OK but Greg in his second book: "Verbal language is stupid, because it helps cause genocide" Greg in his third book: "Yeah, Daniel just committed mass genocide lmao"

HE TOOK HIS DADDY ISSUES SO FAR AS TO PROJECT THEM UNTO GOD HIMSELF I'M DEAD

This feels a lot like how RPGs start and end. First Mission: Investigate the Creak Last Mission: *DEFEAT GOD*

Onision literally used the “He went in creative mode” as the main plot point

Finally we can say it boys. Twilight is a better love story than Reaper's Creek

Daniel: Yaaaay! Children and parents now have the power to instinctively find each other no matter where they are! Abusive Parents: Yaaaaay! Now we can find our victims no matter where they hide!

Ironic how an atheist is so obsessed with playing God.

Theory: Daniel and Julia have a child: Theresa Sullivan, aka protagonist of the terrible book titled Empress Theresa. They give her to regular people because they seem like the type of people to do that. God-Mom is now a grandmother, so she'll spoil her granddaughter. Theresa is spoiled so much that she gets HAL's powers, can screw up the planet without consequence, and has everybody love her to a cult-like extent. But hey, that's just a theory! A BOOK THEORY! Aaaaand cut. (sorry not sorry)

Reminds me of when you play pretend with that annoying kid who just says “no actually I was too fast and beat you, no actually I have a secret superpower that makes it impossible to die”

I think Onision only hates the Christian God simply because he’s jealous of him the same way some 14 year old girl would be jealous of some famous celebrity. He just WISHES he could be God.

"We have an overpowered fourteen year old, his overpowered reanimated corpse, going up against the last third of God." How... did he manage to make a fight that is *that* description... BORING?

2:24 Oh, right, the assassin. The assassin for Julia. The assassin chosen specifically to kill Julia. Julia's assassin.

You and Strange Aeons have been too kind with all this onion boy lately

When Daniel becomes "a different person" his hair turns from brown to golden blonde. Daniel goes Super Saiyan.

"There are a number of ways you can kill a child god, It's not that dificult" Is a sentence i never thought i would hear in a book review.

Just realizing he's wearing gloves like the book is a biohazard

"nails became as strong as steel" That sounds fun for anyone with ingrown toenail.

"There are a number of ways to kill a child, God. It's not that difficult!" -KrimsonRogue Quote's out of context are the best.

This book terrifies me not because of the pedophilia, but because this is a window into Onision's god complex. We have a child who would be a horrifying villain in just about any other work of fiction being presented as not just a hero, but a self-insert for the author. Onision is telling us that this is what he'd do if he had this power.

Me before watching this: My writing is terrible, I'll never finish my story! Me after watching this: Never mind, I can't possibly be worse than this.

imagine harry potter killing voldemort and the dialogue is just “as soon as i realized who he was i killed voldemort so fast, his face fell flat in his noodles. 🤪”

This story makes so much more sense if we just assume Daniel got knocked into a coma by the school bully in the forest aaaaaaaaall the way back at the beginning of the book and the rest of this is his fever-dream as his parents turn off the life support and he... (wait for it)... rapidly ceasing to exist!

When you said Daniel was setting out to fix society, I thought he was going to use his mind-control powers to take away all violent/pervy impulses from humans. That would be invasive but understandable. But giving people CLAWS and greater strength and NOT fixing those impulses? How is that going to DECREASE their ability to hurt each other? Also, making parents and children always able to find each other seems like a good thing until you remember all the abusive relationships in this book alone. Jeez.

"A man who looked like what most anyone would imagine God to be." ... So... Morgan Freeman?

"The grim reaper has come to kill our main character." DO IT, DO IT, DO IT, DO IT, DO IT, DO IT, DO IT, DO IT!

So: - Manipulating - Limiting contact with girl parents - Not being liked by girl father - Assuming he is always right and other people are wrong - Underage relationship Who does that remind us of now? Hmm... Cant wrap my Kombucha around it...

When he was crashing through yards I imagined him T-posing with his legs closed. Just sliding hundreds of miles.

Anyone who questions why God let's bad things happen to the people he made has clearly never played the sims

Greg in the Reaper's Creek Forward: This is just a book about me, Greg in chapter 14 of Reaper's Creek: Here's how me and my clone would kill god,

HES WEARING GLOVES HES SUCH A and I can't stress this enough SAVAGE

"he was wearing a funny costume, i bet he thought highly of himself" 1) WHAT 2) THIS GUY SHOT YOUR GIRLFRIEND AND THIS IS WHAT YOU SAY?

"I laughed and grabbed her by the throat." - Joker (2019, dir. Todd Phillips)

Greg bashes Christianity and proclaims atheism, yet calls his "gift" a god given one. Inconsistent rot

"It cannot get worse than this" Do not tempt the Onion

Chrimson: "It can not get worse, than this." Empress Theresa entered the chat.

