly transform a dull and boring essay to something more natural and personal and I appreciate that. Good Luck to the Class of 2021!!!!

Thank you so much for this! I just finished my freshman year, and I’m applying for certain scholarships that require essays. I’m new to this and these tips really gave me a good idea what I should and shouldn’t now and in the future for when I am going to be applying for colleges.

haley, you have yet again come through with a very helpful and insightful video. Thanks a ton for your points and tips!

In today's episode of taking writing advice that I should've learned in school but didn't from a stranger:

this was one of the best college essay advices videos i’ve watched! thank you so much :)

am i just tripping or does she look like the asian version of brooke hyland from dance moms....... these tips were so good tho

There are some people who just get this and other people who don’t, I’m glad that someone who gets it is finally talking about it

+1 sub. absolutely the best advice ive seen on youtube, original and important stuff. also you made it so easy to understand in the context of my own essay and find what I need to work on. thanks so much

Hearing about what shouldn’t be in essays and me not having to fix anything makes me so happy 🥴

This is really good advice! I’m done with college essays but I just started tutoring juniors and man, this is definitely giving me ptsd

This video REALLY helped me I can already see where I might have to fix my essay so I’m glad I found this

This has actually been most helpful video I’ve watched so far! Thanks for the descriptive examples!

I blame MLA.

thank you so much, i truly didnt realize how important of a catalyst in our essay was

thank you sooooooooo much! the common app just opened today and I've really been thinking about what to write and how to write it.

This was so helpful. I’m an international student so you can imagine what a struggle this is for me! 😂 I really hope I’ll write a good essay now, since I didn’t start yet hehe

This was super helpful. Thanks! Also you have really good vibes like you radiate good person energy

Its so hard to follow what's the right thing to do when It comes to college essays but its so easy to follow "what not do to" thanks for sharing these invaluable college insights

wow the first one made me so glad i chose to use something that is very personal to me as a metaphor. i used a fountain pen that i wrote with everyday when i lived in Vietnam, and i wanted the pen to represent my experience living in Vietnam. i then use a pencil in contrast to the pen. the pencil represents my new life here in America. idk i kind of wanted to show the differences i saw from living in both countries and tell the readers how i adjusted to a new country and how that experience molded me into who i am...? if that makes sense

How can you explain everything so clear! Glad to watch this before application.

Thank you so much I was really about to give up on writing my common app essay now I know how I want to tweak it!

WHY IS THE COMING INTO MY RECCOMENDED AFTER I SUBMITTED MY APP

I often help edit essays and although I feel that your tips are very helpful, I slightly disagree with the direct statements. Although of course it is always best for you to be as descriptive as possible and not just have a simple formula of “I feel=this” sometimes direct statements help cut back on the building up to whatever you may have actually learned or felt about that situation. Of course too much of anything can be bad, but using a direct statement and then following up with examples is a good way to cut down on what could be several sentences about what you “feel.” Especially if what you are discussing had many different layers and events.

this was so helpful!! when i’m talking about myself, how do I avoid sounding cocky if i want to “hype myself up” 😄

Good tips! Your personality is really fun and your editing was really entertaining lol

OMG THANKYOU, I’ve been stressing! This was super helpful💗

working on my essay now! this is really helpful, thank you!!!

Your channel is SO GOOD!!! YOU have a great potential! Wish you millions of subscribers!

your videos are always so helpful! I love you and your channel sm

you are so unbelievably helpful i am so grateful for you

Me: So... Common App: *C A P*

This video was REALLY helpful, thank you so much. I have NEVER written an essay before (I'm a senior), and I'm freaking out

Hopefully this helps me to fix my College essays that I need to avoid, I always struggled trying to redoing them whenever I tried to memorize the topics. It always happens to me over, over and over again for the last few years!! This has gone far enough for me. I hope this changes me.

Thank you so much Haley! Love your efforts

thank you!! this advice so unique and useful compared to the generic videos

ur voice is so soothing!!!

"Don't make metaphors" my essay prompt: *Explain how you play a role of a bridge in your daily life* Yeah, sooo--- sprinkle in a bit of those metaphors now shall we?

I loved this! I hope your channel really blows up!

This is legitimately good, original advice! Thank you!

thank you for the tips!! ur voice is rly pretty ❤️

this, was a blessing from my recommendations page. THANK YOU

Hi! Great tips! I’m an English teacher of high school (20 years). Clicked on this out of curiosity. Yes - Good work!

Not me watching this literally 2 days before I need to have my essay finished

Time to redo my essay😂

this is INCREDIBLY helpful 🙏🏼

dang, you were so descriptive! I took notes, thank you!

this was so helpful, thank you!! 💗

Thanks! I have a feeling your advice is gonna be really helpful. 😊

Thank you so much! I found this really useful 😊

this is super helpful, thank you for making this!!

I’m so happy this video exists

me crying cus all these college essay videos are being recommended to me NOW and i just graduated high school 💔 anyway i know this will be so helpful for all of u applying to college

Thanks sm for the fresh perspective!

Super helpful! Thanks for the advice!

this was so informative and helpful. thank youuuu !! :)

so u rlly like the phrase "at the end of the day"

I'm watching this after I already sent in my apps woops. My essay was about learning via life experience and it's kinda full of direct statements

This video is stupid, is what some people may say opening this video. But I think she did a really good job, I watched the entire video. Every statement was very well described. I don't know what it is she does but she made crucial points after crucial point. Your pronunciation and speech adds to the mental picture you were creating, in my mind.

At the end of the dayyy,, Great tips! 😁