“At least he’s not into incest” well that aged poorly

Daniel's girlfriend forgave him for murdering her dad, then giving them a coffin full of money as compensation But his mother couldn't for making his eyes explode once years ago, which immediately grew back 😔

Humanity: Twilight has the worst love story in fiction Onision: hold my beer

Krimson: Agent 47 usually uses a suit with a red tie,not something funny. Agent 47: Aight,im bouta go get my fish and clown suit.

I can fix this entire book with a simple thing excluding the obvious errors and shitty descriptions: Have Daniel kill god's dad and in his final breath, have him say "And the cycle repeats.......". This will create a subversive ending that was less of a Gary Stu becoming a god but instead a boy driven to madness by his own powers. This will justify his actions as we see them get more cruel and brutal. Daniel resets the universe and makes a new one where everything is as he plans, The Body becomes the new grim reaper and the rocks are formed to give certain mortals powers that will eventually make them part of Daniel's army. The story can end with a simple child simply referred to as "the child" discovering it's powers the same way that Daniel did all those years ago in a final chapter told from the third person and it finishes by saying "like I was told, 'the cycle repeats'." Sure you'll need to make some extra tweaks to make this work organically but this can actually work in theory. In addition, a potential sequel could involve said child try and break said cycle. An actual underdog who gets corrupted by the same way Daniel was but eventually when he understands why all this happened (maybe through an interaction with The Body or Julie) he decides that if he kills god (Daniel), it will all happen again, leading to a complex dilemma. Let a mad god rule over everyone and everything or become just like said god and be separated with what friends he has. Edit: so with a few years of experience writing my own characters later, I have come with some more albeit minor details, even one that kinda can explain THAT scene (albeit it should still be cut down and toned down for the love of all that is sacred). So what if Daniel’s descent into absolute insanity and godhood was a case of a somewhat misguided boy getting increasingly arrogant as his views on good and evil slowly become more and more extreme as a result of his time with his powers fueling his expanding ego. What if all of this makes him crooked as he eventually begins to use his little hypnosis powers to gain favors and THAT scene could be followed by a moment of clarity in which he frees the people he hypnotized including Julie. This bit of clarity doesn’t last long. Juuust long enough for the reader to think that he’s gonna actually change for the better by forgoing his powers and hiding away. He’d probably fall back to his old ways via an alien attack in which at first he tries to kills as few people as possible yet the power trip was too fun for him to stop and he commits a genocide. That or it’s where the plot escalates to the “kill god” section. And when he becomes the new god, he spares Julie because he holds just a small sliver of pity for what he did to her. This could aid as a motivation for her regarding the whole follow-up book idea I mentioned earlier. Alas, as one of the replies here mentioned, Onision either isn’t creative enough or has enough humility to make a character who isn’t a shallow power fantasy self insert.

“So women have teeth in their vaginas now eh Daniel” 1 second 2 seconds 3 seconds *Dies*

The Anti-Onision Literature Club is being blessed all over these past two days huh?

I've read a good advice in one Russian writer's blog. It goes like this: To understand how good or dumb your plot is, pretend to write a letter to some close person, like your mother, as if you've been describing them the whole plot. I don't think Onision would have any quantity of honesty to drop everything right after the kid uses powers for the first time, let alone the darn child porn scenes. I can't comprehend the fact that this garbage gets published and sold. It's literally another terrible fanfic you'd see on the internet.

24:03 There's a story in hindu mythology wherein someone gets a blessing that does 2 things:- 1. It gives him a long healthy life of 200 years. 2. It allows him to make anyone to sit on a particular chair as long as he wants when he wants. He can only do it once. Then, when Yamraj(The God of Death) comes to collect him he uses it it to pin him to the chair prevent himself from dying. This also prevents everyone else from dying. Hell ensues, and he eventually gives himself to Yamraj to stop it.

First Miss Æons yesterday and now Krimson? Y E S CHOPPED BE THOSE ONIONS

I love how greg is so unimaginative with something as unique as a battle between two metaphysical all powerful deities and turns it into a generic slug fest

Listening to this plot summary is like listening to a child describing their dreams

Fun thing is Onision's omnipotent Self insert would probably make a pretty intimidating villain Like a sociopathic kid with limitless powers who can rewrite the laws of physics sounds like some cool anime villain shit

Dude if I woke up with teeth in my vag I would not be thanking *anyone* ...Not a sentence I ever imagined myself saying

"Dude, enough with the religion bashing." -Me, an atheist

The coffin spawning scene could have been amazing comedy if it was magically transplanted into a good novel.

Nietzsche: I wrote that the ideal man must "kill God", as a representation of a man divorcing himself from societal values to forge his own moral code, to then influence the rest of mankind with it Onision, buying replica Blades of Chaos online from his mom's basement: *BOY*

can't wait to feel even better as a writer.

If you ever think you have an inflated self esteem, console yourself with the fact that you've never imagined yourself as a better version of God who gets laid a lot.

I have now spent about 2 1/2 hours watching a book reviewer that I have never seen before ripping apart a terrible book written by a creepy KZfaqr who I have never heard of before. What am I doing with my life? Eh, oh well. Subscribed.

'You'll never get away with this! Fuck you, Batman!' I don't know if it was how you said it, the line itself, or the combination of the two, but I couldn't stop laughing here for nearly a solid minute.

"It's not that hard to kill a child, God." paraphrased is one of the funnies things I've ever heard lmao

no one: greg: god bad

The writing from Onision genuinely gives me fond memories of the kind of scribblings myself and other children would write in elementary/primary school: incoherent, unexplained, poor grammar and spelling. In children, it has the innocence of someone that doesn't quite understand the world, how it works and how other people will think, read and react both for the context of the story and the reader. It is however, no innocence for Onision, more a concern.

let’s not forget the fact that onion has a “doll” for lewd purposes that he called julia so......

"After The Body killed God, he ran for Governor of Minnesota and won."

Time to rewrite the ending with Kull, starting from where greg/daniel goes to confront him. Kull sits in his throne, a cheek resting on his hand. The room's nearly completely dark, with the only light seeping in throw incomprehensible writings on the walls. Daniel recognizes it has the same kind of code he uses, but it's nearly indecipherable to him. Instantly, daniel does what he always does and tries instantly smiting Kull. But it has no effect. In fact, nothing even happens. No lightning, no explosions, no disintegrations, Kull just sat there, look at Daniel with his sunken eyes. Daniel looks to the body for help, but as soon as he does, the body falls apart like sand onto the floor, quickly disappearing afterwords. Daniel's reduced to the status of a child. No, not even that, of a new born maggot, unable to even crawl on it's own. "You think I didn't see this a million times?" Kull says, cracking a smile. "Omniscience. It's a boring thing. But even without that, nothing you do here would work." Daniel looks around, panacing, all the control he loved stripped away in a heart beat. "We use the same type of "code, that's what you called it, right?" Kull mocks. "The difference is that I've had an eternity to master mine, you've only had years." "Listen here-" Daniel starts but his words disapeared. His mouth moved, he wanted to, needed to talk, but nothing came out. Even his own voice inside is head vanished. Kull can't help but chuckle at this and says "Ever time something get's a hand at the "code" they always think they're so high and mighty. You. That "god" all of them. Speak." Daniel begins berating him for creating God, for allowing suffering in the world, for all the horrors and atrocities to have every happened. And just as quickly as his voice returned, it left. And Kull begins speaking again. "I don't do any of that. That stuff happens on it's own. That "god" guy was just like you, someone who saw between the thread sin the universe and learned how to manipulate them. No different then I. Except I know how to handle being a "god" amongst those so called. I found my "code" so long ago that I can't even remember. And when the universe dies, I reset it. There's millions like you with that same power, all at varying degrees across this universe. Welcome to the club kid." Whelp that was a fun exercise in how to rewrite a story Good night everyone!

If I wake up with vagina teeth, I'm having a fucking psychotic breakdown because that shit is terrifying and I can't even run away from it because its attached to me. I'd never be able to look at that part of my body ever again, I'd be trying to repress that horrifying memory from my brain. I'd probably shower with underwear on just to make sure I can't be reminded of it.

Just think, if a GOOD writer got a title like "Reaper's Creek" it could have been like, a cool supernatural mystery like a creek that gets that kind of name because unexplained dead bodies of locals keep showing up in the creek or something. And that I dunno, the culprit is death itself and maybe the people of the town were doing evil rituals and sacrifices to extend their lives and cheat death and ol' grim's just able to get their job done thanks to something with the protagonist or maybe it's a way to get into both the ups and downs of death as a concept or something. ... instead that kind of concept and title will forever be associated with a story so terrible and mastabatory, I think onion boy may have literally been fapping to his ego the entire time...

“But wait, it gets dumber!” This entire book, summed up

Regarding the whole "Parent and child can now find each other psychically" a thought I had is, when does that wear off? Like does that still work when they reach adulthood? Or is it for life? Because ignoring the problem with abusive parents because someone else already brought that up, no matter how good or well-meaning your parents are I'm sure that, say 20-year-olds like me wouldn't want their parents to know where they are at all times.

KrimsonRogue: "The Body?! Sounds like the worst pro wrestling name ever!" Jesse Ventura: "You're a dead man."

"Fingernails became strong as steel." Man, that's gonna be some tough manicures in the future.

"there was no longer an imbalance in the sexes" Did Onision just make Mpreg real?

All the same, "Hacking the universe" is a very interesting power for a villain to have if you do it right. I had an idea for one that had something like that, but agonized over ways to limit him. Hearing Onision describe it as "hacking the universe" kinda gave me a solution that would have worked wonders for his book (but didn't because that would imply Onision knew even the simplest thing about coding): If you can recode the universe then chances are you can accidentally create a myriad of bugs that break the universe.

Imagine Greg joining a D&D campaign, he would absolutely ruin the whole group.

It's Onisions self insert Death Note fanfiction that's even more poorly written then a Wattpad Naruto fanfic and extremely bad magic world lore, I am crying!

Onision legit has a God complex. Probably why he hates religion, his Siseca cult failed so he's taking his frustrations out on religion. I'm agnostic and even I'm tired of his religion bashing

Sisyphus, the man who cheated death. -Locked him (death/Thanatos) into a box -Lied to Persephone He was punished for eternity to roll a boulder up a hill where it would roll down the other side. There he was to push the boulder again. A pointless task. Just as it is pointless to defy death. Clearly, someone has not read that story before.

3:55 I'm sorry, but my brain, in a desperate attempt to find something enjoyable in this book, replaced "Time for punishment" with Monokuma's silly little, "Let's give it everything we've got! It's punishment time!" Definitely an improvement.

“There are a number of ways to kill a child, God; it’s not that difficult!” - Krimson, 2019

For all of the “shock value”’ in this book, it’s incredibly boring.

It's like Greg watched all of Bad Writing Advice (great show, btw), and took it all as ACTUAL advice.

23:50 Also he "Contained" Death But didn't did the same with: Illnes, plague, hunguer, pain, madness, age , etc. Etc. Imagine being so sick that your body can't stand itself and you can't die.

when he started explaining the black stone i couldn’t stop laughing because the only thing i could think of was a brain tumor

I keep picturing The Body as completely limp, limbs flapping in the wind as it flies through the air.

"God is A less impressive version of Voldemort" is the best out-of-context sentence in The History of ever.

"Agent 47 likes to wear something inconspicuous like a suit with a red tie." Agent 47: Nods approvingly. "I don't see a lot of assassins wearing funny costumes." Agent 47: Sweats nervously.

This book should be called, "The Edgelord's Guide To Atheism."

thank you Krimson, this makes me feel even better about my incest gnomeo and Juliet bdsm smut fanfiction

"Daniel The God-Butcher" doesn't have quite as good a ring to it as "Gorr The Godbutcher".

Imagine if the story was about exploring the ways becoming a god could change someone and the world. It would be a great story. Oh wait, Watchmen already exists.

the term "Gary-Stu" should be changed to 'Greg-Stu" hahaha

Just remember that a forest rapidly ceased to exist so that copies of this book could be published.

The edge is so strong that I cutted myself in half.

As a Christian, its funny that he made God a monster, but yet not only God is actually loving god who is faithful to He's creations, but Onision is truly an evil person and has done equally as fucked as he portrayed God. Ironic. And also Onision actually tried to start a failed religion that was pretty much a ripoff of Buddhism (No offense to Buddhists).

Government uses Onision's books to torture terrorists into giving away location of their base.

"but wait, it gets dumber" may as well have been the title of the book

this review is a comfort for me, because every time i come back to this, im reminded that if i do write something, the bar for a BAD story is so low, i'd have to actively dig under said bad to be worse than onision

"It can't get worse than this." Laughs in Empress Theresa

Being a victim doesn't make a character an underdog by default

Think about this: Onison thought this book was worth actual MONEY He thought this book was worth MONEY

The fact that Daniel keeps getting more evil while while his powers develop would be cool if I thought onion boy actually knew he did it

It would've been cool if it did turn out that Daniel had been controlling Julia. Then when he puts the stone in her head because he thinks they're in love, shiboom shibang, she regains awareness on top of having the same powers as Daniel. So she remembers all the stuff they did, how he forced her into sleeping with him, and so tried to take revenge. Better yet if she actually succeeds, she destroys Daniel and takes up the mantle of MC. Then... Idk, she tries making alterations but then screws everything up and so ends the world along with herself. It would still be stupid but at least it would be interesting.

“...But this assumes that Death itself is an evil thing...” Well for narcissists like Greg, Death IS a bad thing. That means that they can’t continue the show they think they inhabit and that no one can gaze upon their ever lasting glory. It also means that eventually they’ll be forgotten. Source: Experience with narcissists who use threat of suicide as a means of manipulation